Whispers in the Wind
Viewing comments for Prologue "Dog Sledding Story for Kids 10 & up"Brook's best lead dog is struck deaf
34 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
I'm not sure how to review this, but I'm excited to read the story again in its revised and edited version. Looking forward to what I already know is a wonderful, exciting story. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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I'm not sure how to review this, but I'm excited to read the story again in its revised and edited version. Looking forward to what I already know is a wonderful, exciting story. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012
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First off, I wanted to simply replace chapter 3 and it somehow got named Prologue. Since the object was to replace every chapter, I went through putting in the newly revised version and retitled it. I dubbed in a small intro so something would read in the Prologue. Surely, you are the only who will get stuck reading it. But many thanks!
Comment from axelbeariter
Although I don't remember the first two chapters, this one has brought tidbits of the protagonist's character to the fore. Thus, the reader is glimpsing the bravery and resourcefulness of this young lady. You've also given us a rudimentary description of her surroundings. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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Although I don't remember the first two chapters, this one has brought tidbits of the protagonist's character to the fore. Thus, the reader is glimpsing the bravery and resourcefulness of this young lady. You've also given us a rudimentary description of her surroundings. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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Your comments are very encouraging. Thanks so much for taking time to do this review. Marie
Comment from logcat
Very well done, I will like to read the rest of the story as you finish it. I thank you very much for using my husky Lacey's photo in your story, she is a trained lead dog and has given me hours of enjoyment, and is my loyal and constant companion when I'm not working. Again, a well done piece of writing, is pretty descriptive and reads well.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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Very well done, I will like to read the rest of the story as you finish it. I thank you very much for using my husky Lacey's photo in your story, she is a trained lead dog and has given me hours of enjoyment, and is my loyal and constant companion when I'm not working. Again, a well done piece of writing, is pretty descriptive and reads well.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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Thanks a million for joining me to present this chapter with added interest. I'm sure the fabulous picture of Lacey attracts readers on FS. I sure do appreciate displaying her, snow and all, and thanks for your comments and review. Marie
Comment from BHCameron
A very heartfelt chapter about the love and gratitude Brook has for Shemya. It is not overly sentimental, which gives it an authenticity for life in that part of the world. Very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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A very heartfelt chapter about the love and gratitude Brook has for Shemya. It is not overly sentimental, which gives it an authenticity for life in that part of the world. Very enjoyable.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Your comments are encouraging. Thanks so much for the review. Marie
Comment from RazberryBullet
Well written, but I always find using present tense throughout seems artificial It also constrains the writer's options.
Good job!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Well written, but I always find using present tense throughout seems artificial It also constrains the writer's options.
Good job!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Pesent tense becomes difficult to maintain sometimes. I've done this for the kids this time. Thanks for doing this review. Marie
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with imagery. This script is a nice read and is a pleasant read. It has imagery and easy to read. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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A good write with imagery. This script is a nice read and is a pleasant read. It has imagery and easy to read. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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I appreciate your encouraging remarks, Mary. Thanks so much for taking time to read and review this chapter. Marie
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Alaskastory:
No pun intended but what a story. I cannot imagine
coming face-to-face with a bear much less having one
of my beloved dogs getting into a fight with it. I
look forward to reading more of your work soon.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Alaskastory:
No pun intended but what a story. I cannot imagine
coming face-to-face with a bear much less having one
of my beloved dogs getting into a fight with it. I
look forward to reading more of your work soon.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Thanks for your comments, Jan. I glad you took time to read this and review. Marie
Comment from HPicasso
I fell in love with your hero. Fascinating subject, even though it is not the actual attack. A beautiful tale well told, a close encounter with a bear is enough to shake anyone up. This is a interesting chapter full of action. I have enjoyed reading this and look forward for more.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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I fell in love with your hero. Fascinating subject, even though it is not the actual attack. A beautiful tale well told, a close encounter with a bear is enough to shake anyone up. This is a interesting chapter full of action. I have enjoyed reading this and look forward for more.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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I appreciate your comments. Thanks so much for the fine review. marie
Comment from Nanashirley
I enjoyed the chapter. I like the way you use the telling of the story to bring the point of a desolate country but love of life together.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed the chapter. I like the way you use the telling of the story to bring the point of a desolate country but love of life together.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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You comments are encouraging. Thanks so much for the review. Marie
Comment from Janie King
Very good..It was be quite an amazing thing to had a dog sled...I'm not much for cold weather so I'd probably be one in by the fireplace but my younger sister would be wild about the idea..she always wanted to parachute out of an airplane, not in my lifetime would I do such a thing. Get the idea she's braver than I am. Great piece. I love the picture of the dog. I have two one year old little male Maltese puppies and I adore them. God bless.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Very good..It was be quite an amazing thing to had a dog sled...I'm not much for cold weather so I'd probably be one in by the fireplace but my younger sister would be wild about the idea..she always wanted to parachute out of an airplane, not in my lifetime would I do such a thing. Get the idea she's braver than I am. Great piece. I love the picture of the dog. I have two one year old little male Maltese puppies and I adore them. God bless.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2012
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Thanks for sharing your love of dogs and for the time you gave to reading this and doing a review. Marie
