Find my valentine
A girl waiting for her valentine.......2 total reviews
Comment from Chris Tee
Your poem has too many lines.
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not to the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Before you post a poem read the rules carefully and abide by those rules.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Your poem has too many lines.
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not to the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Before you post a poem read the rules carefully and abide by those rules.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks for your valuable suggestion.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a great little poem the words are deep and meaningful and written from the heart. It is well edited and well presented, hope you get what you want this year.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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This is a great little poem the words are deep and meaningful and written from the heart. It is well edited and well presented, hope you get what you want this year.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks that you appreciated my little work as this is my frst poem which ever wrote.
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Wow, I'm impressed. Keep up the good work x
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Hey Sarah good afternoon... :)
hwz u ?
