Summer
Doesn't this bring back memories?12 total reviews
Comment from Alexmi1984
That's got to be the loveliest definition of summer that I have ever read. It was short, sweet, delicate and I loved it.
Alex :)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
That's got to be the loveliest definition of summer that I have ever read. It was short, sweet, delicate and I loved it.
Alex :)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2012
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Thank you. :)
Comment from mariya gebura
Bright long days of fun
Where you can swim all day while
Being with your friends.
I love it but I don't know why you choose that picture.
I think you should put that picture if you write a
poem/story a bout the forest.
I love your work but can you write more so I can read more of your work!!
Keep up the good work.:) :)
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
Bright long days of fun
Where you can swim all day while
Being with your friends.
I love it but I don't know why you choose that picture.
I think you should put that picture if you write a
poem/story a bout the forest.
I love your work but can you write more so I can read more of your work!!
Keep up the good work.:) :)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2012
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Sure, thank you. ^^ I actually posted some stories on my profile because I'm not a member. ^^ I hope you'll enjoy reading them. =)
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YOUR WELCOME!!!
Comment from Anastajiya
Isn't this so exceptional! Beautiful I say beautiful! This is such nice piece of writing. You should become a member. I checked the ratings and started laughing! In my opinion this is a great piece of writing. I could even feel as if I was in the poem. This made me feel happy that summer for me has finally come!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
Isn't this so exceptional! Beautiful I say beautiful! This is such nice piece of writing. You should become a member. I checked the ratings and started laughing! In my opinion this is a great piece of writing. I could even feel as if I was in the poem. This made me feel happy that summer for me has finally come!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much! ^_^
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Your welcome
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written ,with a beautiful summer scene painted with your words ,you have done well using the limitations of the form good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
This is very well written ,with a beautiful summer scene painted with your words ,you have done well using the limitations of the form good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thank you!
Comment from dbmccarter
This depicts the lazy hazy days of summer in a great way. These short forms allow you to say a lot in a few words. I think this should do very well in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
This depicts the lazy hazy days of summer in a great way. These short forms allow you to say a lot in a few words. I think this should do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thank you!
Comment from RalphNater
This is a good 5-7-5 about summer. Personally though, I think it's a bit too literal for me. That's not saying it's bad by any means but I feel maybe it could be a touch more poetic. If I'm missing a deeper meaning then please let me know and I will adjust my rating. Keep writing always.
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
This is a good 5-7-5 about summer. Personally though, I think it's a bit too literal for me. That's not saying it's bad by any means but I feel maybe it could be a touch more poetic. If I'm missing a deeper meaning then please let me know and I will adjust my rating. Keep writing always.
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Thank you!
Comment from Maria C.
Hi MandiLina,
Your message is excellent but I need to tell you that 5/7/5 is the syllable count not the word count. Your last line has eight syllables. Maybe you could just leave off company and change in to with & you would have your five syllables. It would read "being with your friends." It still has the same message that way. I am giving you a four star rating but if you fix it I will adjust it to a five star rating.
Blessings,
Maria C.
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
Hi MandiLina,
Your message is excellent but I need to tell you that 5/7/5 is the syllable count not the word count. Your last line has eight syllables. Maybe you could just leave off company and change in to with & you would have your five syllables. It would read "being with your friends." It still has the same message that way. I am giving you a four star rating but if you fix it I will adjust it to a five star rating.
Blessings,
Maria C.
Comment Written 28-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-May-2012
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okay. I'll do it. Sorry, I thought there wasn't enough syllables.
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No worry. I know you are new to the site. (Welcome by the way.)You will learn a lot. I really have. Once you change it I will change your rating to a 5. :)
Blessings,
Maria
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I did. Check it out.
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I did. It still looks the same. Be sure and hit save after you make your correction.
hugs,
Maria
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oh right. I might've forgotten to save the changes. I spend so much time writing npon-stop that I tend to forget to save. Sorry
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Good! Much better. I went back and changed your rating to a five. Good luck to you in the contest. Hugs from Maria
Comment from jaeladarling
A bit of a stretch with "being" used for two syllables. Maybe "laughing" or something with more obvious syllables would work better for a poetic style reliant on syllable count.
Other than that, I find this to be a fun, frolicking sort of poem that should make your readers smile. :) Nice work and good luck!
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
A bit of a stretch with "being" used for two syllables. Maybe "laughing" or something with more obvious syllables would work better for a poetic style reliant on syllable count.
Other than that, I find this to be a fun, frolicking sort of poem that should make your readers smile. :) Nice work and good luck!
Comment Written 27-May-2012
reply by the author on 27-May-2012
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thank you ^_^
sorry, I kept everything small to make it easy to count the syllables
Comment from cherylmelwoods
For someone that doesn't like poetry, what is this? No offense to your piece but I found the words overly SIMPLE. Suggest you increase your vocabulary . Needs ALOT OF WORK.
Cheryl
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reply by the author on 26-May-2012
For someone that doesn't like poetry, what is this? No offense to your piece but I found the words overly SIMPLE. Suggest you increase your vocabulary . Needs ALOT OF WORK.
Cheryl
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Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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its the only way I could be sure to have 5-7-5. Plus simple is EASY TO UNDERSTAND.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi MandyLina! This is a terrific 5/7/5 poem. Your syllables are perfect. A lovely description of summer! I can just picture it. I can feel the tired feeling of a long day of fun and I'm laying on the beach soaking up the sun. Best wishes to you in this contest. You have a fine entry here :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
Hi MandyLina! This is a terrific 5/7/5 poem. Your syllables are perfect. A lovely description of summer! I can just picture it. I can feel the tired feeling of a long day of fun and I'm laying on the beach soaking up the sun. Best wishes to you in this contest. You have a fine entry here :)
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thanks! Too bad I can't enter that love free verse poem contest, eh?
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I don't know how those things work on this site. Where abouts in Canada are you? You should check out Gungalo's poems. Then again you might be too young for her stuff LOL.
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BC. Its nice here. XD
U should take a glance at my book. Its published =)
Here's my sample.