The Church Ladies
Sunday, Sunday ...41 total reviews
Comment from sasil
This short-short made me smile, dear friend. Love the reparte between the sisters as they bicker back and forth. I can easily imagine the scene, the look of horror on each of their faces when they realize the car keyes are now on the to-find list. Perfect pic to go with this one. No nits to pick with the writing. I enjoyed every word!
S.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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This short-short made me smile, dear friend. Love the reparte between the sisters as they bicker back and forth. I can easily imagine the scene, the look of horror on each of their faces when they realize the car keyes are now on the to-find list. Perfect pic to go with this one. No nits to pick with the writing. I enjoyed every word!
S.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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Hi Lisa! How are you? This is a wonderful review, I'm so glad you enjoyed this story...I just love that photo. And wanted to practice some dialogue. It's always a stretch for me tho. And I lose my keys, cell phone, etc...ALL the time. It's pathetic. lol! Not to mention expensive. Whaaaa! I'm such a whiner! Love and best Sassy! Susan
Comment from guinea
Very funny. That's me and my husband at times. I thought this was so well written. It would even be a great skit to do. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Very funny. That's me and my husband at times. I thought this was so well written. It would even be a great skit to do. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-May-2012
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Hi there! Thank you very much for a kind and most welcome note...it's great to hear from you and I sure hope you are doing well! I'm trying to get caught up and do apologize for this inexcusable lateness! HUGS! Susan
Comment from humpwhistle
Very believable dialogue, Suse. I like these ladies, and
I think you've created a very believable scenario.
Your punchline shows nice gentle humor.
I wonder if a few dialogue tags and actions would help round out the characters: Imogene said, tapping her foot.
May replied, squinting into the cavern of her purse.
Just a thought.
Good work.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Very believable dialogue, Suse. I like these ladies, and
I think you've created a very believable scenario.
Your punchline shows nice gentle humor.
I wonder if a few dialogue tags and actions would help round out the characters: Imogene said, tapping her foot.
May replied, squinting into the cavern of her purse.
Just a thought.
Good work.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi Lee! I added some to this...I agree, just a few words made it better. If you have time, check it out? I see my future in this one...well. Sort of. Thank you for helping Lee. Good ideas! Smiles! Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
This is quite humorous, It brought a smile to my face.Hi I'M SORRY IF THIS IS LATE. I have been rather busy,editing a children's book for my great grand kids. Well done I did enjoy reading.Mary
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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This is quite humorous, It brought a smile to my face.Hi I'M SORRY IF THIS IS LATE. I have been rather busy,editing a children's book for my great grand kids. Well done I did enjoy reading.Mary
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi again! It's okay! I'm thrilled to know you read this one Mary! I knew you'd like it! I hope to see your book in print too? Sounds great!! Don't quit til it's done!! HUGS ! Susan
Comment from Gideon Roth
Susan, what a fun and delightful read this was. I smiled the whole way through. It was flawlessly written and if I had six stars, I would gladly give them all on this wonderful story...Tim
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Susan, what a fun and delightful read this was. I smiled the whole way through. It was flawlessly written and if I had six stars, I would gladly give them all on this wonderful story...Tim
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi Tim! It's okay, your enthusiasm is all I need...I wanted to practice dialogue and the photo was so perfect...I couldn't resist!! I'm just delighted you enjoyed this Tim! Thank you so much! Have a beautiful day!! Susan
Comment from Skyangel02
It is funny how things that are not funny to the one who suffers from forgetfulness are really funny to those of us who can relate to the frustration of it all.
Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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It is funny how things that are not funny to the one who suffers from forgetfulness are really funny to those of us who can relate to the frustration of it all.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi there! Thank you so much! It's great to see you here and I hope you're having a wonderful day! Smiles and best!! Susan
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You may not have thought it was funny, but I surely did.
If we can't laugh a ourselves then he world takes over.
A Sunday special, about Sundya...quaint, but I ain't going o church.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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You may not have thought it was funny, but I surely did.
If we can't laugh a ourselves then he world takes over.
A Sunday special, about Sundya...quaint, but I ain't going o church.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi Ingrid! Thank you so much. I haven't been to church in years either. I guess you're right. This is funny...but when I do this, I'm so mad???? I need to learn to laugh again. Hugs, Susan
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a short story. Not funny but it happens all the time. When one grows older and nearing 70 or 80 so many things happen. And this is a case where one of the sisters forgot where she put her eyeglasses. The two sisters tried to look for
the eye glasses and when they were ready to go to church, the other forgot where she put the car's key and they were late for the church service. Dementia is the culprit. I enjoyed reading this short story. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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This is a short story. Not funny but it happens all the time. When one grows older and nearing 70 or 80 so many things happen. And this is a case where one of the sisters forgot where she put her eyeglasses. The two sisters tried to look for
the eye glasses and when they were ready to go to church, the other forgot where she put the car's key and they were late for the church service. Dementia is the culprit. I enjoyed reading this short story. Congratulations.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Dom! Thank you very much! Wow! I'm so happy you liked and enjoyed this story. I do this all the time...it's so frustrating. I've also missed appts due to lack of sight. Can't drive to go if you don't have the old specs on! LOL! Thanks again! ") Susan
Comment from bulbul
Enjoyed the story. So did May Ellen get her wish to stay in just once? The scene seems so familiar too and the best bit, of course, is the humour. The contrast between the two, the affectionate impatience as well as tolerance all well brought out.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Enjoyed the story. So did May Ellen get her wish to stay in just once? The scene seems so familiar too and the best bit, of course, is the humour. The contrast between the two, the affectionate impatience as well as tolerance all well brought out.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi there! lol! No, she had to go! Imogene is the boss! I'm so glad you got a kick out of this and I thank you for this kind note too! :) Susan
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You're welcome.bulbul
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
this is such a delightful story that many can relate to..Including me! I love your characters and losing things is so indicative of the aged. I love the way your wrote this and each line was compelling. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Susan,
this is such a delightful story that many can relate to..Including me! I love your characters and losing things is so indicative of the aged. I love the way your wrote this and each line was compelling. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Chey! Thank you and I hope to goodness you don't lose as many sets of keys as I have. Oh it's awful. The last debacle was the thing that raises the garage door. EIGHTY FIVE DOLLARS TO replace...they came, reset the thing, gave me a new remote...I walk inside just SECONDS after handing them a check...and grab my jacket. Guess what is in my pocket. End of story. Lol!! When I do these things, I'm stupid and wasteful. When certain others do it, why, it's NO big deal at all! Imagine that! :)) xoxo. Susan
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I recently had my garage opener fall in between my seat and the console. I finally got it but it wasn't easy. I know those things are expensive! hugs, chey
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But did you know at first where it was Chey? I hope. Still, it was probably stuck. If you go to sell or trade your car, try to find all the quarters there too! Lol! :) Susan
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I did know where the clicker but couldn't get it out. My son finally got it and I was so glad!
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:) Such a familiar scene Chey...I waste more time looking around. Lol! S.
