Splitting Hairs
anyone you know?77 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Writingfundimension! This was a terrific story. I enjoyed seeing your hair salon through your words. This gal has her daddy wrapped around her little finger. That is true. But you got a $50.00 tip so that's not bad. I love the cowardly lion. My daughter sang his song in a Music Festival. I made the costume and she won first place! She showed a lot of noive in her performance :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi Writingfundimension! This was a terrific story. I enjoyed seeing your hair salon through your words. This gal has her daddy wrapped around her little finger. That is true. But you got a $50.00 tip so that's not bad. I love the cowardly lion. My daughter sang his song in a Music Festival. I made the costume and she won first place! She showed a lot of noive in her performance :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi, Joy. What a cute story, and thanks for sharing it with me. Brought a smile to my face. And I so appreciate your supportive and generous review. Thanks much for stopping by! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from WilliamDeen
Great story! This sounds a lot like my exwife! She was a drama queen for sure! Your story has great characters, good dialogue, and a wonderful plot! BTW-The Lion is my favorite character in the Wizard of Oz!
one correction: add the word to after like
it would be like have a father /// it would be like to have a father....
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Great story! This sounds a lot like my exwife! She was a drama queen for sure! Your story has great characters, good dialogue, and a wonderful plot! BTW-The Lion is my favorite character in the Wizard of Oz!
one correction: add the word to after like
it would be like have a father /// it would be like to have a father....
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank, billy. I appreciate the great review! Bev
Comment from Charlene0513
In this short story you definitely have brought disturbing and intrusive acts to the table.
You have given great detail to the type of person you have described and ended it well with a much astonishment and yet the expectations presumed the obvious.
Once in my chair, she's [focussed](focused) on.....
Charlene
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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In this short story you definitely have brought disturbing and intrusive acts to the table.
You have given great detail to the type of person you have described and ended it well with a much astonishment and yet the expectations presumed the obvious.
Once in my chair, she's [focussed](focused) on.....
Charlene
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thanks much, Charlene. I appreciate the correction and the supportive review. Bev
Comment from LancsLass
Yep, noive in deed! I'm sure we all know at least one woman like that. Appalling and enviable at the same time. You captured her well.
I noticed no SPAGs. You have a natural way of writing which I like. Very enjoyable story.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Yep, noive in deed! I'm sure we all know at least one woman like that. Appalling and enviable at the same time. You captured her well.
I noticed no SPAGs. You have a natural way of writing which I like. Very enjoyable story.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Well said, LancsLass - Appalling and enviable, indeed.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I sure appreciate your generosity.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Enrique28
A very amusing tale in easy read mode with a twist at the end. I love some of your clever expressions, like "chewing gum stuck to the bottom of a chair" and "her industrial- strength finger nails" to mention a couple. Fine story telling indeed, and very aptly presented. Good show!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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A very amusing tale in easy read mode with a twist at the end. I love some of your clever expressions, like "chewing gum stuck to the bottom of a chair" and "her industrial- strength finger nails" to mention a couple. Fine story telling indeed, and very aptly presented. Good show!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much, Enrique28. I really appreciate your encouraging and generous review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from tango494
Excellent job on this sumbission. I loved your story and I will certainly be reading more of your work as it is submitted. You are truly a gifted writer. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Excellent job on this sumbission. I loved your story and I will certainly be reading more of your work as it is submitted. You are truly a gifted writer. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thank you, tango494. I sure appreciate your very generous and encouraging review. I look forward to hearing from you again! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from robyn corum
An unusual story, but one that helod my interest through to the end. Do you mean to say that her 'daddy' was just another sugar-daddy?
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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An unusual story, but one that helod my interest through to the end. Do you mean to say that her 'daddy' was just another sugar-daddy?
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi, robot1224. Hmmm...you may be on to something there LOL! Thanks for the interest and great review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from jadapenn
Loved this story of the spoilt brat. Geez, and you find lots of them around. Always demanding, always ungrateful too. Wonder if they ever learn a lesson somewhere. You developed your characters well and I really enjoyed the read. Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Loved this story of the spoilt brat. Geez, and you find lots of them around. Always demanding, always ungrateful too. Wonder if they ever learn a lesson somewhere. You developed your characters well and I really enjoyed the read. Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Hi, Jada. Thank you so much for reading my story and sending along your excellent review. Much appreciated! Hugs, Bev
Comment from mauial
I have come to learn that self absorbed people do have noive in spades and every other shade as you do highlight in this short story.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I have come to learn that self absorbed people do have noive in spades and every other shade as you do highlight in this short story.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I couldn't agree with you more, mauial. Thanks for the generous review! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Merajul
I like the whole composition for it was simple very interesting from start to end.The flow in the paragraph had been remarkably well laid.The big font size made it an easy read.Good work
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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I like the whole composition for it was simple very interesting from start to end.The flow in the paragraph had been remarkably well laid.The big font size made it an easy read.Good work
Comment Written 06-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2012
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Thanks very much, Merajul. I really appreciate your encouragement and generous review. Kind regards, Bev
