Ancient Spirits
poem about a koi pond27 total reviews
Comment from Dylan Riley
Well done, I have a koi pond and the imagery comes across so well, can see the koi...or is it a young man and a mermaid....creates lovely peaceful images. Well done
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Well done, I have a koi pond and the imagery comes across so well, can see the koi...or is it a young man and a mermaid....creates lovely peaceful images. Well done
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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A friend of mine had a koi pond that was so beautiful it inspired this poem. How lucky you are to have one. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
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If I get some pics will send, they are soothing to watch everyday. Look forward to reading more of your work.
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I would love to see some pics. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from EMB
I don't know what a koi pond is, but you bring it to readers with imagery that certainly brings it justice. And I suppose such a pond has mermaids swimming around all the time? At least, that's what I noticed in here somewhere.
A beautiful piece of work.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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I don't know what a koi pond is, but you bring it to readers with imagery that certainly brings it justice. And I suppose such a pond has mermaids swimming around all the time? At least, that's what I noticed in here somewhere.
A beautiful piece of work.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2012
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Koi are large goldfish and are beautiful to watch. I like the idea of mermaids swimming around. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from ophanim
The first two stanzas could stand alone as a poem, although they could be broken into smaller stanzas. Your writing flows beautifully, the images equally lovely. I rate on writing skill, and try to not rate on content. My next comment deals with content. I got a little bit lost when you referred to beautiful girl and handsome boy. To me fish are genderless and I had to reread to see that I hadn't missed something. That section too could stand on its own as a poem. Again, images and feeling about your poem are beautiful.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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The first two stanzas could stand alone as a poem, although they could be broken into smaller stanzas. Your writing flows beautifully, the images equally lovely. I rate on writing skill, and try to not rate on content. My next comment deals with content. I got a little bit lost when you referred to beautiful girl and handsome boy. To me fish are genderless and I had to reread to see that I hadn't missed something. That section too could stand on its own as a poem. Again, images and feeling about your poem are beautiful.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2012
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I appreciate your comments and thanks for your encouraging words.
Elaine
Comment from GWHARGIS
Lovely imagery. It is amazing how watching koi swim in their lazy paced way, we feel a bit of tension eased and somehow more grounded. This was poignant and very lyrical. Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Lovely imagery. It is amazing how watching koi swim in their lazy paced way, we feel a bit of tension eased and somehow more grounded. This was poignant and very lyrical. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thanks for reading and understanding. Elaine
Comment from Just2Write
This is very different, and yet - I found it intriguing and restful. - The Beautiful Girl in the pond, and the Handsome boy, who share the beauty of love and spring, but do not have the ability to touch one another, except with their souls. I liked it. Rose.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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This is very different, and yet - I found it intriguing and restful. - The Beautiful Girl in the pond, and the Handsome boy, who share the beauty of love and spring, but do not have the ability to touch one another, except with their souls. I liked it. Rose.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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My friend's koi pond just inspired me to write about this lovely creation. Thank you for your thoughtful review. Elaine
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There is something about Koi that brings peace to one's mind. Glad they enriched you with inspiration.
Comment from Heaven Bound
What a really nice poem about koi. I have a fish pond at my house and I have a couple in their. They certainly are interesting. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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What a really nice poem about koi. I have a fish pond at my house and I have a couple in their. They certainly are interesting. Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from duckylamour
This is soothing and a pleasure to read. The lives of fish are something that we humans will never appreciate, but you brought out the fragility of their lives. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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This is soothing and a pleasure to read. The lives of fish are something that we humans will never appreciate, but you brought out the fragility of their lives. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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I am honored by your generous amount of stars and appreciation for these beautiful creatures. Thank you so much. Elaine
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have done very well with this poem beautiful descriptive images painted with your words well done my friend I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Yes you have done very well with this poem beautiful descriptive images painted with your words well done my friend I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Cindy Warren
A fish pond is so beautiful and relaxing. The poem makes me feel like I've been introduced to the fish. It's easy to imagine them coming back to life each spring. Great picture.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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A fish pond is so beautiful and relaxing. The poem makes me feel like I've been introduced to the fish. It's easy to imagine them coming back to life each spring. Great picture.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Träumerin
Lovely dreamy poem. I had koi in a pond one time. Sadly the herons got their young every spring.
I got a little confused with who was human and who was fish. Maybe that was intentional on your part?
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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Lovely dreamy poem. I had koi in a pond one time. Sadly the herons got their young every spring.
I got a little confused with who was human and who was fish. Maybe that was intentional on your part?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2012
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Thanks for taking time to read and review. Beautiful Girl and Handsome Boy are the koi in the poem. Elaine
