For the Birds
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Ducky Advice"Poems about those winged gifts from above.
15 total reviews
Comment from ameen786
Hello mermaids, my friend, I thank you for sharing this beautiful experience, we certainly learn from nature, if only there were more duck therapists around; please check fourth stanza/line two: Embarrassed.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Hello mermaids, my friend, I thank you for sharing this beautiful experience, we certainly learn from nature, if only there were more duck therapists around; please check fourth stanza/line two: Embarrassed.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Thanks for reading my ducky poem and I appreciate your encouraging words. Elaine
Comment from guinea
Your duck had good advice. We do need to appreciate what is around us. God has provided every bit. I love this duck. Great imagination. Flows nicely.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Your duck had good advice. We do need to appreciate what is around us. God has provided every bit. I love this duck. Great imagination. Flows nicely.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2012
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Thanks for a great review about this caring duck. Elaine
Comment from Catherine Wilson
Hi mermaids,
Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to read and review your work.
I am a fan of free verse and I think that it is raw and you can really do so much with it. Since you have chose to not use punctuation or capitalization, I think that you need to force the reader to read each line as it is intended to be read.
What I mean by that is that the only pause that I am given is when you go to the next line even if the next line is not where you intended the pause to be. IT makes the reading choppy. It is for these reasons that I use punctuation.
So the first three stanzas are fine. I thought they worked well and the flow was fine and then the fourth stanza, you have a spelling error (embarrassed), and the fifth and final stanza feels rough because you have omitted words like where you might use a semicolon. I think they impact the flow of the piece.
Overall good read.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Hi mermaids,
Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to read and review your work.
I am a fan of free verse and I think that it is raw and you can really do so much with it. Since you have chose to not use punctuation or capitalization, I think that you need to force the reader to read each line as it is intended to be read.
What I mean by that is that the only pause that I am given is when you go to the next line even if the next line is not where you intended the pause to be. IT makes the reading choppy. It is for these reasons that I use punctuation.
So the first three stanzas are fine. I thought they worked well and the flow was fine and then the fourth stanza, you have a spelling error (embarrassed), and the fifth and final stanza feels rough because you have omitted words like where you might use a semicolon. I think they impact the flow of the piece.
Overall good read.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Thanks for your much needed suggestions. THe poem is in need of revisions. Elaine
Comment from livelylinda
mermaids,
How sad we humans that we are getting wisdom from ducks. . .
but then, never underestimate the power of. . .
Good writing.
livelylinda
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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mermaids,
How sad we humans that we are getting wisdom from ducks. . .
but then, never underestimate the power of. . .
Good writing.
livelylinda
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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You have me laughing here. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from VirgoVenus
Though the whole message of this poem was a sad one. I really like this poem and couldn't help but laugh as i was imagining it actually coming from the duck in the picture. Please dont take me in the wrong way when i said i was laughing at it. I really like this poem.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Though the whole message of this poem was a sad one. I really like this poem and couldn't help but laugh as i was imagining it actually coming from the duck in the picture. Please dont take me in the wrong way when i said i was laughing at it. I really like this poem.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed you poem and the personification
of the duck who gives you such good advice.
Nature certainly can be healing to the senses.
The imagery here is delightful.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed you poem and the personification
of the duck who gives you such good advice.
Nature certainly can be healing to the senses.
The imagery here is delightful.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I appreciate your positive comments. Elaine
Comment from adewpearl
love the duck offering a loud lecture when no bread crumbs are forthcoming
Love the insights the speaker receives from the mallard's lecture
good alliteration in wet wings
great humor in the premise of a duck therapist paid in fish and bread crusts - this is just delightful :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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love the duck offering a loud lecture when no bread crumbs are forthcoming
Love the insights the speaker receives from the mallard's lecture
good alliteration in wet wings
great humor in the premise of a duck therapist paid in fish and bread crusts - this is just delightful :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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I appreciate your taking time to read about this wonderful therapist. Thanks,Brooke. Elaine
Comment from gazzagodbod
and would they be ordering human hair pillows and telephoning the bakers and fishmongers lol thanks my friend loving this series gazzaxx
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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and would they be ordering human hair pillows and telephoning the bakers and fishmongers lol thanks my friend loving this series gazzaxx
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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I appreciate your review and glad you are enjoying this series. Elaine
Comment from Joy Graham
Oh my! I love the image of a duck therapist. I was feeling a little unsure when I first started reading. I love ducks and nature. You pulled me right in when you said "lectures me on my bad mood." You struck a cord with me right there! My own struggles with depression left me wanting a little more motherly advice - duck-style. Perhaps words of wisdom that send me off feeling like a baby duck that receives advice that only a mother can give. I wonder about the spelling of the word "embarrassed"? Well done! I like what you are doing here.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Oh my! I love the image of a duck therapist. I was feeling a little unsure when I first started reading. I love ducks and nature. You pulled me right in when you said "lectures me on my bad mood." You struck a cord with me right there! My own struggles with depression left me wanting a little more motherly advice - duck-style. Perhaps words of wisdom that send me off feeling like a baby duck that receives advice that only a mother can give. I wonder about the spelling of the word "embarrassed"? Well done! I like what you are doing here.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Yes, I spelled embarressed incorrectly and need to change that. I find that nature helps my depression and I often go sit at a pond and watch the ducks. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Peter@Poole
I'm not keen on free verse but I like the message and observations in this poem. Check out the spelling of embar-ssed! Best wishes, Peter
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I'm not keen on free verse but I like the message and observations in this poem. Check out the spelling of embar-ssed! Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thanks for pointing out the spelling mistake. I appreciate your positive comments and taking time out to read. Elaine
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You're welcome, Elaine. Peter
