Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Anna's in a coma."Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, these sort of scenes always make me
so emotional. A touching chapter, Barbara.
Tears enteredBetty's eyes.- might I suggest..
Tears stung Betty's eyes. - 0r misted
Last evening, we watched the old epic film.. Ben Hur and
I wept solidly all through the scene when Jesus was made to carry the cross wwhile wearing a crown of thorns on His head...
Margaret
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Oh, these sort of scenes always make me
so emotional. A touching chapter, Barbara.
Tears enteredBetty's eyes.- might I suggest..
Tears stung Betty's eyes. - 0r misted
Last evening, we watched the old epic film.. Ben Hur and
I wept solidly all through the scene when Jesus was made to carry the cross wwhile wearing a crown of thorns on His head...
Margaret
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Ben Hur is a good movie. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fionna barr
Oh, that is so touching. A mother's love conquers all. You have written this with such sensitivity. It really tugs at the heartstrings. Well done.
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Oh, that is so touching. A mother's love conquers all. You have written this with such sensitivity. It really tugs at the heartstrings. Well done.
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from Aarondodd1989
A touching piece for sure.
Can a child's voice really bring a mother out of a coma... I'm not sure but this will give a lot of hope to people who want someone to recover from something and you deserve applause for that.
This si very well written and tugs at our emotions. A piece form the heart.
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A touching piece for sure.
Can a child's voice really bring a mother out of a coma... I'm not sure but this will give a lot of hope to people who want someone to recover from something and you deserve applause for that.
This si very well written and tugs at our emotions. A piece form the heart.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, this was a stirring chapter. Of course patients in a coma respond. My mom had been a coma for a week and when she sensed her kids were beside her she was out of it in 3 days. This so reminded me of that time. Well written. luv jada
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Hi Barbie, this was a stirring chapter. Of course patients in a coma respond. My mom had been a coma for a week and when she sensed her kids were beside her she was out of it in 3 days. This so reminded me of that time. Well written. luv jada
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement. When you mom came out of the coma did she talk right away?
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yep - it was as if she'd been sleeping. She felt and heard her kids around her. The doctor had called us as she was dying. She lived from February to August that year. luv jada
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thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RaymondJohn
Very dramatic scene. I'm not familiar with the cause of her paralysis, but it is good she is recovering. Good use of dialog. Best wishes. Ray.
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Very dramatic scene. I'm not familiar with the cause of her paralysis, but it is good she is recovering. Good use of dialog. Best wishes. Ray.
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from Sefiros
I remember enough of the backstory to recognize what's going on. I would like to say that while your chapter is heartfelt it is a bit predictable and sappy. Troy's admissions that Anna is a fighter or the unbelieving doctor are just a bit cheesy. However I am interested in how this turns out. Keep going.
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I remember enough of the backstory to recognize what's going on. I would like to say that while your chapter is heartfelt it is a bit predictable and sappy. Troy's admissions that Anna is a fighter or the unbelieving doctor are just a bit cheesy. However I am interested in how this turns out. Keep going.
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Thank you.
Comment from bookishfabler
Another well written chapter in your novel. This one in particular was a sensitive sweet chapter. Very touching. Thank you for sharing. You write very carefully, I didn't catch any nits
hugs Heidi
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Another well written chapter in your novel. This one in particular was a sensitive sweet chapter. Very touching. Thank you for sharing. You write very carefully, I didn't catch any nits
hugs Heidi
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robina1978
I loved how you described how it can work with a coma. Hearing her son's voice gives a reaction. This means the rest will come too.
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I loved how you described how it can work with a coma. Hearing her son's voice gives a reaction. This means the rest will come too.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
This was really great. Almost all dialogue, makes it move along fast and furious. On that note, I might want to trim it just a bit here wherever you can, maybe tone down the number of ''mama mama mama'' just a bit, and maybe lose a few repetitive bits, so as not to bog down what would otherwise move along at a good, steady pace.
Well written and suspenseful. good job. keep going...
cheers
js
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This was really great. Almost all dialogue, makes it move along fast and furious. On that note, I might want to trim it just a bit here wherever you can, maybe tone down the number of ''mama mama mama'' just a bit, and maybe lose a few repetitive bits, so as not to bog down what would otherwise move along at a good, steady pace.
Well written and suspenseful. good job. keep going...
cheers
js
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Thank you for the kind review. I repeated myself quite a bit, because someone doesn't come out of a coma fast, and I wanted it to take time and I didn't know how else to do it.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Anna sure is a fighter and if anyone can bring her out of a coma Michael will. Great chapter with consistent characters and good dialogue
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Anna sure is a fighter and if anyone can bring her out of a coma Michael will. Great chapter with consistent characters and good dialogue
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Thank you for the kind review.
