Comment from smudge

Average

Poetry comes from the heart and I hope your students are not spoiled by your advice. The poem is incorrect in fact and fiction. "Little" should not be a capital letter. Before you can tell other people how to write, you need credible achievements.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2012

Comment from chita

Excellent

You have good syllable count and a good flow with your write--everyone will be able to relate to this poem--I love where you write(Simple, little hearts-They remain oblivious) so true--one thing you can do without the periods at the end of the first and las line--good job.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012

Thanks. Just to clarify, why do you find the periods impeding?

Comment from michaelrandolph

Excellent

Enjambing the lines together makes this a pleasure to read as it breaks away from the other contest entries. Excellent poem. Staying simple in our perceptions in life is afailure of all of us. Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012

Thanks. =)

Comment from Modee

Excellent

Very nicely put. I agree. Many people have mouths, but no ears. They parrot what they hear, but only what they want to hear. Nicely said. :)

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012

Thanks. =)