Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Anna's in a coma."Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from eliz100
Another good read from beginning to end. I think you portrayed well that doctors are not always correct and the mother child bond is especially strong.
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Another good read from beginning to end. I think you portrayed well that doctors are not always correct and the mother child bond is especially strong.
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Blurch
Your dialog is believalbe and this is written well. I haven't read the story so I can't say anything about the plot but you seem to be doing a really good job.
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Your dialog is believalbe and this is written well. I haven't read the story so I can't say anything about the plot but you seem to be doing a really good job.
Comment Written 15-May-2012
reply by the author on 15-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
This is another great post. I am so glad Anna seems to be waking from her coma. The scenes with her son were so heartbreaking and touching. It goes to show there is no greater bond than that between mother and child. I can't wait to read what happens next. I really hope Anna and Troy get their happy ending.
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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This is another great post. I am so glad Anna seems to be waking from her coma. The scenes with her son were so heartbreaking and touching. It goes to show there is no greater bond than that between mother and child. I can't wait to read what happens next. I really hope Anna and Troy get their happy ending.
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Thank you for kind review and your encouragement.
Comment from inkedone
I really like the dialogue in thes story. It really flows well and doesn't seem forced. Your characters are believable and the setting is easy to visualize.
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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I really like the dialogue in thes story. It really flows well and doesn't seem forced. Your characters are believable and the setting is easy to visualize.
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written it is true to life about what happens when someone is in a coma you brought the characters to life well I enjoyed regards Fuller Jill
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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This is very well written it is true to life about what happens when someone is in a coma you brought the characters to life well I enjoyed regards Fuller Jill
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JW
This is another good chapter. And it does a great job of progressing the story.
However, the line:
"Comatose patients don't respond to outside stimuli."
really made me really wonder about the doctor since the opposite is quite true - comatose patients have been known to respond to outside stimuli.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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This is another good chapter. And it does a great job of progressing the story.
However, the line:
really made me really wonder about the doctor since the opposite is quite true - comatose patients have been known to respond to outside stimuli.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Not a problem. The research I have done said they really don't know if they can or not. It seems that the verdict is out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from harmony13
Hi! Because I didn't read the first part - I was confused
however it did not stop me from reading on. It held my interest and knowing a little about the background made me
curious. Anna appeared to be a fighter and seemed to
respond to Michael. Troy seemed to care and the scene in
itself was filled with emotion.....Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Hi! Because I didn't read the first part - I was confused
however it did not stop me from reading on. It held my interest and knowing a little about the background made me
curious. Anna appeared to be a fighter and seemed to
respond to Michael. Troy seemed to care and the scene in
itself was filled with emotion.....Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
A hopeful sign of recovery, so the prognosis improves. The story moves forward another notch, raising the hope of a good ending and perhaps a happy ever after for the lady.
Nicely done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Hi Barbara,
A hopeful sign of recovery, so the prognosis improves. The story moves forward another notch, raising the hope of a good ending and perhaps a happy ever after for the lady.
Nicely done.
Patrick
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Sloegin
As usual your writing is great. I was breezing through when you brought me to a dead stop. The line, "a smile crept across the doctor's lips" How about something like; A smile forced it's way across the usually stern, professional features of the doctor. I think it was the word, lips that was out of place.
I know you had to mention how many times Anna's eyes opened and closed,(6) but try something different; fluttered, quivered.
I'd change: Anna is special and a fighter. To, she's special, she's a fighter.
I'm looking forward to more about Poor Anna.
Sloegin
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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As usual your writing is great. I was breezing through when you brought me to a dead stop. The line, "a smile crept across the doctor's lips" How about something like; A smile forced it's way across the usually stern, professional features of the doctor. I think it was the word, lips that was out of place.
I know you had to mention how many times Anna's eyes opened and closed,(6) but try something different; fluttered, quivered.
I'd change: Anna is special and a fighter. To, she's special, she's a fighter.
I'm looking forward to more about Poor Anna.
Sloegin
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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sorry for the tardiness of my reply. I wanted to wait until I had time to make changes.
Comment from rtobaygo
VERY SMOOTH BUT SIMPLE WORD FLOW. BOTH DIALOGUE AND NARRATIVE SECTION ARE EXCELLENT. SHORTNESS OF CHAPTER DIDN'T DIMINISH YOUR CREATIVITY. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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VERY SMOOTH BUT SIMPLE WORD FLOW. BOTH DIALOGUE AND NARRATIVE SECTION ARE EXCELLENT. SHORTNESS OF CHAPTER DIDN'T DIMINISH YOUR CREATIVITY. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW AND YOUR ENCOURAGEMENT.
