Freestylin'
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Black and White"A collection of poems about writing
6 total reviews
Comment from ajdevore
Oh you made this a hard choice. That demon of doubt that plagues us all, undermining our confidence, baring progress. So well painted in this submission.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Oh you made this a hard choice. That demon of doubt that plagues us all, undermining our confidence, baring progress. So well painted in this submission.
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you, your comments are mcu happreciated - Cally :)
Comment from Connie C
This is beautiful. I love the free style and the rhyme that is thrown in there as well. But mostly I just love the language, the images, and the way it all comes together. It's too bad this is in a writing prompt contest, as it should be out there with full exposure on the front page of FanStory! Excellent entry! Connie
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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This is beautiful. I love the free style and the rhyme that is thrown in there as well. But mostly I just love the language, the images, and the way it all comes together. It's too bad this is in a writing prompt contest, as it should be out there with full exposure on the front page of FanStory! Excellent entry! Connie
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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Hi Connie,
and thank you so much for getting this!
...and for the wonderful compliment. I really enjoyed writing this, and reading your review. Thank you :)
Comment from mumsyone
this friendly fiend
a fickle fairy
with multiple personality disorder
two sides in constant battle
determined to rattle
my cage
This is an interesting poem about your muse, and the last verse gave me a chuckle. Good job!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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this friendly fiend
a fickle fairy
with multiple personality disorder
two sides in constant battle
determined to rattle
my cage
This is an interesting poem about your muse, and the last verse gave me a chuckle. Good job!
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you very much - Cally :)
Comment from Bobbi22
The battle of the muse. You have angels and fairies and the demon tries to chase them away. Sounds like you had the whimsy waft around today as this is a very well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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The battle of the muse. You have angels and fairies and the demon tries to chase them away. Sounds like you had the whimsy waft around today as this is a very well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Ha ha! Yes, I think so, but she is so fickle, and today I'm not so sure. LOL
Thank you for your kind review - Cally :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
wings of whimsy waft
her wonder to the world << wonderful alliteration
guided / gilded << Great together in that line
tie up mind with half truths and lies << well said
Yes, a split personality indeed. We all have that battle raging. VERY well written. A great entry! :)
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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wings of whimsy waft
her wonder to the world << wonderful alliteration
guided / gilded << Great together in that line
tie up mind with half truths and lies << well said
Yes, a split personality indeed. We all have that battle raging. VERY well written. A great entry! :)
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much, Phyllis Stewart. I really enjoyed writing this one.
- Cally :)
Comment from FlorrieFan
Good strong imagery. A complete story about the two selves residing within you; I can identify! Good use of rhythm, rhyme, and alliteration. A dramatic poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Good strong imagery. A complete story about the two selves residing within you; I can identify! Good use of rhythm, rhyme, and alliteration. A dramatic poem.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, FlorrieFan.
That muse, she is such a fickle one, isn't she? LOL
Thanks again - Cally :)
