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Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains about the poetic process. I admired your "wells," "soil" and "rivers" and the imagery including in the final stanza. Your presentation is quite striking and synergistic with the focus on "revelation." Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains about the poetic process. I admired your "wells," "soil" and "rivers" and the imagery including in the final stanza. Your presentation is quite striking and synergistic with the focus on "revelation." Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Hi Joan. Surprise to see you reviewing this old one. thanks!
Comment from Jean Lutz
I love how you depict the many waters in this. Last night I went to a Bible study on Revelation. The word actually means to lift the veil -- uncovering. Perhaps with that in mind you can work it in for the final line.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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I love how you depict the many waters in this. Last night I went to a Bible study on Revelation. The word actually means to lift the veil -- uncovering. Perhaps with that in mind you can work it in for the final line.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2012
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Love that image, Jean! thanks!
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey sweetness
I enjoyed this poem of yours. It is a deep mother. I thought about that last stanza and came up with this: "flowing within oneness of thought' You continue to amaze me with your immense talent
Bear.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Hey sweetness
I enjoyed this poem of yours. It is a deep mother. I thought about that last stanza and came up with this: "flowing within oneness of thought' You continue to amaze me with your immense talent
Bear.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thanks Glen!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Jj,
This is a fabulous poem and the last line works for me. Your rhyme and phrasing are impeccable and I love the theme. You have good alliteration and a gentle flow. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Hi Jj,
This is a fabulous poem and the last line works for me. Your rhyme and phrasing are impeccable and I love the theme. You have good alliteration and a gentle flow. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 03-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
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Thanks Marilyn.
Comment from HPicasso
Great creative expression on how a poet searches inside.
I really enjoyed this thought provoking poem.
Loved your imagery used alongside your poem.
The flow is fantastic and the descriptions are great. Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Great creative expression on how a poet searches inside.
I really enjoyed this thought provoking poem.
Loved your imagery used alongside your poem.
The flow is fantastic and the descriptions are great. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Thanks HPicasso. I really appreciate your kind words.
Comment from DALLAS01
This is a deep look into each poets uniquely different approach, and even the personal motives that drives his work. It is very melodic and full of imagery. Thought provoking.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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This is a deep look into each poets uniquely different approach, and even the personal motives that drives his work. It is very melodic and full of imagery. Thought provoking.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Hey, D. I'm grateful for your continued support. Thank you.
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you're welcome.
Comment from Gungalo
Last line: Flows with oneness of thought.
Good write VP but I beg to differ with you. I don't want to write with oneness of thought. I want to write individualized poetry. I may have read you totally wrong but your write says so.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Last line: Flows with oneness of thought.
Good write VP but I beg to differ with you. I don't want to write with oneness of thought. I want to write individualized poetry. I may have read you totally wrong but your write says so.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2012
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Darlin, I'll rethink that line...
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Okay girl.
Comment from missy98writer
Jewell,
Your poem is beautifully written. Your words paint grand imagery in the readers head. Your posey about writing poetry is meaningful and poignant , yet thought pondering. Your rhyme and meter are both great while you use excellent metaphor and very good alliteration. I especally enjoyed your lines: "We glide in rivers of comfort or dive to find treasures held deep, Seeking of knowledge comes easy; Epiphany, victor's beseech." I like your similie: 'treasures buried within.' I like your similie: 'treasures buried within.' I love you poem, my friend. I'd recommend your beautiful poem to others to review. I was delighted to have read or reviewed your poetic jewel. Please have a fabulous day...Melissa.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Jewell,
Your poem is beautifully written. Your words paint grand imagery in the readers head. Your posey about writing poetry is meaningful and poignant , yet thought pondering. Your rhyme and meter are both great while you use excellent metaphor and very good alliteration. I especally enjoyed your lines: "We glide in rivers of comfort or dive to find treasures held deep, Seeking of knowledge comes easy; Epiphany, victor's beseech." I like your similie: 'treasures buried within.' I like your similie: 'treasures buried within.' I love you poem, my friend. I'd recommend your beautiful poem to others to review. I was delighted to have read or reviewed your poetic jewel. Please have a fabulous day...Melissa.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Thanks so much, Melisssa dear.
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI Jewel,
This is stellar and I enjoyed reading it very much this afternoon. My goodness, it took me on a mind trip with your well chosen and scribed words. This is one of your best, for sure.
You asked for suggestions for the last line. May I offer suggestions for the last two?
It's [within]in you and me, it's in others
[and freely flows with] oneness of thought
A good read this afternoon!
Ray
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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HI Jewel,
This is stellar and I enjoyed reading it very much this afternoon. My goodness, it took me on a mind trip with your well chosen and scribed words. This is one of your best, for sure.
You asked for suggestions for the last line. May I offer suggestions for the last two?
It's [within]in you and me, it's in others
[and freely flows with] oneness of thought
A good read this afternoon!
Ray
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Ray, I loved your suggestions!! Thanks so much!
ch!
Comment from Veronica Grace
I thought you did a great job with this. Since you didn't like the last line, I thought you could use flowing instead of to flow. Just suggestion.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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I thought you did a great job with this. Since you didn't like the last line, I thought you could use flowing instead of to flow. Just suggestion.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2012
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Good idea! Thank you!
