Simon and the Snake Charmer
An Alliteration contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from tinams
This is a very good read, and a very good entry to the Alliteration Poetry Competition. Very good mixture of S words. Good luck :) Tina
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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This is a very good read, and a very good entry to the Alliteration Poetry Competition. Very good mixture of S words. Good luck :) Tina
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from patsypats
A lot of 'S's going on here. You have definitely mastered this contest by coming up with a theme that is consumed with the letter. Good luck:0
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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A lot of 'S's going on here. You have definitely mastered this contest by coming up with a theme that is consumed with the letter. Good luck:0
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the maany stars.
Comment from Galactia
great poem, you did an excellent job in creating this and sticking to the guidelines with the prompt.
great job
Regards
Tia
GL in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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great poem, you did an excellent job in creating this and sticking to the guidelines with the prompt.
great job
Regards
Tia
GL in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love the word 'slaloming' for the snake's movements...really good choice.
I like the clever ending too where he is slim enough to slide out of the snare!
You really thought this out and did a great job!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Love the word 'slaloming' for the snake's movements...really good choice.
I like the clever ending too where he is slim enough to slide out of the snare!
You really thought this out and did a great job!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback and the many stars.
Comment from J. P. Egry
I like Simon and I'm glad he didn't get hurt in his endeavors. A snake is such a good subject for an alliteration of S, and this was a good story--not forced. The only thing I might change is the line "The sly snake waits slily---seems redundant in the same line and the only place that might seem a bit forced and I think it would be spelled slyly. I like the story in the poem very much.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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I like Simon and I'm glad he didn't get hurt in his endeavors. A snake is such a good subject for an alliteration of S, and this was a good story--not forced. The only thing I might change is the line "The sly snake waits slily---seems redundant in the same line and the only place that might seem a bit forced and I think it would be spelled slyly. I like the story in the poem very much.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2012
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the feedback and the many stars.
Comment from Crackerberries
Sly slippery sneaky snakey style.
Simon sounds snobishly stinky.
Slowly slimming seems scary
Swollen stomach - stiffened snake
Okay I'm done with the s words. Loved reading your poem ... good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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Sly slippery sneaky snakey style.
Simon sounds snobishly stinky.
Slowly slimming seems scary
Swollen stomach - stiffened snake
Okay I'm done with the s words. Loved reading your poem ... good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate tne S words and the stars.
Comment from Starlit Ink
S is great for alliteration, since it its very poetic sounding. Your idea was inventive and interesting. There was nice imagery of a snake slithering.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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S is great for alliteration, since it its very poetic sounding. Your idea was inventive and interesting. There was nice imagery of a snake slithering.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from Chris Davis
Nice job on this alliteration poem contest entry... it is not over done but still really works. Thanks for sharing this fun little piece.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Nice job on this alliteration poem contest entry... it is not over done but still really works. Thanks for sharing this fun little piece.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
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You're welcome...
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have done a good job with that prompt. Your poem is well-written, entertaining, and wryly amusing at the end.
"Slaloming down the hill" is an especiallly good line.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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You have done a good job with that prompt. Your poem is well-written, entertaining, and wryly amusing at the end.
"Slaloming down the hill" is an especiallly good line.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from Tristian
This is a fun poem, and the sibilants you have chosen work really well. I love the 'sly snake waits slyly' and the ending - where he claims: 'slim and alive is better than fat and slain'. I really enjoyed the poem the only word I felt may not have belonged is 'slumgullion', but that's only me. Wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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This is a fun poem, and the sibilants you have chosen work really well. I love the 'sly snake waits slyly' and the ending - where he claims: 'slim and alive is better than fat and slain'. I really enjoyed the poem the only word I felt may not have belonged is 'slumgullion', but that's only me. Wonderful poem.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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I appreciate your feedback. I agree about that work but I kind of liked it. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
