The Old Shoebox
Memories frozen in time39 total reviews
Comment from AuroraSky
The beauty of simplistic depth woven in sentimental gracefulness, pulling the reader beyond the page into the moment and emotions of the author.
Very quaint.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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The beauty of simplistic depth woven in sentimental gracefulness, pulling the reader beyond the page into the moment and emotions of the author.
Very quaint.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thank you Aurora!
Comment from J. P. Egry
Yesterday I wrote a review of this, but had to leave before I quite finished. When I came back it had disappeared. I'll try to recap what I wrote.
First I think using present tense is perfect for this piece and makes it more immediate and close for the reader.
The writing itself is perfect--structure, grammar, spelling, etc.
The vivid active verbs create wonderful pictures that we can relate to as you peruse your own memories through photos----"rooms despair","clock ticks eerily", "shadows whisper","faces stare out","hear them telling me","world blacks away",---all wonderful phrases that keep the writing lively and flowing.
Strong introductory sentence, rich middle section, and excellent closing sentence all make this piece appealing and professional.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Yesterday I wrote a review of this, but had to leave before I quite finished. When I came back it had disappeared. I'll try to recap what I wrote.
First I think using present tense is perfect for this piece and makes it more immediate and close for the reader.
The writing itself is perfect--structure, grammar, spelling, etc.
The vivid active verbs create wonderful pictures that we can relate to as you peruse your own memories through photos----"rooms despair","clock ticks eerily", "shadows whisper","faces stare out","hear them telling me","world blacks away",---all wonderful phrases that keep the writing lively and flowing.
Strong introductory sentence, rich middle section, and excellent closing sentence all make this piece appealing and professional.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Hi there!! Hugs and a thousand thank you's!! What a delight to know you enjoyed this...and I send you salutations from the arctic Hoosier state! Off to cover the flowers! Luv! Susan
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You're welcome and thanks for the enjoyable poem.
Comment from adewpearl
A poignant, nostalgic tone
This is a moving story of love and longing, of memories and the pain of having nothing left of loved ones but the photos and letters they left behind. Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2012
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A poignant, nostalgic tone
This is a moving story of love and longing, of memories and the pain of having nothing left of loved ones but the photos and letters they left behind. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2012
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Dear Brooke! I'm so sorry for this late thank you. I am always so tickled to have you read my stuff. Thank you so much! Smiles! Susan
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello again sweet Sue
This is such a lovely - sad poem. It flows right from the center of your poetic voice and as per your usual, it magnificent
Bear
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2012
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Hello again sweet Sue
This is such a lovely - sad poem. It flows right from the center of your poetic voice and as per your usual, it magnificent
Bear
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2012
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Hi Bear! What a wonderful review. It's kind words and enthusiasm like this that keeps me trying. Thank you so very much...and I apologize for this terribly late reply. Susan
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello Susan. I have been trying to get caught up with all the notices of new submissions in my inbox that piled up while I was away for a day or so. This submission here was one of your best. It was so well told and full of emotion. Great job. Looking forward to your next submission...Tim
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Hello Susan. I have been trying to get caught up with all the notices of new submissions in my inbox that piled up while I was away for a day or so. This submission here was one of your best. It was so well told and full of emotion. Great job. Looking forward to your next submission...Tim
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Hi again! Please forgive this copy paste thank you? I MUST get caught up! I have read all your notes and send a million hugs and thanks for every star! LOVE you all! Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, sue, you did a great jo writing this heartfelt flash fiction about the note from the past that helps a daughter move on ith her life. i enjoyed reading it and i love the picture
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, sue, you did a great jo writing this heartfelt flash fiction about the note from the past that helps a daughter move on ith her life. i enjoyed reading it and i love the picture
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Another late thank you. I'm typing as fast as I can. Before my back starts screaming. I need to take a break. LOL! HUGS and thanks to each of you! xoxo. Susan
Comment from sugardog
So sweet and touching and sad. I love this!! You always write with such heart and true emotion, Susan. That's why I love your stuff. We, the reader, experiences this right along with you. You have a special voice. Thanks for sharing this intimate memory. Dana
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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So sweet and touching and sad. I love this!! You always write with such heart and true emotion, Susan. That's why I love your stuff. We, the reader, experiences this right along with you. You have a special voice. Thanks for sharing this intimate memory. Dana
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Another late thank you. I'm typing as fast as I can. Before my back starts screaming. I need to take a break. LOL! HUGS and thanks to each of you! xoxo. Susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
An eloquent piece you've written here. It's full of deep feeling and love. It's well worthy of one of my virtual twelvers to go with the well deserved sixer.
I didn't find anything that needed changing. It's perfect as is.
Good work.
Ted
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Hi Susan :)
An eloquent piece you've written here. It's full of deep feeling and love. It's well worthy of one of my virtual twelvers to go with the well deserved sixer.
I didn't find anything that needed changing. It's perfect as is.
Good work.
Ted
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Hi Ted...Thank you so much. You are welcome to put this in the book if you think it's okay. SORRY for this late thanks!! Susan
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Okay, you're welcome. I've copied it for the book.
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Thank you Ted...please don't hesitate to reject any of them? S.
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Shoebox is okay, short, but it works.
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent short story about an old woman's rememberances of those who have passed on. I enjoyed reading this post and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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Susan,
This is an excellent short story about an old woman's rememberances of those who have passed on. I enjoyed reading this post and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2012
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HI Dave! More apologies. I'm going as fast as I can to catch up. I always appreciate your time to read for me and thank you a million times over for being here! Susan
Comment from JW
This is a well written story. And it really stuck home with me. A few days ago I made my quarterly trip to my mother's gravesite in order to put fresh flowers there.
In reading the date of her passing, I found it hard to beleive it has been four years.
God know, how much I miss her and wish we could spend an afternoon together - once again.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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This is a well written story. And it really stuck home with me. A few days ago I made my quarterly trip to my mother's gravesite in order to put fresh flowers there.
In reading the date of her passing, I found it hard to beleive it has been four years.
God know, how much I miss her and wish we could spend an afternoon together - once again.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 05-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much! It's always such a joy to see you like my efforts! I really appreciate this kind note from you! xoxo< Susan
