For the Birds
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "My Goldfinch"Poems about those winged gifts from above.
17 total reviews
Comment from Asyraf N. Jamsari
A nice poem. That goldfinch is really really cute. Good idea you've came out with, simple vocabulary but yet elegantly suitable. Keep it up
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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A nice poem. That goldfinch is really really cute. Good idea you've came out with, simple vocabulary but yet elegantly suitable. Keep it up
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from gazzagodbod
damn mermaids your dragging these sixes out of me today, what a beautiful bird and a gorgeous creation you made from him thanks xx gazza xx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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damn mermaids your dragging these sixes out of me today, what a beautiful bird and a gorgeous creation you made from him thanks xx gazza xx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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I am overwhelmed! I an encouraged by your enthusiasm for my poems. Thanks so much! Elaine
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I really enjoyed this uplifting, fanciful poem. The poem, picture, and background are perfect together. Your account of the quiet friendship between a bird and a merman is memorable.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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I really enjoyed this uplifting, fanciful poem. The poem, picture, and background are perfect together. Your account of the quiet friendship between a bird and a merman is memorable.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2012
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Thanks for taking time to read about these two unusual friends. Elaine
Comment from Galactia
That is very creative. Great children's poem with this gorgeous bird and the mermaid.
Favourite stanza is...
he visits me often
golden bird with black markings
landing on my hand gently
his company is a treasure
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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That is very creative. Great children's poem with this gorgeous bird and the mermaid.
Favourite stanza is...
he visits me often
golden bird with black markings
landing on my hand gently
his company is a treasure
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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I appreciate your positive comments and am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice fantasy of the merman enjoying the finch. It seems nature should be important to everyone. I like the background and print matching the finch's coloring.
Keep writing
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Nice fantasy of the merman enjoying the finch. It seems nature should be important to everyone. I like the background and print matching the finch's coloring.
Keep writing
Comment Written 16-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. Elaine
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No problem, Elaine.
Joan
Comment from cthomsen
This is clever. Not often do we think of a merman. I like how you have used this sweet little bird in juxtaposition to the nautical creature.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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This is clever. Not often do we think of a merman. I like how you have used this sweet little bird in juxtaposition to the nautical creature.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from Spitfire
"occasionally, he walks across my tail" LOL. That's when I picked up on the speaker although I should have caught it in stanza two. You mention the merman's need for quiet beauty. I guess the sea can be rather noisy.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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"occasionally, he walks across my tail" LOL. That's when I picked up on the speaker although I should have caught it in stanza two. You mention the merman's need for quiet beauty. I guess the sea can be rather noisy.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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The sea is actually full of noise between ships and the songs of whales and dolphins. Thanks for reading and enjoying this unusual bird poem. Elaine
Comment from donkeyoatey
What a wonderful description of the lovely bird. To me they are indeed lovely, and gifts from heaven. I thank you for choosing my art work, I am truly honored! Donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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What a wonderful description of the lovely bird. To me they are indeed lovely, and gifts from heaven. I thank you for choosing my art work, I am truly honored! Donkeyoatey
Comment Written 21-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Your art work is fabulous and fits my poem so well. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Peter@Poole
I'm in difficulty here, Elaine, and must try to get outsider my preferences for more formal poetry. You have arranged the poem in stanzas, one of which is longer than the other three, but there is little rhyme or rhythm, and the lines vary in length. And yet there are pretty images and an emerging beauty. Having got this far, I guess I must regard this as free verse, and it's better than I thought a few minutes ago!
Peter
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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I'm in difficulty here, Elaine, and must try to get outsider my preferences for more formal poetry. You have arranged the poem in stanzas, one of which is longer than the other three, but there is little rhyme or rhythm, and the lines vary in length. And yet there are pretty images and an emerging beauty. Having got this far, I guess I must regard this as free verse, and it's better than I thought a few minutes ago!
Peter
Comment Written 21-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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I write mostly free verse and rarely do I rhyme. My free verse is always varied, verses and lines are no particular length. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Elaine
Comment from poetstar
This poem so deserves a 10. I just adore it. Of course you can guess some of my favorite parts. MY FRIEND FROM THE AIR COMFORTS A MERMAN, WHO NEEDS QUIET BEAUTY, A GIFT FROM HEAVEN. I also a adore I SWIM IN ROUGH WATERS, MY CORAL VILLAGE IS WEARY. Did you say that because much of the coral reef is destroyed. I am getting so much from this poem. I also love the part about the little bird listening to the sea.
I guess I just love it all. THANKS FOR SHARING. Poet Star
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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This poem so deserves a 10. I just adore it. Of course you can guess some of my favorite parts. MY FRIEND FROM THE AIR COMFORTS A MERMAN, WHO NEEDS QUIET BEAUTY, A GIFT FROM HEAVEN. I also a adore I SWIM IN ROUGH WATERS, MY CORAL VILLAGE IS WEARY. Did you say that because much of the coral reef is destroyed. I am getting so much from this poem. I also love the part about the little bird listening to the sea.
I guess I just love it all. THANKS FOR SHARING. Poet Star
Comment Written 21-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thanks for a great review and glad you enjoyed this unusual poem. I was thinking of the coral village as an underwater city but I like your interpretation of how much of the reef is destroyed. Thanks again. Elaine
