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Cyril the Squirrel has chickenpox38 total reviews
Comment from FlamingSpade
I stand and applaud you for this delightful and perfectly penned children's story. I'm still smiling at the cute characters you've created. I wish I could draw!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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I stand and applaud you for this delightful and perfectly penned children's story. I'm still smiling at the cute characters you've created. I wish I could draw!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you again, FlamingSpade, xsx
Comment from Sophia Jolene
This is such a sweet work, Sandra. Don't worry about illustrations. If you find a publisher they will assign an illustrator. I have a children's book I'm just finishing, not a rhyming one, but it will rely heavily on good illustrations as well. You have such a gentle way with your writing. I really enjoy it. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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This is such a sweet work, Sandra. Don't worry about illustrations. If you find a publisher they will assign an illustrator. I have a children's book I'm just finishing, not a rhyming one, but it will rely heavily on good illustrations as well. You have such a gentle way with your writing. I really enjoy it. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Sophia, that is so encouraging, I wish you lot of luck with your book, is it on FanStory? I would love to read it, if it is. As this is the first time I have shown my work to anyone other than family and friends, I have no idea how to go on from here. Thank you again for such a wonderfull review. xsx
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You are very welcome. I just released "the Lonley Moon" I would love to hear what you think. I am asking for input for a new title. I am hoping to submit the manuscript soon, but I am not happy with the title. I like writing for my grandchildren, too. But your work is definitely ready for prime time! :)
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You are very welcome, Sandra. I just posted "The Lonely Moon". I would love your feedback.
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I have just gone through all the new book releases and can't find, 'The lonely Moon' am I looking in the right section? Sandra.
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I's under stand alone stories. Children, sorry. I should have put it under books but since it doesn't have chapters I chose stories. I'm new here...I'll get better, lol.
Comment from JennieClare
This is a great rhyme for kids and I hope that you find an illustrator and realise your dream.
There should be an apostrophe in - At Cyril the squirrel's.
thanks for sharing. Jennie
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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This is a great rhyme for kids and I hope that you find an illustrator and realise your dream.
There should be an apostrophe in - At Cyril the squirrel's.
thanks for sharing. Jennie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you Jennie, I will go in and correct that! Thank you for such a lovely review, I really appreciate it. xsx
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My pleasure. Jennie
Comment from Poetsrose
This is a fun poem for children (and the adults who to read to them) to read. I like how the story evolves. You also give it a sense of place. It reminds me of the Beatrix Potter stories.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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This is a fun poem for children (and the adults who to read to them) to read. I like how the story evolves. You also give it a sense of place. It reminds me of the Beatrix Potter stories.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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I am so honored! To have my name on the same line as Bratrix Potter!! Thank you so much! xsx
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You're welcome!
Comment from litroc1700
very funny and childlike almost like an exert from a childs book, let me assure you , writing childrens poems are hard but you reay naied it warm regards , litroc1700
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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very funny and childlike almost like an exert from a childs book, let me assure you , writing childrens poems are hard but you reay naied it warm regards , litroc1700
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you, litroc, I know childrens books are hard, I have several grand children who are my best critics, in a strange sort of way! Thank you for the very thoughtful review. xsx
Comment from Mike Momba
The story is easy to follow. it has an easy flow.
I like the structure with its well spaced paragraghs. I liked the start expecting fire works later on. i did not expect it would culminate into chicken pox.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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The story is easy to follow. it has an easy flow.
I like the structure with its well spaced paragraghs. I liked the start expecting fire works later on. i did not expect it would culminate into chicken pox.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you Mike,for your thoughtful and interesting review. xsx
Comment from Gungalo
Chicken pox? Yikes! Oh how they spread so fast. It's a very good children's story that takes a common childhood occurrence and makes it funny. Well done.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Chicken pox? Yikes! Oh how they spread so fast. It's a very good children's story that takes a common childhood occurrence and makes it funny. Well done.
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Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you Gungalo, I appreciate your comments so much. xsx
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My Pleasure!!
Comment from peggles
This is an excellent verse
Whimsical and set at a good rhyming pace
It made me smile
I can see children loving this
I enjoyed reading it very much
It is cleverly written and
exceptionally well presented
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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This is an excellent verse
Whimsical and set at a good rhyming pace
It made me smile
I can see children loving this
I enjoyed reading it very much
It is cleverly written and
exceptionally well presented
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much! 6 stars! Thank you Peggles, I am so glad you enjoyed it. xsx
