Rest
Now I lay me down to sleep26 total reviews
Comment from sugardog
A powerful, dark and sad piece, Suse. I LOVE the last line-scary but soft. I think you have real emotion as the ingredients for this write, which makes it even more dramatic and heart wrenching. Sorry you are so sad...but you write about it well. The monkeys remind me of the Wizard of Oz-they were soooooo scary!! Cheer up sweetie!! Dana
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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A powerful, dark and sad piece, Suse. I LOVE the last line-scary but soft. I think you have real emotion as the ingredients for this write, which makes it even more dramatic and heart wrenching. Sorry you are so sad...but you write about it well. The monkeys remind me of the Wizard of Oz-they were soooooo scary!! Cheer up sweetie!! Dana
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Hi there! Thank you very much for a kind and most welcome note...it's great to hear from you and I sure hope you are doing well! I'm trying to get caught up and do apologize for this inexcusable lateness! HUGS! Susan
Comment from J. P. Egry
This piece moved me deeply, partly because I know it comes from a truth deep within, and it is soul-wrenching. If it were fiction, it would be easier. The excellent writing transfers the sorrow and agony deep into the reader--which is what good writing should do. The metaphor of monkeys representing all the people/things that cause one pain works well. All the technical aspects of the writing are flawless.
I think the ending is brilliant. Even though the tiniest things can wreak even more havoc, the bare bone of us (our spirit) still shines. I'm not sure that's what you meant, but it is my interpretation.
reply by the author on 08-May-2012
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This piece moved me deeply, partly because I know it comes from a truth deep within, and it is soul-wrenching. If it were fiction, it would be easier. The excellent writing transfers the sorrow and agony deep into the reader--which is what good writing should do. The metaphor of monkeys representing all the people/things that cause one pain works well. All the technical aspects of the writing are flawless.
I think the ending is brilliant. Even though the tiniest things can wreak even more havoc, the bare bone of us (our spirit) still shines. I'm not sure that's what you meant, but it is my interpretation.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-May-2012
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Hi dear J.P. -- I thank you, not only for the kind review, but for really understanding this, that comes from deep in my soul. I am tired. That bone tired that comes from a life that has been too much. I will fight as long as I can. But the last three days, fatigue has made me so weak I can barely do dishes. Thank you again and I sure hope your life is at least for the most part stress free...love, Susan
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Please do rest and think of things that give you comfort. I feel that your writing is giving you an inner strength that perhaps can be translated to better physical strength. My prayers are for you to work toward wellness. JP
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I'm trying J.P. -- if certain 'elements' would leave me alone, I could heal and probably get back to normal. As it is, I can't...but I'll try. Your thoughts are kind and helpful my friend... :)) Susan
Comment from sasil
You break my heart with this piece, friend. Such beautiful, poignant imagery read in the hopes and dreams between the frenzied horrors of "going on." Can't find any faults with the writing--such a plaintive "voice" lifting up from these words...like the highest, last few notes of a violin. Wishing you peace and ease, Suze.
S.
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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You break my heart with this piece, friend. Such beautiful, poignant imagery read in the hopes and dreams between the frenzied horrors of "going on." Can't find any faults with the writing--such a plaintive "voice" lifting up from these words...like the highest, last few notes of a violin. Wishing you peace and ease, Suze.
S.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Hi there! Thank you very much for a kind and most welcome note...it's great to hear from you and I sure hope you are doing well! I'm trying to get caught up and do apologize for this inexcusable lateness! HUGS! Susan
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Sorry to hear of your back troubles. I am glad to see you back here writing. Take care!
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I haven't stopped altogether Lisa....but wow, it hurts to sit here! We just have to do our best? You take care too! Hello to your family!? hugs, Suse
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hell, Susan. Well you did a fine job with this piece. It was well written and your choice of words and style for expressing your emotions delivered your message with feeling and mental imagery. You're a talented writer whether writing in the warmth of a sunny day or through the chill of a late winter's rain. Looking forward to your next post...Tim
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hell, Susan. Well you did a fine job with this piece. It was well written and your choice of words and style for expressing your emotions delivered your message with feeling and mental imagery. You're a talented writer whether writing in the warmth of a sunny day or through the chill of a late winter's rain. Looking forward to your next post...Tim
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi Tim! Thank you! I am very grateful for your kind thoughts and will try to pull up out of the doldrums. Have a truly great day!! It's always nice to see you here...Susan
Comment from Skyangel02
It's a lot of fun when you let the monkeys kill you and you keep rising up again to let them kill you again the next day.
Dying daily makes life worthwhile because you get to rest in peace every night and wake up to a brand new day.
You ought to try it. Instead of fighting the monkeys, play with them. Show them who is boss. ;-)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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It's a lot of fun when you let the monkeys kill you and you keep rising up again to let them kill you again the next day.
Dying daily makes life worthwhile because you get to rest in peace every night and wake up to a brand new day.
You ought to try it. Instead of fighting the monkeys, play with them. Show them who is boss. ;-)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi again! Miss Sky...I appreciate what you're saying here. IF ONLY I could. I will try to think about how to do this...If you have time, read 'Planes, Trains, And ... ". It further 'explains' ... Sort of.? I can't win! Thank you again Sky. I do understand what you're saying...xoxo. Susan
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If you can't win, you can't lose either. There is always someone worse off than you are and someone better off than you are. I stopped trying to win and discovered that I win by helping others win. It is not about coming first. It is about being true to yourself. It is not easy because you get thoroughly rejected by many along the way but it's worth it to live in truth.
Realists are despised by those who prefer living in fantasy land. Learn to accept that reality and understand that those who live in fantasy land have no clue what they are doing or saying.
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Sky, I believe you are another old soul who is young at heart and wise to boot. I mean this in a good way. Thank you. hug. Suse
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with good imagery, I enjoyed your story and yes I love blubells.I love to see them ,and as you described them like a carpet. Mary
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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A good write with good imagery, I enjoyed your story and yes I love blubells.I love to see them ,and as you described them like a carpet. Mary
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi there! Thank you so much! It's great to see you here and I hope you're having a wonderful day! Smiles and best!! Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Susan
Your essay is profound and marvelously written with strong emotion and concrete imagery.The art work is exquisitely beautiful you used. I dig what you noted with your phrases: "I want a carpet of bluebells to cushion me as I fall" & "They kill my soul with shrieking glee. And I am dying as per their wishes." In your essay you've used great word structure, very good narrative and effective use of the writing devices of metaphor. I would recommend your well composed non-fiction story essay to other reviewers. It was a delight to have read and reviewed your writing, my friend. I encourage you to keep on writing with a creative pen. Lovely Sunday to you, my friend. I sent out my love.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Susan
Your essay is profound and marvelously written with strong emotion and concrete imagery.The art work is exquisitely beautiful you used. I dig what you noted with your phrases: "I want a carpet of bluebells to cushion me as I fall" & "They kill my soul with shrieking glee. And I am dying as per their wishes." In your essay you've used great word structure, very good narrative and effective use of the writing devices of metaphor. I would recommend your well composed non-fiction story essay to other reviewers. It was a delight to have read and reviewed your writing, my friend. I encourage you to keep on writing with a creative pen. Lovely Sunday to you, my friend. I sent out my love.
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Melissa! Thank you! I was so glad you called me and sorry I had to go so soon. I cannot talk on the phone when my kid is in the room. He won't be still. I hope you're going to get some sleep?? I bet I won't! LOL! You know why. I need to learn to review better. You do it so well! Thank you dear friend. And I hope you have a good day too! As for me, I'll have to rest when I do finally pass. Love you too Missy. Susan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
This poem is delicious in its darkness but I am sorry you feel such agony. I hope it leaves you soon. Everyone must vent now and then and this is a good place to do it. This is well written and compelling. You have earned my last six!..blessings, chey
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Susan,
This poem is delicious in its darkness but I am sorry you feel such agony. I hope it leaves you soon. Everyone must vent now and then and this is a good place to do it. This is well written and compelling. You have earned my last six!..blessings, chey
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Wow, Chey! Thank you. Just having your support helps. I hate self pity...but is sure has a grasp on me right now. I'm struggling the best I can. FS, and you, and the others are wonderful. I will never be able to put into words what this means to me. Thank you my friend. xoxo. Susan
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You are most welcome!
Comment from joann r romei
this is wonderf ul please vent again, i loved it, the stream of conciousness was so real, i have a monkey too, I call it King Kong on my back! aka :my writing habit lol
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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this is wonderf ul please vent again, i loved it, the stream of conciousness was so real, i have a monkey too, I call it King Kong on my back! aka :my writing habit lol
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Oh no. King Kong is worse...did you see the movie that starred Naomi Watts? I loved that show. Not bad special effects! Let's ride it out Joann? Or at least try. lol! Thanks for a great review! Susan
Comment from Espresso momma
I think I can relate to your dilemma dear friend. Don't let it get to you, a new day will come and the sun will shine once more. Thanks...
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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I think I can relate to your dilemma dear friend. Don't let it get to you, a new day will come and the sun will shine once more. Thanks...
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi there! I sure hope you're right. I keep trying to stay in the fight. But certain types of people do know how to keep one down. That's for sure...hugs and many thanks Roberta. Luv, Susan
