A Seed Of Faith
Moving Mountains; Poetry Wands Contest Submission77 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
I like the theme of finding strength in God's words. You capture the human experience of despair and then finding refuge in the Bible. I like the structure of this poem.
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I like the theme of finding strength in God's words. You capture the human experience of despair and then finding refuge in the Bible. I like the structure of this poem.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from PoetSpirit
Wow! That was definitely empowering!!! Very well written and presented! I truly enjoyed reading this piece of divine inspiration. no revisions needed! Best wishes, Emily
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Wow! That was definitely empowering!!! Very well written and presented! I truly enjoyed reading this piece of divine inspiration. no revisions needed! Best wishes, Emily
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this beautiful, heartfelt poem about the light that gave hope in one full of despair. this is worthy of a six but i'm all out. good luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this beautiful, heartfelt poem about the light that gave hope in one full of despair. this is worthy of a six but i'm all out. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from ameen786
Hello mystery poet, your awesome poem ought to wrap up the contest with you as the winner; great presentation with superb flow and wonderful rhyme and rhythm, love the theme as well, the last stanza brings home 'faith'--extremely well, thanks for sharing.
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Hello mystery poet, your awesome poem ought to wrap up the contest with you as the winner; great presentation with superb flow and wonderful rhyme and rhythm, love the theme as well, the last stanza brings home 'faith'--extremely well, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so beautiful, so spiritual and such a powerful poem. There is so much in these words telling us how to be strong, strong enough to fight against the devil and his rotten seeds of evil. This is one excellent contest entry, I wish you the very best of luck!xsx
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That is so beautiful, so spiritual and such a powerful poem. There is so much in these words telling us how to be strong, strong enough to fight against the devil and his rotten seeds of evil. This is one excellent contest entry, I wish you the very best of luck!xsx
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Wonderfully written work on spirituality. It sounds as though you have succeeded in moving that mountain. Your poem is excellently written and the form is wonderful. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
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Wonderfully written work on spirituality. It sounds as though you have succeeded in moving that mountain. Your poem is excellently written and the form is wonderful. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your poem, A Seed Of Faith, is wonderful. It reminds us all we need is a tiny seed of faith to make it in this world that seems so daunting and depressing at the best of times. Your poem spoke to me and for that I am forever grateful. Your poem has an exceptional rhyming scheme and the cadence is smooth and sure. I love the three words in the center... they really set the emotional scene for the stanzas to come. Excellent work!
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Your poem, A Seed Of Faith, is wonderful. It reminds us all we need is a tiny seed of faith to make it in this world that seems so daunting and depressing at the best of times. Your poem spoke to me and for that I am forever grateful. Your poem has an exceptional rhyming scheme and the cadence is smooth and sure. I love the three words in the center... they really set the emotional scene for the stanzas to come. Excellent work!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from TammyGail
But I what a lovely job you did on this poem
It was very well written and expressed
Heartfelt and touching, lovely imagery used
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
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But I what a lovely job you did on this poem
It was very well written and expressed
Heartfelt and touching, lovely imagery used
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
Comment from mrsmajor
This was so well written, using quatrains, with rhyming that made for a wonderful read..your thoughts in the beginning, and near the end, showed the difference, between satan and our loving Almighty God..with so much truth in its every word...I enjoyed this so much, and can understand the fight you went through, but that Holy Book, the Bible, is the answer to it all.
I am so glad you won the fight..God Bless You!
"A tiny seed of Faith in His word is the weapon you must use"
Thank you for sharing, it was my pleasure,
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
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This was so well written, using quatrains, with rhyming that made for a wonderful read..your thoughts in the beginning, and near the end, showed the difference, between satan and our loving Almighty God..with so much truth in its every word...I enjoyed this so much, and can understand the fight you went through, but that Holy Book, the Bible, is the answer to it all.
I am so glad you won the fight..God Bless You!
"A tiny seed of Faith in His word is the weapon you must use"
Thank you for sharing, it was my pleasure,
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the six stars and your words Victoria...I appeciate them...blessings.
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You are most welcome, it was indeed My pleasure!
Blessings!
Comment from Ekim777
There are lines in the first few verses that are clumsy, sound wise as if scrunched into the rhyme scheme. Read your work aloud to catch what I mean. Rhymes are nice but not more important than cadence and rhythm. The music is the life blood of the poem. The rhymes are a technical tool. As we get further down and faith takes over, your flow of words become more graceful.To delve briefly into your content, I imagine you are over awed by the dark abyss of yourself even though that is where your soul resides. Your soul gives you your meaning to life if it is aloud into the light. Between you and your soul are a host shadows and ghosts, trials and tribulations along the way. To put it more succinctly; Eugene o' Neil said; " I thought life was a long day's journey into night but discovered that it was a long day's journey into light."
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
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There are lines in the first few verses that are clumsy, sound wise as if scrunched into the rhyme scheme. Read your work aloud to catch what I mean. Rhymes are nice but not more important than cadence and rhythm. The music is the life blood of the poem. The rhymes are a technical tool. As we get further down and faith takes over, your flow of words become more graceful.To delve briefly into your content, I imagine you are over awed by the dark abyss of yourself even though that is where your soul resides. Your soul gives you your meaning to life if it is aloud into the light. Between you and your soul are a host shadows and ghosts, trials and tribulations along the way. To put it more succinctly; Eugene o' Neil said; " I thought life was a long day's journey into night but discovered that it was a long day's journey into light."
Comment Written 03-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2012
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Hi Ekim777...I believe that when we are in the darkest parts of our lives we become unbalanced with no rhythm. Perhaps that becomes a problem when expressing this kind of turmoil...even when writing about it one can not seem to express it in any set rhythm...as you mentioned...when faith takes over the flow becomes more graceful...hence the better flow. Just my thoughts. I do appreciate your review because it actually got me to thinking about why you might find the first few versus to be ``clumsy``. I believe I have my answer now. This pertains to me only though. Thank you again for the insightful comments. Blessings.
