Sunshower
Magic22 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Found this a very pleasant read that held my attention all the way. How lovely sunshowers mother fox and her young at the end of autumn. Then she leaves them to the season of the witch.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Found this a very pleasant read that held my attention all the way. How lovely sunshowers mother fox and her young at the end of autumn. Then she leaves them to the season of the witch.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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HI Ine! Thank you so much. Just trying to be positive...sort of? lol! Just glad you liked this! Hug! Susan
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Can't be easy just now. How bad are you and are you at home?
Comment from misscookie
I thought these was a very refreshing poem
And I love how your poem flows. I coulud vision myself walktnfg in the flied of flowers one suny day.
thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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I thought these was a very refreshing poem
And I love how your poem flows. I coulud vision myself walktnfg in the flied of flowers one suny day.
thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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Hi again Cookie! I love another great and kind review...I am off to go take the dog out and feed the horses...it's so cold, I sure hate to go out. But they depend on me. brrrrr! Smile and I will think of you as I go about my day later! Sleep tight! Luv, Susan
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stay warm, God bless.
Comment from Spitfire
I wondered where this was going. Then I saw the last line. It's like a prologue to a fantasy novel. Your descriptive powers once again amaze me. Reading the beginning over again, I see where you have foreshadowed an intense and cruel game of the hunter and the hunted. Love "Shushes the mushrooms and the witch's whole oneness with nature, laying bare her body to the gods and the sunshower rains. Clouds and thunder at the end foreshadow this next season won't be so pleasant.
Again, I can see, feel, and hear everything you write. Splendid.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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I wondered where this was going. Then I saw the last line. It's like a prologue to a fantasy novel. Your descriptive powers once again amaze me. Reading the beginning over again, I see where you have foreshadowed an intense and cruel game of the hunter and the hunted. Love "Shushes the mushrooms and the witch's whole oneness with nature, laying bare her body to the gods and the sunshower rains. Clouds and thunder at the end foreshadow this next season won't be so pleasant.
Again, I can see, feel, and hear everything you write. Splendid.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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Hi Shari! Thank you for a detailed and encouraging review like this ... I am so insecure...like a little kid. SO sad. I am always so happy when you enjoy my efforts. Honored actually. I do hope you are enjoying some WARM weather...Wish I were there. Lord. hug! Susan
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It's going for high 70's today, my friend. Stop caring what people think. That gets rid of insecurity fast! Wish you were here too. Have to break down and put up Christmas decorations today. L0L
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Oh boy, 70 degrees. I could be out riding. And would be too. Well, maybe. I'd have to take about six extra strength Tylenols. Have a great day Shari! We are just getting started. Tired already! HUG. Suse
Comment from Trybuck
it's good to read something other than Christmas stuff. A very nice change. Enjoyed your little story on Christmas Eve. Well done and Merry Christmas, Buck
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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it's good to read something other than Christmas stuff. A very nice change. Enjoyed your little story on Christmas Eve. Well done and Merry Christmas, Buck
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Hi Buck! Thank you so much! I am always tickled when you enjoy my stuff. And I hope your Christmas day was nice! :)) Susan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
Every time I giver out my last six I come across a write like this and wish I still had it! I love the way you wrote this story and the part about the mother fox feeding her kits. Your imagery is first rate and the theme is wonderful...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Hi Susan,
Every time I giver out my last six I come across a write like this and wish I still had it! I love the way you wrote this story and the part about the mother fox feeding her kits. Your imagery is first rate and the theme is wonderful...blessings, chey
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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HI Chey! Thank you very much! It's okay! All your enthusiasm is wonderful and always helps me keep trying too. Hope your Christmas was nice! :)) Luv, Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent short story about the changing seasons in the woods. I enjoyed this post and found one nit:
"...as raindrops the size of daisy's [daisies] begin to splatter and splash."
Dave
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Susan,
This is an excellent short story about the changing seasons in the woods. I enjoyed this post and found one nit:
"...as raindrops the size of daisy's [daisies] begin to splatter and splash."
Dave
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you so much! And I fixed daisies! Thanks again...I hope you had a great Christmas and will have a wonderful new year too! :) Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Beautifully written story,Susan. You have such a great talent for fiction. Maybe you can help me a bit as it is one of my goals for the new year. Have a very Merry Christmas!!! DEbbie
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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Beautifully written story,Susan. You have such a great talent for fiction. Maybe you can help me a bit as it is one of my goals for the new year. Have a very Merry Christmas!!! DEbbie
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2011
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Hi Debbie! Thank you so much! The biggest thrill, is to know someone likes something enuff for a six. Still love it! And of course I will help you, if I can! Just ask, and I am full of opinions! Not always right ones, but I'll try! Merry Christmas to you too Deb! Love, Susan
Comment from c_lucas
Wicca is a religion as older than any other. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Wishing you A Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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Wicca is a religion as older than any other. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Wishing you A Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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Hi Charlie! Thank you! I wish you a great holiday too! Wicca is interesting and I like the idea of it? Sort of worshipping nature, I guess. I often think God IS nature...? Interesting to think about. Please take care C! Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Thank you, Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
Wonderful detail of setting with nice touches of alliteration
I love the way you portray the mother's teaching of her kits
breaths deep the clean air - breathes deep
What a dramatic and poignant conclusion :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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Wonderful detail of setting with nice touches of alliteration
I love the way you portray the mother's teaching of her kits
breaths deep the clean air - breathes deep
What a dramatic and poignant conclusion :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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Hi Brooke! I fixed the misspell! I forgot to use the Spellcheck... Thank you for reading this, I'm SO glad you enjoyed it! I have a case of Spring Fever already! :)) Susan
Comment from Porscheslayer
I really enjoyed reading this story because of its gentleness. I found myself 'there' watching the fox and her kits (although I thought the word for them is cubs). Anyway, your descriptions were vivid and painted clear images of the scenes.
I remember once driving along a road and the lane I was in was being lashed with rain, yet the other opposite lane was bathed in sunshine. Quite a strange experience.
Minor SPAG - para 3, line 2, should be 'worshipper'
Overall, a lovely read.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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I really enjoyed reading this story because of its gentleness. I found myself 'there' watching the fox and her kits (although I thought the word for them is cubs). Anyway, your descriptions were vivid and painted clear images of the scenes.
I remember once driving along a road and the lane I was in was being lashed with rain, yet the other opposite lane was bathed in sunshine. Quite a strange experience.
Minor SPAG - para 3, line 2, should be 'worshipper'
Overall, a lovely read.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2011
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Hi there! I forgot to run spell check! AHHHH! Thank you! I did check about the kit or cub? And there are three possibilities, can't remember the third, so either of these is okay! Thanks for noting that tho! Neat that you too walked or drove in a sunshower? I am wondering what car you drive? I once out-manuvered a Porsche with a Mazda RX7 in heavy traffic...he was back there really P.O.d...I loved that. All it was, his car was more expensive and he was afraid of an accident. No, I was the better driver that day! OH SO LONG Ago! :) Merry Christmas if you celebrate! Susan
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No prob's Susan. In answer to your query, I ride a supersports motorcycle (Suzuki GSXR 750) If you look in my portfolio, 'They Call Me Porscheslayer' will explain the nickname.
An RX7 is a lovely car and a bit of a handful I hear, so credit to you if you tamed that beast.
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Aha! My son has a little Honda bike, and had a little Susuki trailbike when he was 10 and 11! I am older now and drive tamer vehicles. lol! I hope you have fun, and be safe! ")) Susan
