Alphabetical Clean-up
abecadrian poem18 total reviews
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
i love this poem alot.it is so simple yet wise and fun, it looks like it was fun to write too. thanks so much for sharing! i love the picture too
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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i love this poem alot.it is so simple yet wise and fun, it looks like it was fun to write too. thanks so much for sharing! i love the picture too
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2012
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Thank you. I was just goofing off with words, but they made themselves into this poem!!! Debbie
Comment from Bellringer
Debbie, Very nice work in this poetic form. I like the aggressive but positive message in your poem--sort of like tough love. Very good alliteration took the poem to a higher level. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Debbie, Very nice work in this poetic form. I like the aggressive but positive message in your poem--sort of like tough love. Very good alliteration took the poem to a higher level. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 24-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Thank you. I was really just playing around with some words, but this took on a life of its own and became a poem!!! Debbie
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You're very welcome, Debbie. Blessings, Hector
Comment from barkingdog
Faves:
-Banish Bullying
-Karate Killing
-Out with obnoxiousness
-Resist Rage
-Walk away from Weirdoes
I love this entire abecadrian. It had to take time to think of all of these and not duplicate anything.
What is zebra trafficking?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Faves:
-Banish Bullying
-Karate Killing
-Out with obnoxiousness
-Resist Rage
-Walk away from Weirdoes
I love this entire abecadrian. It had to take time to think of all of these and not duplicate anything.
What is zebra trafficking?
Comment Written 23-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
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Zebra trafficking is the capture and sale of wild zebras. This is a problem for so many wild animals. Thank so much for the 6!!! Debbie
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I didn't realize zebras were being trafficked. Is if for their skins or meat?
Comment from deb552
Well done my friend. It takes a lot of hard work and talent to 'clean-up' the alphabet the way you have. Your alliteration in each line is commendable to say the least. Some of your thoughts are fun while others more serious, which I think helps to make this an enjoyable read. Bet it felt could to get some of these things off your chest like, "Destroy discrimination," and 'hurray away hatred." I love the "walk away from weirdoes!" Nicely done once again, I wish I had a 6 for your originality alone. xxx deb
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Well done my friend. It takes a lot of hard work and talent to 'clean-up' the alphabet the way you have. Your alliteration in each line is commendable to say the least. Some of your thoughts are fun while others more serious, which I think helps to make this an enjoyable read. Bet it felt could to get some of these things off your chest like, "Destroy discrimination," and 'hurray away hatred." I love the "walk away from weirdoes!" Nicely done once again, I wish I had a 6 for your originality alone. xxx deb
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Thanks so much. I was really just playing around with words and this is what came out of it. My muse is a weird one!!! Debbie
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I think your muse and mine must be related, because some of the things I come up with are really weird; not just with my writing but with ideas in general! LOL! Anyhow, your muse did well here...very imaginative! deb
Comment from ChowChow
Well now, you must feel a LOT BETTER for cleaning up the alphabet. Now, no one will know what to say. That is, those who needed the cleaning up. But why take it out on the poor little Zebra? What did he do? He doesn't even know the alphabet (haha, had to say it)! Lauryne
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Well now, you must feel a LOT BETTER for cleaning up the alphabet. Now, no one will know what to say. That is, those who needed the cleaning up. But why take it out on the poor little Zebra? What did he do? He doesn't even know the alphabet (haha, had to say it)! Lauryne
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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I didn't want to take out the whole zoo, so the zebra had to go, LOL. Hope you are feeling better.Thanks so much for your review! Debbie
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Wecome Debbie.
Comment from axelbeariter
While most of your alphabetical raves to eliminate certain negative actions are spot on, there are a few that I'll list you might rework to connote a stronger action. For instance: Karate Killing is fine, but also could be more specific about who the victims are and why. Yell not Your obscenities. Should we rather whisper them? Zap Zebra trafficking- I wasn't aware that they were sold surreptitiously and for what? Even without my comments, you've produced a great poem of sorts.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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While most of your alphabetical raves to eliminate certain negative actions are spot on, there are a few that I'll list you might rework to connote a stronger action. For instance: Karate Killing is fine, but also could be more specific about who the victims are and why. Yell not Your obscenities. Should we rather whisper them? Zap Zebra trafficking- I wasn't aware that they were sold surreptitiously and for what? Even without my comments, you've produced a great poem of sorts.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Those are all very good points I will consider. Let's say this is a work in progress. Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from judy corcoran
very clever
though - lol - i think you're cheating a bit with 'Xtinguish'
i like 'Quit Quoting gossip'
and lol at 'Walk away from Weirdoes'
love judy
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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very clever
though - lol - i think you're cheating a bit with 'Xtinguish'
i like 'Quit Quoting gossip'
and lol at 'Walk away from Weirdoes'
love judy
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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I took some poetic licencse with several of them. Thanks so much!!! Debbie
Comment from JW
In reading this well written poem which no doubt took quite a while to create and delivers a great message - only one word that came to mind,"Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious". :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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In reading this well written poem which no doubt took quite a while to create and delivers a great message - only one word that came to mind,"Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious". :-)
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Good one! Thanks so much Jonathon!!! Debbie
Comment from oNray
Poem? Free verse I guess. That took some serious time I will bet.To find just the right word then give it a better definition is a good idea
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Poem? Free verse I guess. That took some serious time I will bet.To find just the right word then give it a better definition is a good idea
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Abecdarian is a poetry type-for real. Not one to be undertaken by the faint of heart though. thanks so much. I hope you enjoyed it!!! Debbie
Comment from FlamingSpade
Outstanding! I smiled from pic and title on. Is this an art form of any kind having the same letter run through the poem more than once? Intriguing. Love the writer's license you took with X
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Outstanding! I smiled from pic and title on. Is this an art form of any kind having the same letter run through the poem more than once? Intriguing. Love the writer's license you took with X
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Abecdarian is the poetry type that uses all 26 letters. The first 20 aren't so bad, but the last 6 are murder. Yes, I'll admit to a bit of poetic license!!! Thanks so much!!! Debbie
