Ripest Fruit of the Tree
A description of eating a fresh fruit114 total reviews
Comment from justatuna
I think this is an excellent poem. One of my favorite styles. To say so much with little. Causes the writer to focus without losing description. Too bad about the picture. Figures someone would point out the flaw. Very well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I think this is an excellent poem. One of my favorite styles. To say so much with little. Causes the writer to focus without losing description. Too bad about the picture. Figures someone would point out the flaw. Very well done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much!
Comment from David Flynn
Very simple; sense, followed by observation, followed by opinion. I have yet to write one of these but may base my first on your approach. I like this very much thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Very simple; sense, followed by observation, followed by opinion. I have yet to write one of these but may base my first on your approach. I like this very much thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you :)
Comment from L. Sherman
What a nice, sweet poem. No pun intended. :) Really, the contrast in 'sweetness' and 'tangy' is nice and it's so true that nothing beats fruit straight off the branch, or vine.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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What a nice, sweet poem. No pun intended. :) Really, the contrast in 'sweetness' and 'tangy' is nice and it's so true that nothing beats fruit straight off the branch, or vine.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the review! It's so delightful :)
Comment from October21
Hello there! Nothing can compare to the taste of fruit? I bet to differ! Lol this is a fun piece and you do show how lovely the fruit tastes. Well done a simply written poem!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Hello there! Nothing can compare to the taste of fruit? I bet to differ! Lol this is a fun piece and you do show how lovely the fruit tastes. Well done a simply written poem!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Haha I differ as well, but I wanted a good ending. Thanks!
Comment from Righteous Riter
I like this piece. It is short, sweet, to the point and it carries a dual message. Some see fruit, some see ladies. I see ladies. You got me where I needed to go. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I like this piece. It is short, sweet, to the point and it carries a dual message. Some see fruit, some see ladies. I see ladies. You got me where I needed to go. Good job.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Lol thank you very much
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
Delectable... I can just taste it! This is a lovely 5-7-5. Your syllable count is right on. It flows of the tongue sweetly. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Delectable... I can just taste it! This is a lovely 5-7-5. Your syllable count is right on. It flows of the tongue sweetly. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thanks!
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Sweetness on my tongue
Tangy juice drips from my mouth
Nothing can compare
With few words, this poetry transports the reader
to a sweet place. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Sweetness on my tongue
Tangy juice drips from my mouth
Nothing can compare
With few words, this poetry transports the reader
to a sweet place. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you!
Comment from GWHARGIS
Heck, I thought they were apples. Don't ever eat a persimmon out of season. They will turn your mouth inside out. Just a little free advice there. The mouthwatering description was great. The flow and the rhythm were spot on. NIce job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Heck, I thought they were apples. Don't ever eat a persimmon out of season. They will turn your mouth inside out. Just a little free advice there. The mouthwatering description was great. The flow and the rhythm were spot on. NIce job.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thanks for the advice, they look so good though. Oh well lol
Comment from charlyann
wonderful take on 5-7-5...perfect imagery for the poem also...plus it made me thirsty for fresh juice...good job and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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wonderful take on 5-7-5...perfect imagery for the poem also...plus it made me thirsty for fresh juice...good job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you Charlyann, you have a cool name by the way :)
Comment from country ranch writer
The fruit has had time to ripen into a delectable fruit.
Sweetness give pleasure to the person who is eating this and savoring the sweet flavor. There is no comparing this to others,so juicy it drips with the love from mother nature.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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The fruit has had time to ripen into a delectable fruit.
Sweetness give pleasure to the person who is eating this and savoring the sweet flavor. There is no comparing this to others,so juicy it drips with the love from mother nature.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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WOW, Thanks so much for your kind review and rating :) I guess I should always write my poetry when I'm hungry LOL Once again, thanks!
