Cricket Kolavari Fever
Cricket Kolavari Fever6 total reviews
Comment from mumsyone
Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I hope you can fix it because, as it is, it does not qualify for this contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. I hope you can fix it because, as it is, it does not qualify for this contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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you says that my poem Cricket Kolavari Fever did not matches the 5-7-5 guidelines for the contest.Please suggest me that in which contest I will take part? please suggest me as quick as.-ajeyvmore -
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There may not be a contest for your poem right now. But you can post your poem without putting it in a contest. You will just have to change the title, because you can't repost something that's already been posted by the same title. Reviewers will still be able to read and rate it. It just won't be in a contest. Or maybe you can wait until a Children's Poem contest comes up and enter it in that.
Comment from Chris Davis
This is a very good start in your journey as an author/writer. It was very good of you to provide the helpful translation of terms from your country that your poem contained so readers unfamiliar with your language and customs might not have understood otherwise. Keep writing, you have a bright future! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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This is a very good start in your journey as an author/writer. It was very good of you to provide the helpful translation of terms from your country that your poem contained so readers unfamiliar with your language and customs might not have understood otherwise. Keep writing, you have a bright future! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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thanks
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You're welcome.
Comment from Aussie
Because of our different speech I found this difficult to read. If you take the time to explain Aussi-wari in your author's notes, readers of your poem would know what you are talking about and you have marked it as children poety - more confused am I, is it a song or a poem? Americans are not into cricket like we are, thus they may not understand this. Get writing on your author's notes and educate your readers. Apart from that, I liked it and encourage you to write more! Maybe you would like to write about India, we readers love to learn about other countries. Good Luck son.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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Because of our different speech I found this difficult to read. If you take the time to explain Aussi-wari in your author's notes, readers of your poem would know what you are talking about and you have marked it as children poety - more confused am I, is it a song or a poem? Americans are not into cricket like we are, thus they may not understand this. Get writing on your author's notes and educate your readers. Apart from that, I liked it and encourage you to write more! Maybe you would like to write about India, we readers love to learn about other countries. Good Luck son.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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aussi-wari means trip of Indian cricket team to aussies last 3 tests we indian lost so i write poem in version of original kolawri. Thanx for rating me.
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I will follow your writing if you will write author's notes to help us readers understand your culture?
Comment from elgone
I love this. It sings to me as any good song should. It is obviously in a dialect that is not mine but It must be Jamaican. I have people who work with me that speak that dialect and I always tell them I need a translator. But this poem is exceptional in the way it is written. It is very comprehensible despite the dialectic challenge to the reader. It is well worth a six, I believe.
Thank you so much for sharing it. Best of fortunes with future postings of your work here.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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I love this. It sings to me as any good song should. It is obviously in a dialect that is not mine but It must be Jamaican. I have people who work with me that speak that dialect and I always tell them I need a translator. But this poem is exceptional in the way it is written. It is very comprehensible despite the dialectic challenge to the reader. It is well worth a six, I believe.
Thank you so much for sharing it. Best of fortunes with future postings of your work here.
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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I am student of std.8 I am 13 years old I am living in Pune,Maharashtra,India Thank you for your compliment with regards Ajey More,India
Comment from ShaunIyer
Dude, you got serious issues with the Aussies. This is a writers' site. Enjoy the poetry, immerse yourself into some great novels. Writing was discovered to make a change in this world, to spread the message of peace. Take my advice, stick to writing classic literature instead of Cricket Kolaveri.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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Dude, you got serious issues with the Aussies. This is a writers' site. Enjoy the poetry, immerse yourself into some great novels. Writing was discovered to make a change in this world, to spread the message of peace. Take my advice, stick to writing classic literature instead of Cricket Kolaveri.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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thanks
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aussi-wari means Indian cricket team going to australia but India lost the match against strong team of australia and I am very happy for performance of australia team being INDIAN cricket fan
Comment from Deek Webb
First off I don't think this matches the 5-7-5 guidelines for the contest. Based on that I would say it needs work. Taking that premise out I liked the pace but the repeating why is aussi-wari, aussi-wari, so weak part really started to get to me after reading it. I think you either should not repeat the line twice ore only have on aussi-wari in each line. It really takes over the poem the way you have it. Other than that good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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First off I don't think this matches the 5-7-5 guidelines for the contest. Based on that I would say it needs work. Taking that premise out I liked the pace but the repeating why is aussi-wari, aussi-wari, so weak part really started to get to me after reading it. I think you either should not repeat the line twice ore only have on aussi-wari in each line. It really takes over the poem the way you have it. Other than that good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2012
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thanks for your kind comments .I am student of std.8 of Marathi medium. so,my English is not so good.AUSSI-WARI means going to Australia to play test cricket with strong team of India with poor performance thanks
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you says that my poem Cricket Kolavari Fever did not matches the 5-7-5 guidelines for the contest.Please suggest me that in which contest I will take part? please suggest me as quick as.-ajeyvmore
