The Apple Tree Bees
Finding me. To be.33 total reviews
Comment from Crackerberries
Well now I was led here by reading Reconciled's Shades of Color and his suggestion did not let me down. This was a wonderfully poignant and happy read. Very well done and I cried over Old Yeller too.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Well now I was led here by reading Reconciled's Shades of Color and his suggestion did not let me down. This was a wonderfully poignant and happy read. Very well done and I cried over Old Yeller too.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012
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Hi there!! Hugs and a thousand thank you's!! What a delight to know you enjoyed this...and I send you salutations from the arctic Hoosier state! Off to cover the flowers! Luv! Susan
Comment from mazi jee
Beautiful piece of writing.
You observe thing keenly.
Beautiful portrayal.
Emotions and feelings nicely expressed.
Description is vivid.
Good prose style.
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Beautiful piece of writing.
You observe thing keenly.
Beautiful portrayal.
Emotions and feelings nicely expressed.
Description is vivid.
Good prose style.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2012
Comment from Joy Graham
This story put me into a sleepy lull. It is very beautiful. I found my mind wandering and imagining the tree and the stories you speak about. To me, that is what I look for in reading. Take me away somewhere fantastic. I need that escape. I love the picture of the kitten in the tree. I can't wait for Spring so I can go to my park to hear my spirit sing. Thank you for giving me that pep talk I soooo needed.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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This story put me into a sleepy lull. It is very beautiful. I found my mind wandering and imagining the tree and the stories you speak about. To me, that is what I look for in reading. Take me away somewhere fantastic. I need that escape. I love the picture of the kitten in the tree. I can't wait for Spring so I can go to my park to hear my spirit sing. Thank you for giving me that pep talk I soooo needed.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012
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Hi again Joy...thank you and I'm very happy this was enjoyable for you! I really did this too. I miss Mom's old apple trees...and there used to be honey bees EVERYWHERE. They are almost all gone. NOT good! Thanks again Joy!! xoxo. Susan
Comment from poetbear
Have to read more of your work when time permits.
Congrats!!
This piece is well crafted and well done.
Great imagery and flow.
Reads well and makes sense.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Have to read more of your work when time permits.
Congrats!!
This piece is well crafted and well done.
Great imagery and flow.
Reads well and makes sense.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! What a kind and wonderful note...your enthusiasm and time for me is humbling, and what a thrill it is, to see that you enjoyed this. I apologize for another pasted thank you....I have read all these super reviews and love you all, for each and every one of them!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from Gideon Roth
Good Morning Susan. Well, this was one more fun story to read. I thought the story line was marvelous and thoroughly entertaining. A very fun read to start the day. Well done, no spag that I could see, and great imagery. In a word, excellent. I had several notices of submissions by my favorite writers so I looking forward to reading other great submission...Tim
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Good Morning Susan. Well, this was one more fun story to read. I thought the story line was marvelous and thoroughly entertaining. A very fun read to start the day. Well done, no spag that I could see, and great imagery. In a word, excellent. I had several notices of submissions by my favorite writers so I looking forward to reading other great submission...Tim
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Tim! Thank you!! Glad to see you back! Just glad you enjoyed this. And no need to review all my posts. Just pick and choose! hug, Susan
Comment from Judian James
Hi Sue. As much as I wanted to love this, I found the first paragraph a bit convoluted and the thought of a little girl in a tree full of bees, a tad uncomfortable as well. I'm sure it's just me ... there are a lot of cliches throughout as well. sorry. I hope I didn't offend
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi Sue. As much as I wanted to love this, I found the first paragraph a bit convoluted and the thought of a little girl in a tree full of bees, a tad uncomfortable as well. I'm sure it's just me ... there are a lot of cliches throughout as well. sorry. I hope I didn't offend
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Hi Jude! Not at all...you are probably right and please read the other story by Spiritual Echo? She won and deservedly so! ") I tried! Thank you so much! Luv, Susan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
This is a beautiful story and I like even the dark spots. The picture you chose is so sweet and who couldn't love a kitty like that? The message is hopeful and uplifting. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Susan,
This is a beautiful story and I like even the dark spots. The picture you chose is so sweet and who couldn't love a kitty like that? The message is hopeful and uplifting. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Chey! Thank you! I tried...but this was rambling, and the other won! Most deserving too. I was glad to be able to remember the apple trees. I can shut my eyes and hear the bees and see the kittens I used to have with me...boy that was a long time ago! Thanks again Chey. I appreciate this note! hug, Susan
Comment from Espresso momma
I liked this walk down memory lane in your story. Recalling the sweet stories and dreams of my childhood makes your story perfect. That photo is even better. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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I liked this walk down memory lane in your story. Recalling the sweet stories and dreams of my childhood makes your story perfect. That photo is even better. Great job.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi there! What a kind and wonderful note...your enthusiasm and time for me is humbling, and what a thrill it is, to see that you enjoyed this. I apologize for another pasted thank you....I have read all these super reviews and love you all, for each and every one of them!! Sincerely, Susan
Comment from CALLAHANMR
hi Susan:}
Another remarkable piece of nostalgic writing. The photograph of the kitten smelling the apple blossoms just blew me away on your magic sailboat. AAs usual, I have some specific comments:
1. Like I once was. And my father gave me an album, and the song told me to 'spread [you ==> your] tiny wings and fly away'. {A typo?}
2. Said the mother crow to her fledgling babe ... 'precarious is the wind, my love, it will bully and it will blow. But never let it lay you low. Fly away, and spread your wings. Fly into the rainbow and listen to the happy [sing ==> song].' {This is a beautiful passage. Did you mean "song"?}
3. I know the crows were part of the contest, but I felt like you were a little awkward in tying them into your memories. I think their advice would be like: 'We need to tell our little birds the secret of returning to their happy times in the apple tree. They need to know that the tree and the blossoms will always be there to enjoy, when they close their eyes and float on the gentle breeze,' Just a thought.}
Susan, I love your imagination. I think you have a strong contest entry.
Love and Iris Hugs for good luck in the contest.
Roger
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hi Susan:}
Another remarkable piece of nostalgic writing. The photograph of the kitten smelling the apple blossoms just blew me away on your magic sailboat. AAs usual, I have some specific comments:
1. Like I once was. And my father gave me an album, and the song told me to 'spread [you ==> your] tiny wings and fly away'. {A typo?}
2. Said the mother crow to her fledgling babe ... 'precarious is the wind, my love, it will bully and it will blow. But never let it lay you low. Fly away, and spread your wings. Fly into the rainbow and listen to the happy [sing ==> song].' {This is a beautiful passage. Did you mean "song"?}
3. I know the crows were part of the contest, but I felt like you were a little awkward in tying them into your memories. I think their advice would be like: 'We need to tell our little birds the secret of returning to their happy times in the apple tree. They need to know that the tree and the blossoms will always be there to enjoy, when they close their eyes and float on the gentle breeze,' Just a thought.}
Susan, I love your imagination. I think you have a strong contest entry.
Love and Iris Hugs for good luck in the contest.
Roger
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello again Susan
Girl friend this is a superb story. It sure makes me hearken back 55 years ago when I was a boy and visited my uncle's farm. Life then was such a treat. Thanks for the happy memories
Bear
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Hello again Susan
Girl friend this is a superb story. It sure makes me hearken back 55 years ago when I was a boy and visited my uncle's farm. Life then was such a treat. Thanks for the happy memories
Bear
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
