Deirdre
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Comment from Dean Kuch
There's an episode from an old Home Box Office series you might recall, Suze. Tales from the Crypt, do you remember that? The old Crypt Keeper was the host, a puppet controlled by Kevin Yager, who also did the voice.
Anyhow, in the episode titled, "Collection Completed", actor M. Emmitt Walsh plays a man who retires from his job after forty years, and now his wife (who seems okay but a little bit flaky) would be stuck having him around the house, 24/7. Their home was overrun with animals of all kinds--squirrels, dogs, cats... You name it, this guy's wife had it. Her husband was not particularly fond of all her animals. So, he began killing, then stuffing them.
I won't reveal the ending, but I'll put it to you this way...
...the guys wife got to keep her animals.
I kinda saw the ending to your stroy coming, and knew Deirdre was up to no good. Too bad Ronald didn't realize it. He might not have such a sore throat now if he had. I pictured Deirdre rolling Ronald up in a rug, carting him off, then stuffing him too. You know, for sentiments sake?
This was a great horror story, the very kind I like to read, as well as write.
Good stuff (no pun intended, heh-heh)!
Thanks so much for recommending it.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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There's an episode from an old Home Box Office series you might recall, Suze. Tales from the Crypt, do you remember that? The old Crypt Keeper was the host, a puppet controlled by Kevin Yager, who also did the voice.
Anyhow, in the episode titled, "Collection Completed", actor M. Emmitt Walsh plays a man who retires from his job after forty years, and now his wife (who seems okay but a little bit flaky) would be stuck having him around the house, 24/7. Their home was overrun with animals of all kinds--squirrels, dogs, cats... You name it, this guy's wife had it. Her husband was not particularly fond of all her animals. So, he began killing, then stuffing them.
I won't reveal the ending, but I'll put it to you this way...
...the guys wife got to keep her animals.
I kinda saw the ending to your stroy coming, and knew Deirdre was up to no good. Too bad Ronald didn't realize it. He might not have such a sore throat now if he had. I pictured Deirdre rolling Ronald up in a rug, carting him off, then stuffing him too. You know, for sentiments sake?
This was a great horror story, the very kind I like to read, as well as write.
Good stuff (no pun intended, heh-heh)!
Thanks so much for recommending it.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Hey Dean! I'm just tickled to death! >:) that you enjoyed this! My brother also loved it and told me it should be a movie. LOL! Thank you for this great note. You've made my day! honest! Suse and LOVE the graphics here too! :D
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No worries, Suse. It was entirely my pleasure.
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Hi again, didn't mean to short change you with a reply! I had company all of a sudden. But, yes, I used to watch Tales, but didn't know who the voice was. And M. Emmett is one of my fav actors. I loved him in that movie with France McDormand. He was a PI who was a killer. What was the name of it? Ahhhh...Coen brothers film. They did Lady Killers, etc...DARK humor! I'll try to find that show/episode online and watch it soon. Thanks again Dean.
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"Blood Simple" is the name of the film, Suse.
I have it in my movie library. It's one of my favorites due to all the plot twists involved.
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Yes! Thanks. I was thinking of 'Simple Plan' with Billy Bob Thornton! But I knew that wasn't quite right. If you haven't seen it, it's good.
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Yeah, I just happen to own that one too, lol. With Bill Paxton, about the mob money on the crashed airplane in the woods, right?
Yeah, it's a good 'un.
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Yes! Thanks. I was thinking of 'Simple Plan' with Billy Bob Thornton! But I knew that wasn't quite right. If you haven't seen it, it's good.
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"Blood Simple" is the name of the film, Suse.
I have it in my movie library. It's one of my favorites due to all the plot twists involved.
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Yes! Love that movie. I've watched it so many times. Is M. Emmett still living? I should google. He's awesome.
Comment from jakuper
It's a very good story. Though I could anticipate the ending, it was good and strong.
The story flows in a good pace - it's not too slow to stop the onterest, ot troo quick for loosing the interest in earlier lines.
The wording is good too. Characters are well defined.
A well written story.
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It's a very good story. Though I could anticipate the ending, it was good and strong.
The story flows in a good pace - it's not too slow to stop the onterest, ot troo quick for loosing the interest in earlier lines.
The wording is good too. Characters are well defined.
A well written story.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2012
Comment from ennahanid
First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did very much, it held my attention whilst I held my breath
wondering how it was going to end.
Thank you for entertaining me today
Dinah
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First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and I did very much, it held my attention whilst I held my breath
wondering how it was going to end.
Thank you for entertaining me today
Dinah
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from Sally Carter
Heck, Susan, I never saw that coming! Very creepy, and such a clever progression from that innocuous first line. What a brilliant second sentence. I so admire your imagination!
I was a bit thrown by changes of tense between paras 1 and 2, which could be a bit clearer.
Perhaps because I am a Brit, I didn't understand "Cujo".
Good dialogue and progression through the story. Maybe I realised something nasty was going to happen when you described Deirdre's appearance under the street lamp. Oooherr...
A fantastic touch, as well, the click of the toenails on the floor.
A terrific read, and I wish you luck with it.
Sally
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Heck, Susan, I never saw that coming! Very creepy, and such a clever progression from that innocuous first line. What a brilliant second sentence. I so admire your imagination!
I was a bit thrown by changes of tense between paras 1 and 2, which could be a bit clearer.
Perhaps because I am a Brit, I didn't understand "Cujo".
Good dialogue and progression through the story. Maybe I realised something nasty was going to happen when you described Deirdre's appearance under the street lamp. Oooherr...
A fantastic touch, as well, the click of the toenails on the floor.
A terrific read, and I wish you luck with it.
Sally
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from sugardog
Creepy!! So creepy. I would not want my animals stuffed that's for sure. Weird. You did a great job spooking the reader in this creative and original piece. You are good at writing suspense stories...they are hard to do!!! Very nice work. Hope all is well!!!!! Dana
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Creepy!! So creepy. I would not want my animals stuffed that's for sure. Weird. You did a great job spooking the reader in this creative and original piece. You are good at writing suspense stories...they are hard to do!!! Very nice work. Hope all is well!!!!! Dana
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from humpwhistle
Good work, Suse. This is a genre I just can't seem to work in, but You do a fine job of telling a grisly and suspenseful tale. You have a fine mix of believable dialogue and direct narrative.
Taxidermy is always creepy to me.
Peace, Lee
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Good work, Suse. This is a genre I just can't seem to work in, but You do a fine job of telling a grisly and suspenseful tale. You have a fine mix of believable dialogue and direct narrative.
Taxidermy is always creepy to me.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Mar-2012
Comment from Sasha
I absolutely love this story. It is amazingly unique and you kept me glued to the screen from beginning to end. Where do you do you come up with this stuff? I am so jealous! Great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best,
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I absolutely love this story. It is amazingly unique and you kept me glued to the screen from beginning to end. Where do you do you come up with this stuff? I am so jealous! Great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best,
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello Susan. You did a fine job with this exciting story. Well written, great dialogue, and interesting from start to end. The opening line was a text book example of hooking the reader to pull them into the story. Great job...Tim
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Hello Susan. You did a fine job with this exciting story. Well written, great dialogue, and interesting from start to end. The opening line was a text book example of hooking the reader to pull them into the story. Great job...Tim
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
Your entry for the sentence starts the story is superbly written. I wish you good luck in the contest. Your writiing packs and emotional punch. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. In your story you've effectively managed to establish a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. You used the following:
Narrative: great
Characerization: excellent
Use of devices Alliteration & Metaphor: great
Content: excellent
I'd recommend your story to other reviewers. Thanks for entertaining me. Keep on writing amazing stories with a creative pen. I wish you a lovely day...Melissa.
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Susan,
Your entry for the sentence starts the story is superbly written. I wish you good luck in the contest. Your writiing packs and emotional punch. Your story paints a picture in the readers head. In your story you've effectively managed to establish a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. You used the following:
Narrative: great
Characerization: excellent
Use of devices Alliteration & Metaphor: great
Content: excellent
I'd recommend your story to other reviewers. Thanks for entertaining me. Keep on writing amazing stories with a creative pen. I wish you a lovely day...Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
Comment from Darla9
This is crazy! But in a good way though LOL Can't imagine someone would stay with a woman who keeps her dead animals stuffed in the first place, but hey, it's not for me to judge LOL Brilliant contest entry, you've got my vote! :) xx
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This is crazy! But in a good way though LOL Can't imagine someone would stay with a woman who keeps her dead animals stuffed in the first place, but hey, it's not for me to judge LOL Brilliant contest entry, you've got my vote! :) xx
Comment Written 17-Mar-2012
