Night is Falling
Our trip through hospice21 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
Lovely, poignant story, well told, taking me back to three years ago when I was in a similar place. Beautifully expressed and very touching entry for the contest. Good luck. Marcia
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Lovely, poignant story, well told, taking me back to three years ago when I was in a similar place. Beautifully expressed and very touching entry for the contest. Good luck. Marcia
Comment Written 29-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Marcia. Why does it always seem as though decades are but a second in time when the end is near? Hugs, Maggie
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The older we get, the quicker time flies :) Take care, Marcia
Comment from Bobbi22
This was obviously written with much heartfelt emotion that the reader can feel from beginning to end. In so few words you captured such intense love and pain and fear. Life does sometimes seem like just a day as you described. Midnight comes much too soon. Very well written.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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This was obviously written with much heartfelt emotion that the reader can feel from beginning to end. In so few words you captured such intense love and pain and fear. Life does sometimes seem like just a day as you described. Midnight comes much too soon. Very well written.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you, RightPics, for your kind review. Being with my husband for over forty-five years seems far too little time. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a very touching story. My parents have been separated for the first time after 66 years of marriage. My Dad's health is failing and my Mom can't be with him every day. It is a change that we are all finding difficult to adjust to. Your story touched my heart and I can relate to it. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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This is a very touching story. My parents have been separated for the first time after 66 years of marriage. My Dad's health is failing and my Mom can't be with him every day. It is a change that we are all finding difficult to adjust to. Your story touched my heart and I can relate to it. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Joy, for your good wishes. I hope your parents will get through their trials. I know ours will end with my husband in his heavenly home and that one day, I will join him. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from Pandora's Pen
This sad and gentle tribute to love and a life of togetherness is beautifully effective. Very touching.
My only confusion concerns the sentence: My mind was screaming 'not again',...
I am uncertain what 'not again' refers to. Was there a prior incident when he did not recognize anyone?
Also, as the piece progresses, I wasn't sure if time was passing or if the "speaker" was recounting the culmination of all the previous days. The time frame got fuzzy.
These are technical issues that do not, in any way, detract from the beauty of the story. Thank you for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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This sad and gentle tribute to love and a life of togetherness is beautifully effective. Very touching.
My only confusion concerns the sentence: My mind was screaming 'not again',...
I am uncertain what 'not again' refers to. Was there a prior incident when he did not recognize anyone?
Also, as the piece progresses, I wasn't sure if time was passing or if the "speaker" was recounting the culmination of all the previous days. The time frame got fuzzy.
These are technical issues that do not, in any way, detract from the beauty of the story. Thank you for sharing it.
Pandora's Pen
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Pandora's Pen, thank you so much for pointing out difficulties with this piece. It was written from the heart and sometimes the heart doesn't see what it's writing. I will go over it again and see if it's possible to clear time frames a bit. You are a sweetheart. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from sugardog
I LOVED this...wow...so well written. Full of real emotion. Description. I love the way you started this piece out in dialogue-you pulled me right into the moment. Love your soft ending...very, very good piece. Congrats on Story of the Month nomination-wonderful and good luck!!! Dana
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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I LOVED this...wow...so well written. Full of real emotion. Description. I love the way you started this piece out in dialogue-you pulled me right into the moment. Love your soft ending...very, very good piece. Congrats on Story of the Month nomination-wonderful and good luck!!! Dana
Comment Written 24-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thank you, sugardog, for your kind words and generous good wishes. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from c_lucas
Recently I experienced the lost of the second of two very good friends of my. The husband went first, two years later his wife past on. Their endings, though accepted, came very fast. The couple was married for 67 years. I had the priviledge of knowing them close for the last seven years. Very well written.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Recently I experienced the lost of the second of two very good friends of my. The husband went first, two years later his wife past on. Their endings, though accepted, came very fast. The couple was married for 67 years. I had the priviledge of knowing them close for the last seven years. Very well written.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Thank you, c_lucas. Losing anyone is hard for us, but losing a spouse, who has been literally you're other half is something I just never imagined happening. We had this foolish dream that we would go together because we lived so perfectly together. When we faced the good or the bad, we reached inside our marriage to either celebrate or make things right. So few of our friends seemed to carry that through in their marriages. Thank you for reading and for passing along the story of your friends.
Hugs,
Maggie
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You're welcome, Maggie. Charlie
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an absolutely sad story that we have here old sport. You kept me captivated throughout the read and brought tears to my eyes ma'am.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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This is an absolutely sad story that we have here old sport. You kept me captivated throughout the read and brought tears to my eyes ma'am.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Chris Tee, for reading this piece. It is very special to me, as might guess. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from rightforyou
Nice
I enjoyed reading this story along with the flow of the action that you have included making this a fine read...Well Done...Ron
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Nice
I enjoyed reading this story along with the flow of the action that you have included making this a fine read...Well Done...Ron
Comment Written 19-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Ron, for reading and commenting. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from Permelia
My heart is breaking along with yours- I wish I could reach out and comfort you. When I received the phone call my sister Vesta (Eldora on fanstory) had about an hour to live and wanted me to talk to her until she died, I asked where is your dad? "He can't take it, Aunt Mona- and he left the house to go to the store." So I talked for about 1 1/2 hours, so she could hear my voice as she died. Occasionally I would hear a little soft chuckle. I find myself thinking Jack and I are 88 years old - and one of us is soon going to lose the other-and then my tears start falling for you all over-we have been married 53 years and dated for approx 2 or 3 years. It is hard to imagine life without our soul mate. I am so very sorry, Maggie. Love Mona
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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My heart is breaking along with yours- I wish I could reach out and comfort you. When I received the phone call my sister Vesta (Eldora on fanstory) had about an hour to live and wanted me to talk to her until she died, I asked where is your dad? "He can't take it, Aunt Mona- and he left the house to go to the store." So I talked for about 1 1/2 hours, so she could hear my voice as she died. Occasionally I would hear a little soft chuckle. I find myself thinking Jack and I are 88 years old - and one of us is soon going to lose the other-and then my tears start falling for you all over-we have been married 53 years and dated for approx 2 or 3 years. It is hard to imagine life without our soul mate. I am so very sorry, Maggie. Love Mona
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Mona. Having friends like you in this with me makes a huge difference. Your sister was so fortunate to have you talking to her in her last moments. Everyone keeps telling me that sometimes the person won't die if his loved ones are near. Maybe that's why I find it so difficult to go out and do anything; hoping to keep him with me. Hugs, Maggie
Comment from Veronica Grace
:( I am so sad for you! I don't want to cry! I can feel your love and devotion as I read your story. Prayers for you and hope you're holding up okay. Hugs Oh, you write so well and I will see you again.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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:( I am so sad for you! I don't want to cry! I can feel your love and devotion as I read your story. Prayers for you and hope you're holding up okay. Hugs Oh, you write so well and I will see you again.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Veronica. Keep the prayers coming, please. They help us through. Hugs, Maggie
