Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Part two Chapter 14"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from rheabug
Great job with this chapter! I always enjoy this story line. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you as well. I love dogs too. We have 5 dogs one of which is a black lab. He is so sweet. Linda
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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Great job with this chapter! I always enjoy this story line. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you as well. I love dogs too. We have 5 dogs one of which is a black lab. He is so sweet. Linda
Comment Written 21-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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Labs are sweet. I didn't know pyrenees are alsow my big is a huge marshmallow. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fairy77
She finally has someone whom she can trust.Well written good suspense.The way you included her thoughts.The doubhts that she had.It was very well written.Congrats and excellent punctuation.beth fairy77.Merry Christmas!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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She finally has someone whom she can trust.Well written good suspense.The way you included her thoughts.The doubhts that she had.It was very well written.Congrats and excellent punctuation.beth fairy77.Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
This turned out well. It's too bad that Troy was bit and needed stitches. Anna would naturally think it was her fault. It seems she was blamed for and blamed for everything before. It will normally take her awhile to not think this way. Good story, Barbara. I want to also wish you a Merriest Christmas and a Blessed New Year, too!
April
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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This turned out well. It's too bad that Troy was bit and needed stitches. Anna would naturally think it was her fault. It seems she was blamed for and blamed for everything before. It will normally take her awhile to not think this way. Good story, Barbara. I want to also wish you a Merriest Christmas and a Blessed New Year, too!
April
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Veronica Grace
This chapter depicts the emotions of the character very well. The dialogue and characterization shows the occurences in the story in a skillfull manner.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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This chapter depicts the emotions of the character very well. The dialogue and characterization shows the occurences in the story in a skillfull manner.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bayberry
You've explained the situation very well, Barbara. It's understandable how any mother would blame herself. It's frightening to imagine what could have happened to a child when there's an accident. Children are so precious. Parental love is very evident in your writing. (And I'm glad to know from your Author Notes that's you're a double-dog lover.) :> Christmas blessings, Josie
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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You've explained the situation very well, Barbara. It's understandable how any mother would blame herself. It's frightening to imagine what could have happened to a child when there's an accident. Children are so precious. Parental love is very evident in your writing. (And I'm glad to know from your Author Notes that's you're a double-dog lover.) :> Christmas blessings, Josie
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I wanted to make sure my readers knew I wasn't against large breed dogs. I was raised with a Great Dane. My brother and this dog were playing basketball. The dog got hot and was panting. My brother went for a lay up and the dog tried to stop him and my brother accidently hung his finger on the dogs canine tooth. It looked like he hung it on a barbed wire fense, not a dog bite. Of course my parents had to take him to the ER. Our dog had to be quarentined for awhile because he was too young for his rabies shots. Accidents happen.
Comment from Larrypic11
I think what's important is you captured anna's insecurity extremely well. It was the same insecurity that allowed the abuse and now questions her ability to be a fit mother. Self doubt is a killer sometimes. Merry Christmas to you and best of luck as you continue. Larry
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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I think what's important is you captured anna's insecurity extremely well. It was the same insecurity that allowed the abuse and now questions her ability to be a fit mother. Self doubt is a killer sometimes. Merry Christmas to you and best of luck as you continue. Larry
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I wanted to capture Anna's insecurity so this post worked.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, very well written, as always. I love this story. You are always taking us readers into a good path. We have 5 dogs and they are all well mannered, but things like this can happen, even if by accident, when something like a graham cracker is involved. The whole thing can be innocent, but dangerous at the same time. Nice job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Barbara, very well written, as always. I love this story. You are always taking us readers into a good path. We have 5 dogs and they are all well mannered, but things like this can happen, even if by accident, when something like a graham cracker is involved. The whole thing can be innocent, but dangerous at the same time. Nice job.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind reivew.
Comment from gypsynet
new twist to the story with a setting
that brings people together and fills the
page with action-paced sequence.. great use
of plot development as readers wonder more
about troy;s intention.. nicely done!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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new twist to the story with a setting
that brings people together and fills the
page with action-paced sequence.. great use
of plot development as readers wonder more
about troy;s intention.. nicely done!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mark3pt
I like the way you tell a story. I can see the events unfolding, that's always important, and you do a good job here. If anything, try slowing the pace down, just a bit, and perhaps give more to description of the places these characters are in.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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I like the way you tell a story. I can see the events unfolding, that's always important, and you do a good job here. If anything, try slowing the pace down, just a bit, and perhaps give more to description of the places these characters are in.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allison78
I think this is a really wonderful chapter you have written here! I haven't read the previous chapters but I just might have too! This was very touching and kept my attention, great job!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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I think this is a really wonderful chapter you have written here! I haven't read the previous chapters but I just might have too! This was very touching and kept my attention, great job!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thnk you for the kind review.
