The Ships of the Desert
Camels helped map the Australian Outback17 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi K,
You have penned a beautiful poem and one I gad to read twice just to savor the words. When I was in Oz the guide never took us to the desert and I wish she had. It is a stark in comparison the beautiful countryside where we went. Here are the six stars I don't have ****** Great rhyme, theme and flow. Well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hi K,
You have penned a beautiful poem and one I gad to read twice just to savor the words. When I was in Oz the guide never took us to the desert and I wish she had. It is a stark in comparison the beautiful countryside where we went. Here are the six stars I don't have ****** Great rhyme, theme and flow. Well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hi Chey, Thanks so much for reading, takes me ages to get enough money to post. Glad you enjoyed. Love, Kace.
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me too!!
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Aussie
Always great to read an Oz poem. This brings back memories of the old black and white photo images in my geography class. It is fascinating and still bizarre to my mind, to think of camels in Australia.
A fantastic image - certainly the cutest camel photo I have seen. LOL The back ground is so familiar to me as my mother's family are from the great Australian Outback with red soil, so dry and dusty.
Your poem is a nice slide back into history and a prominent part of our heritage. Your opening lines capture interest and lead the reader into an adventure. My mother's tales of the high fences erected around the homestead to keep out the males when fighting over the ladies. I think these camels were wild. Great work. I enjoyed very much. Warm wishes for 1012. Lovinia xoxo
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Hi Aussie
Always great to read an Oz poem. This brings back memories of the old black and white photo images in my geography class. It is fascinating and still bizarre to my mind, to think of camels in Australia.
A fantastic image - certainly the cutest camel photo I have seen. LOL The back ground is so familiar to me as my mother's family are from the great Australian Outback with red soil, so dry and dusty.
Your poem is a nice slide back into history and a prominent part of our heritage. Your opening lines capture interest and lead the reader into an adventure. My mother's tales of the high fences erected around the homestead to keep out the males when fighting over the ladies. I think these camels were wild. Great work. I enjoyed very much. Warm wishes for 1012. Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hello Lovinia, Thanks for reading, glad you were able to relate to the poem. The camels are culled now (gone wild) for meat to export (would you believe, a roaring trade!) Blessings, K.
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Hi Kay
I did know we had quite a large wild population. I thought the export was 'live' for breeding and re-populating overseas. It's a wonder we don't have camel on the menu here .. we have crocs, kangaroo and everything else now. LOL
I enjoyed the poem ... and always nice to learn something new.
Hope you are well. Hugs - :) Lovinia xoxo
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Have not been well; put my spine out lifting the wrong way. Thanks for caring. :-) Luv, K.
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Hi Kay
I am so sorry about your injury. I hope it is something that will heal with rest and not surgery.
I blacked-out and fell on a glass coffee table after twisting my back. When I came to, I could only after ages drag myself lying flat on my back to the phone about five feet away.
I could lay flat on my back in bed and not feel a thing. If I tried to move it was excruciating. My carer had to roll me, I was unable to assist. I had to be spoon fed lying on my side for over a week.
It took another week before I could walk.
Such a terrifying experience.
I hate to think what you are going through. I know you have a carer which must be of some relief. I hope Kay it will not be too painful a recovery. I will be thinking of you - take care. My warmest wishes for a speedy recovery.
Love & Hugs - :) Lovi. xoxo
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You describe exactly the pain I went through myself. We don't heal so well as we grow older. I find I am in my electric wheelchair (bonus) most of the time now. My carer is not helping me much because she needs a new knee! Talk about dil and daffodil! We muddle along, singing a song side by side! LOL.
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Hi Kay
Ah yes ... old age looms a little closer than it once did. lol I remember how excited fireflylil was when she got her electric chair ... though knowing her she is doing wheelies in the driveway. Hahah! I don't mean to laugh in an unkind way .. I can only imagine the frustrations of wheelchair life. Oh gosh ... my knee is going ... at least you seem to have fun together. I'm a muddler too .. we would make a great trio...... daff, dil and daffodil! LOL. I imagine healing back pain would be difficult in a chair and staying in bed for a long time is just as bad. Do look after yourself ... naughty, naughty lifting .. me too, I do the same thing ... the good old Oz "lets get into it and do it ourselves". I have a huge hernia in my belly button ... they say if I ever need surgery for something more serious they will fix it then. I am not supposed to lift anything too strenuous, yet what do you do if there is no one else to do it? Keep muddling and take care.
Was it Elly that dedicated a lovely poem to you? I think it was ... she is such a lovely person to have as a friend.
Cheers mate ... gosh I don't say that much these days! Love & Hugs - :) Lovi xoxo
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G'day Lovi, Well, what do you know? I have a hernia in my belly button too! It is hard to stay within the safety limits for our age and disabilities; anger and frustration teaches us patience, so I'm trying to stay still! What poem are you referring to? Elly is a friend on FS. Bless you girl.
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I think the blacks were here first,from the earth maybe thats why,I thought this was passionate and very well written piece, not hard to follow at all. a good work There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. Alexander QQ...
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I think the blacks were here first,from the earth maybe thats why,I thought this was passionate and very well written piece, not hard to follow at all. a good work There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hi Alexander, Yes, the blacks were the first Australians. Glad you enjoyed the story/poem. Blessings, K.
Comment from rashi kumar
Great alliteration in several places!
'weather worn'
'camel to carry'
Good rhyming and flow!
Very well-written and beautifully presented!
Pleasure to read and review!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Great alliteration in several places!
'weather worn'
'camel to carry'
Good rhyming and flow!
Very well-written and beautifully presented!
Pleasure to read and review!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hello Rashi, Thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, K.
Comment from Jade Johnson
Love this poem. It rhymed well and read well.
Loved the last verse especially the first two lines:
Heat mirage shimmers like molten lead
The camels have gone, freight trains instead
Black men still watch from desert sand
This is my sacred land.
Blessings Jade
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Love this poem. It rhymed well and read well.
Loved the last verse especially the first two lines:
Heat mirage shimmers like molten lead
The camels have gone, freight trains instead
Black men still watch from desert sand
This is my sacred land.
Blessings Jade
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Hi Jade, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed my country. Blessings, Kace.
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhyming couplets in your quatrains
I like the alliteration in mirage/molten
and weather-worn
and criss-cross
vivid descriptive detail of setting
What a haunting tone in this history of the exploration of the Outback and the impact the coming of one race has on the lives of another
I would give this a six if I had one, my friend :-) Brooke
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strong rhyming couplets in your quatrains
I like the alliteration in mirage/molten
and weather-worn
and criss-cross
vivid descriptive detail of setting
What a haunting tone in this history of the exploration of the Outback and the impact the coming of one race has on the lives of another
I would give this a six if I had one, my friend :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
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:-( bad Mrs. Pearl. Dis old lady needs to be bowled over for six! Thank you darling girl, glad you liked it. LOL K.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an absolutely marvelous poem about the old mode of transport in the Outback, that you have composed here for us old sport. Well done indeed with this splendid work we have here ma'am.
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This is an absolutely marvelous poem about the old mode of transport in the Outback, that you have composed here for us old sport. Well done indeed with this splendid work we have here ma'am.
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Chris, Thanks so much for reviewing. Glad you liked the poem. Cheers, K.
