He Keeps Coming and Knocking
a poem done in couplets about an undead21 total reviews
Comment from Chris Tee
These rhyming couplets are absolutely marvelous old sport.
Well done indeed with this rather sweet and splendid poetry you have composed here for us old chap.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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These rhyming couplets are absolutely marvelous old sport.
Well done indeed with this rather sweet and splendid poetry you have composed here for us old chap.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thanks Chris for reading and reviewing this poem. as your kind words are alos appreciated,,,,jim
Comment from Tonulak
This poem was as much about faith as it was the undead and you did capture some of the nervousness with irratic metter and line lengths. Good use of the couplet form, too.
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This poem was as much about faith as it was the undead and you did capture some of the nervousness with irratic metter and line lengths. Good use of the couplet form, too.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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thank you Tonulak for your review. basically i very rarely compose poems with regards to meter. why? i have no answer,,,,,jim
Comment from ameen786
Hello Jim, my friend, wonderful reflections upon fear and faith, superb phrasing with excellent rhyming, thanks for sharing, keep the faith.
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Hello Jim, my friend, wonderful reflections upon fear and faith, superb phrasing with excellent rhyming, thanks for sharing, keep the faith.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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thank you ameen for stopping by. appreciated your generous comments,,,,,jim
Comment from The Stranger
Echoes reverberate, twisting my mind,
Paranoid images creeping from behind,
Ghosts of my past, memories I own,
Relentless agony, leave me alone!
Faces appear, demons I've cast,
So long ago, condemned to the past,
Those who hurt, ripped me apart,
Tortured, left me with a broken heart!
Skeletons hang, hidden by a door,
Rattling, coming to life once more,
Why pursue me, invading my dream?
Nightmares, always making me scream!
Shadows move closer, seeking my soul,
Must remain focused, preserve my self control,
Creeping, stalking, always from behind,
Echoes reverberate around my haunted mind...
loved your poem my friend...
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Echoes reverberate, twisting my mind,
Paranoid images creeping from behind,
Ghosts of my past, memories I own,
Relentless agony, leave me alone!
Faces appear, demons I've cast,
So long ago, condemned to the past,
Those who hurt, ripped me apart,
Tortured, left me with a broken heart!
Skeletons hang, hidden by a door,
Rattling, coming to life once more,
Why pursue me, invading my dream?
Nightmares, always making me scream!
Shadows move closer, seeking my soul,
Must remain focused, preserve my self control,
Creeping, stalking, always from behind,
Echoes reverberate around my haunted mind...
loved your poem my friend...
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Stranger have you post this. man this is really good, i mean excellent!!! thx for your review as i appreciate it,,,,,jim
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its on my profile, Jim
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its on my profile, Jim or should that be portfolio...
Comment from b1h2o3
That's haunting!
And perfectly portrayed.
Nice illustration to go with the poem.
Loved the last two lines.
Goosebumps! :)
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That's haunting!
And perfectly portrayed.
Nice illustration to go with the poem.
Loved the last two lines.
Goosebumps! :)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thank you very much for reading and reviewing this poem,,,,jim
Comment from c_lucas
If he is a believer, he would not be terrified. This is well written with an interesting poetic flow of words. There is very good imagery.
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If he is a believer, he would not be terrified. This is well written with an interesting poetic flow of words. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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had to show his terror because we are still human as it then shows the strength of faith. thank you for reading and reviewing this poem,,,,,jim
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You're welcome, Jim. Charlie
Comment from oNray
A new approach at relating the authors salvation to a life ever after spent in hell. We need always be cautious as you say as hell try's day after day to snag us
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A new approach at relating the authors salvation to a life ever after spent in hell. We need always be cautious as you say as hell try's day after day to snag us
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thank you oNray for your kind words and review,,,,,,,jim
Comment from Espresso momma
My goodness this is some poem. This could be terrifying if it weren't for the fact you know where your strong faith comes from. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
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My goodness this is some poem. This could be terrifying if it weren't for the fact you know where your strong faith comes from. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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thank you very much for your kind words,,,,,jim
Comment from rightforyou
Nice
I enjoyed your poem I tonight you did a fine job
he will never stop trying to get my soul
for all we humans it is his ultimate goal
Thanks for your time....Ron
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Nice
I enjoyed your poem I tonight you did a fine job
he will never stop trying to get my soul
for all we humans it is his ultimate goal
Thanks for your time....Ron
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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thanks ron for reading and your review,,,,,,jim
Comment from rchitwood
Very true and we all flee from this monster who devours souls. It takes the love Of God to fight this monster. Your poem has strong images of fear and Faith. Very smooth line flow and your photo compliments your poem well. Blessings Rita
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Very true and we all flee from this monster who devours souls. It takes the love Of God to fight this monster. Your poem has strong images of fear and Faith. Very smooth line flow and your photo compliments your poem well. Blessings Rita
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
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rita thanks very much for the review you gave this poem,,,,,jim
