CRITICAL ... A-claim
a lesson in iambing and enjambing ...61 total reviews
Comment from catch22
This was outstanding and you really seem to know how to write metered poetry. I'm still learning and would LOVE for some of your honest critique on my attempts to write metered poems. I don't know whoever this poem's about, but he sure sounds like he's full of hot air. Great poem and I wish I had a six for ya, but I'm fresh out, so here's a virtual one.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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This was outstanding and you really seem to know how to write metered poetry. I'm still learning and would LOVE for some of your honest critique on my attempts to write metered poems. I don't know whoever this poem's about, but he sure sounds like he's full of hot air. Great poem and I wish I had a six for ya, but I'm fresh out, so here's a virtual one.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012
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My my what a perceptive review this is Gail and I thankyou for your thoughtful review. Why you even subliminally mentioned the name of my next post...its called Inflation...but the actual subtitle IS "hot air"...stay tuned.
Sirriusly, its about a balloon. *smirk* No, it really is. Haha
This here piece of rhyming critique is about the ninnys who thing they are beyond help and tout an often purchased ranking preferring the fluffy accolades and the quick once over, rather than detailed critique that takes time and selflessness...and is what we are damn well paid for. I find some of the arrogance here vaguely irritating enough to write about...but this is a general write of course. Of course. LOL
Cheers and thanks for your great review. I will drop over and take a look at your work when I can.
Closet
PS Your wish to bestow a sixer is also appreciated.
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You are always welcome to bring your critical skills to my page. I think I have a lot to learn, and you seem very knowledgeable and helpful. Any advice or criticism you could offer would be greatly appreciated:)
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I just gave you a screed.
I hope I'm some help.
I'll always give you my honesty.
x
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I love it and can't thank you enough.
Comment from Peter Mansson
Hi Phillipa, once again it is clear that you are a great poet. But what I really appreciate about you is your ballsyness(is that a word?), and whats more, you really make a valid point. If you have been blocked by a cuppa ....of well, lets say warm pee, dont feel bad, because he blocked me too. Didn't like my honest review either. Keep it up girl!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Hi Phillipa, once again it is clear that you are a great poet. But what I really appreciate about you is your ballsyness(is that a word?), and whats more, you really make a valid point. If you have been blocked by a cuppa ....of well, lets say warm pee, dont feel bad, because he blocked me too. Didn't like my honest review either. Keep it up girl!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Haha thanks Peter, I appreciate your sixer review and attempt to spell one of my traits! LOL...I loved your review and NO not blocked...just hardly appreciated. Awww, you got blocked my a cuppa...of very LUKE warm. I say old sport, do you think we are way to opinionated? LMAO
Thanks for a super review Peter and the sixer too. Most appreciated.
Cheers Phillippa xo
Comment from Minglement
Some people are not open to honest critique and it injures their fragile ego. You got it right :) I hope I am always open to learning something new. Great job and a fun read. Marcia
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Some people are not open to honest critique and it injures their fragile ego. You got it right :) I hope I am always open to learning something new. Great job and a fun read. Marcia
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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You summed this up very well. Thanks Marci.
I appreciate your pov.
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
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We think a lot a like :) Marcia
Comment from Jean Lutz
Well I can't get iambing and enjambing. My words don't have feet and my drum can't even da dum. But I do like to read for message and yours came through loud and clear.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Well I can't get iambing and enjambing. My words don't have feet and my drum can't even da dum. But I do like to read for message and yours came through loud and clear.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thankyou Jean. Meter isn't for everyone, for sure but those who receive constructive help should perhaps be a little less fragile about it. LOL
Cheers closet xoxo
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello sweet Phillipa. I truly enjoyed your poem and the stabs at assholes who think they have to re-write your work. It especially irks me when they have nothing to back up their critiques. I welcome honest reviews, but bullshit stinks and is hard to get off your mind. When you get fives and sixes and some dip stick awards a three or four it is unnerving.
Enough of my rant. This is an excellent post
Bear
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hello sweet Phillipa. I truly enjoyed your poem and the stabs at assholes who think they have to re-write your work. It especially irks me when they have nothing to back up their critiques. I welcome honest reviews, but bullshit stinks and is hard to get off your mind. When you get fives and sixes and some dip stick awards a three or four it is unnerving.
Enough of my rant. This is an excellent post
Bear
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thankyou Bear. I do agree, crap critique can irk but honest helpful critique should simply be appreciated. I think the rating doesn't always properly represent the comments so reviewers need to be able to back up a four or three with the goods.
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from Dougspoetry
You're the best! Even with your occasional Potty Mouth. :) Obviously many people on this site are only interested in stroking there ego, and not becoming more skillful writers. I admire your skill in writing, and your occasional critique. Don't let prideful people get you down, they're everywhere anyway. AWESOME POEM! AS ALWAYS! No six to give you! :(
Doug
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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You're the best! Even with your occasional Potty Mouth. :) Obviously many people on this site are only interested in stroking there ego, and not becoming more skillful writers. I admire your skill in writing, and your occasional critique. Don't let prideful people get you down, they're everywhere anyway. AWESOME POEM! AS ALWAYS! No six to give you! :(
Doug
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Haha, thanks for a super review, Douglas. Too many ego strokers and not wanting to improve, especially when EVERYONE can be improved. Alas we're amongst immortals here Doug. Haha...
Glad you liked this post...yes these people are everywhere.
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, closet. I can only add my kudos to all the others for this brilliant poem. I took one class in meter and rhyme and realized that I ain't got it. So, I stick to prose or free verse. I do recognize that your meter is perfect, LOL! You know, you are one very bright lady. I suspect your IQ is higher than 90% of the folks on the site - myself being one of them. And, you are an excellent critic for all writing styles, not just poetry. You've helped me immensely with your sharp editing of some of my stories.
So, carry on dear friend. You won't find me muting you anytime soon. Hugs, bevarooniski
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Hi, closet. I can only add my kudos to all the others for this brilliant poem. I took one class in meter and rhyme and realized that I ain't got it. So, I stick to prose or free verse. I do recognize that your meter is perfect, LOL! You know, you are one very bright lady. I suspect your IQ is higher than 90% of the folks on the site - myself being one of them. And, you are an excellent critic for all writing styles, not just poetry. You've helped me immensely with your sharp editing of some of my stories.
So, carry on dear friend. You won't find me muting you anytime soon. Hugs, bevarooniski
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thankyou Bevski...I think everyone forms their own style and we have to run with that...but when help is offered and it genuinely improves a piece sometimes the author is too proud to admit it may be better. More fool them...paid critique and they STILL don't want it! LMAO
Cheers and thanks for not muting me Bevaroonski...
Closet xoxo
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I do use the mute button - but never for you, Closet. I have to say that whatever topic you use to write about, it's always engaging and timely. Xxx Bevvski
Comment from The Stranger
Oh let me assure you, this tickled me
Could it be directed at poor Mt Tee,
The drivel he posts is becoming a joke,
Now it is fun we are starting to poke
With his ridiculous proudox, he is the pits,
I truly could rip his poetry to bits,
Oh Cynthia darling, could you tell me
What you see in the likes of Chris Tee....
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Oh let me assure you, this tickled me
Could it be directed at poor Mt Tee,
The drivel he posts is becoming a joke,
Now it is fun we are starting to poke
With his ridiculous proudox, he is the pits,
I truly could rip his poetry to bits,
Oh Cynthia darling, could you tell me
What you see in the likes of Chris Tee....
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Why hello Stranger. I thankyou for an enchanting review and I'll let you make your own summizations about this as I was really approaching a generic problem we good reviewers face. I guess some people may fit into the category of this poor soul who doesn't want help or advice or to improve something. I only try to help as a reviewer and when I am offered help when posting I sure appreciate any improvements. No one is beyond that. Thank you for the sixer rating and impromptu rhyming review.
Cheers closet xo
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I've finally been able to pick myself up off the bloody floor!
This was priceless, especially since it was written with such perfection...
What the hell can I say to that? Except ROFL...this has made my sides hurt. Ok ok you don't need no review it's a bloody sixer but ain't got one...sucks...
Thanks for sharing this, I just busted a gut reading it.
Not sure you'll appreciate that, but I like your style...
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I've finally been able to pick myself up off the bloody floor!
This was priceless, especially since it was written with such perfection...
What the hell can I say to that? Except ROFL...this has made my sides hurt. Ok ok you don't need no review it's a bloody sixer but ain't got one...sucks...
Thanks for sharing this, I just busted a gut reading it.
Not sure you'll appreciate that, but I like your style...
Maureen
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Haha thankyou so much Maureen, I appreciate your humorous review and sorry to hear you busted a gut...am I allowed to laugh back at that? LOL
Many thanks for a super review.
Cheers closet
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Absolutley......laughing back shares the smiles....:)
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from Ankh
I so understand what you are saying. How are we too make progress without any critique? We become stagnant without the help and advice others give us freely. You know I am lost on Da dums, but I am still grateful for every time I get pulled up about it. You are never too old too learn something :-)~
Seth x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I so understand what you are saying. How are we too make progress without any critique? We become stagnant without the help and advice others give us freely. You know I am lost on Da dums, but I am still grateful for every time I get pulled up about it. You are never too old too learn something :-)~
Seth x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thanks for understanding this one. Thanks for taking the rating and critique given with the essence its given. Take from it what you want and thats all I ask. You are not lost on the da DUMS you just have a little trouble with some of them..'bout time you wrote another Sonnet, yes? Haha
No, never too old.
Cheers and thanks Seth.
Closet xoxo
