Firecracker
A Naughty, Naughty Modified Rondeau Redouble ...33 total reviews
Comment from Doc Holiday
Very well-written, snide type of poem that I feel you were snickering when you wrote it! Love the phrases, do more than just to prick her..polish up that tallywacker...
Smart rhyme pattern, with a Smart-ass finish!
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Very well-written, snide type of poem that I feel you were snickering when you wrote it! Love the phrases, do more than just to prick her..polish up that tallywacker...
Smart rhyme pattern, with a Smart-ass finish!
Nicely done!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2012
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Oh yeah, I was snickering. Now if I could just get that tallywacker into motio... oh never mind...I need some bloody emotion along with it! LOL Then again this is NOT a bio. *smirk*...well not ALL of it.
Haha
Thanks for a sterling review.
Closet
Comment from Spitfire
Hilarious! Please do more than prick her. A call to action for you guys. You can't get away anymore with slam bam or she'll just snicker. "Tallywacker" -- love the name. A cool right.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Hilarious! Please do more than prick her. A call to action for you guys. You can't get away anymore with slam bam or she'll just snicker. "Tallywacker" -- love the name. A cool right.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Wow, thankyou Shari. I loved your review and you summed up my six verser so well...the whole poem was actually built around his tallywacker! Haha
Cheers and glad you got a snicker from this one.
It wasn't for everybody. Nice to know you have my twisted sense of humour! LOL
Cheers and thanks for the top rating and choice words.
Phillippa xo
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You're welcome, Phillippa. If you have time, hope you start following my script (Scenes are in caps on my profile.)
Comment from despiser
Owww! I'm suing!
My retinas auuuggghhhh.
Typing blindly - BANG!
did ya jump?
not a bio huh?
my firm nice arse it aint
POP
... What was that?
Thoroughly enjoyable icker-acker poem cpJ
Would it be the same person on the front and the back? whoever that may be?
LOL
About time you wrote something
Good to have you backy
-DEE
xx
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Owww! I'm suing!
My retinas auuuggghhhh.
Typing blindly - BANG!
did ya jump?
not a bio huh?
my firm nice arse it aint
POP
... What was that?
Thoroughly enjoyable icker-acker poem cpJ
Would it be the same person on the front and the back? whoever that may be?
LOL
About time you wrote something
Good to have you backy
-DEE
xx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Haha...you liked my "icker-acker-tallywacker" piece then huh? YUP!
LOL Thanks DEE for da choice review...funny as f**k as always.
I mean front AND back as in front THEN back...silly...not front and back at same time ... and I DID NOT mean fack as in back either! LOL Nice to be backy though...thanks for da sixer.
You made my day...have a nice one yourself.
I know this was WAY too much info for some...but HEY! its NOT a bio...*smirk*...well, I mean I am NO firecracker!
Bahaha
Bet your firm arse I ain't.
cpJfB xo
Comment from Connie C
Yeah! You are back, Sweetie, and with a big "bang" too! You need to come around more often on this site to spice things up. You're off to a great start here with this one. Aside from the message here (I got so caught up in that) that I failed to see with my first reading that you've got some great rhyme here (flicker, prick her, kicker, thicker, and so on on). You notice I said "first reading." I read it three times--twice to myself and once to Bill. I'll have to look into what a Rondeau is; can't remember all these forms. But I'm sure your modified rondeau is right on target. Loved this one! Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Yeah! You are back, Sweetie, and with a big "bang" too! You need to come around more often on this site to spice things up. You're off to a great start here with this one. Aside from the message here (I got so caught up in that) that I failed to see with my first reading that you've got some great rhyme here (flicker, prick her, kicker, thicker, and so on on). You notice I said "first reading." I read it three times--twice to myself and once to Bill. I'll have to look into what a Rondeau is; can't remember all these forms. But I'm sure your modified rondeau is right on target. Loved this one! Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2012
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Haha, thanks Connie and yep, had to come back with a bang! Just hope this was that and NOT a serious splutter...glad you enjoyed it thrice. Say hi to Bill! LOL Many thanks for your sixer review and rating.
Loved it, and you.
Cheers Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment from Gungalo
You really did it this time girl!! So many words in here that beg to be unleashed on the readers. LOL you'll make them work I fear. Fantastic, though not really a rondeau redouble.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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You really did it this time girl!! So many words in here that beg to be unleashed on the readers. LOL you'll make them work I fear. Fantastic, though not really a rondeau redouble.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Thanks Gunga...but I DID say MODIFIED in my title...Ahh...who really care's? As long as SOMEONE gets a laugh, I got a feeling format simply won't matter diddly squat. But thanks a bunch for pointing that out! Its 9/10's a Rondeau Redouble which is close enough for me to mention "modified".
Closet
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I know that Closet, it wasn't a criticism but just a comment. LOL.
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I know that. My response was also NOT a criticism but a comment.
LOL
I don't always like to stick to the rules. Mods are fun.
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LOL.
Comment from Chris Tee
Hi stranger, where have you been for so long pretty girl??
A rather commendable piece suggestive of poetry if I may say so old sport
Well done indeed with this rather splendid work ma'am.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Hi stranger, where have you been for so long pretty girl??
A rather commendable piece suggestive of poetry if I may say so old sport
Well done indeed with this rather splendid work ma'am.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Hello there Chris. I have been excrutiatingly busy...with life and a publication so had to devote a lot of time to that if I wan't it to be a success. I appreciate your commendable review.
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from RebelRose
This is really cute. No need for me to google Tallywacker. I have 4 brothers,5 nephews, a son and 2 grandsons and that has been a family term all my life. I don't know what Google has to say but I know how we used the term, ha ha.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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This is really cute. No need for me to google Tallywacker. I have 4 brothers,5 nephews, a son and 2 grandsons and that has been a family term all my life. I don't know what Google has to say but I know how we used the term, ha ha.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Haha, glad you have it worked out...I wasn't sure where the term derived from. Many thanks for your thoughtful review RR.
Cheers Closet xo
Comment from miss_LXS
The piece was witty, with a compelling rhythm and sarcastic edge. The content sparks so much speculation: is it abuse? Or a random hookup? The reader is free to form their own mental picture through clever imagery and caustic wit.
Great job! =)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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The piece was witty, with a compelling rhythm and sarcastic edge. The content sparks so much speculation: is it abuse? Or a random hookup? The reader is free to form their own mental picture through clever imagery and caustic wit.
Great job! =)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Haha NOT abuse...unless of course if you call NO foreplay abuse. Hmmm, maybe you are onto something there! LOL Definitely NOT a random hookup...just a big exaggeration of frustrations with the homefires sometimes. Glad you got a little more out of this than an unsatisfied housewife's rant...of course it WASN'T a bio. *smirk*
Cheers and thanks for a choice review. Most appreciated.
Closet
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Still, it was a good read. You're welcome.
Comment from Frankeddy
Hi I sort of got the drift of it, need an Aussie to explain it. When Gordon Lightfoot started out he sang one " Long John tiddley wacker over grown kidney cracker.it was Austalian. Then he would explain it.
You got your rhyming in there and another good job.
Good bright and colorful setting.
Appropriate accompanying picture.
Well done. Frankeddy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Hi I sort of got the drift of it, need an Aussie to explain it. When Gordon Lightfoot started out he sang one " Long John tiddley wacker over grown kidney cracker.it was Austalian. Then he would explain it.
You got your rhyming in there and another good job.
Good bright and colorful setting.
Appropriate accompanying picture.
Well done. Frankeddy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Haha...only sort of? LOL Thanks Ed...I really appreciate your humorous review and enlightening facts.
Cheers Phillippa xo
PS Say hi to Marg for me.
Comment from krazykats2011
This is a very interesting piece, I will have to admit. Not all that often will you have someone tell it from the female perspective quite the way you have done here. I love the tallywhacker choice of words. This was very smooth reading from one stanza to the next and told of each level of her intensity. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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This is a very interesting piece, I will have to admit. Not all that often will you have someone tell it from the female perspective quite the way you have done here. I love the tallywhacker choice of words. This was very smooth reading from one stanza to the next and told of each level of her intensity. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012
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Haha, thanks so much. I must admit, it started with the word "tallywacker" and just kind of evolved from there. There is a small element of fact in this...just GROSSLY exaggerated.
Cheers and thanks a bunch.
Closet
