Comment from October21

Good

Good poem about war
yes, there should be piece
love how you put the important words in capitals
like how you described the sounds from canons and swords.
picture was great
images were clear from the text
good structure

Great!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Have a great weekend and take care, Ine

Comment from Espresso momma

Excellent

I wish the fighting would stop too. Seems it is what we are destined for isn't it? Thanks for sharing with us. Do have a great season..

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Take care, Ine. You too my dear friend and yours.

Comment from Veronica Grace

Excellent

A very well written and strong message in this poem. War will always be with us unless we find something we have to fight for/against together. Love the song and artwork.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Take care, Ine

Comment from HPicasso

Excellent

You did a great job, I think you are a good talented poem. I like the originality and how your show how war has progressed. War has many faces and many ways of destroying all things in its path. Nice message an well expressed.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011

Thanks for your time an kind review. Warmly and take care, Ine

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To robina1978,
An interesting topic as this world has gone to the dogs.
From frivilious arguments to the deadly wars that maim and destroy human life existence as we know it.
At all costs, it is something that will never cease until unity,forgiveness and understanding are found.
Charlene

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Warmly and take care. Ine

Comment from rchitwood

Excellent

I do love your music and your poem is very good.Your poem describes the time for peace hopefully now. Very strong emotions concerning fighting and bombs dreadful weapons. Very smooth line flow and a pleasure to read.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings My friend,Rita

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Warmly and take care. Ine

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Hello, Ine. This poem is well written and filled with some powerful verbs, with a touch of cacophony added. I was struck, particularly by your comparison of the weapons of old compared to the silence of the atom bomb. That gave me goosebumps. Thanks for posting this call for peace at this season of celebration of new life. Warm regards, Bev

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Warmly and take care. Ine

reply by Writingfundimension on 15-Dec-2011

You're most welcome, Ine. Xxx Bev

reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011

Thanks Bev.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Canons now - Cannons
good alliteration in long, lengthy
Your commentary on the cruel nature of war through the ages as the weapons become more and more deadly is certainly thought-provoking :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011

Thanks for your review and time. Blessings and take care, Ine. Thanks will correct the spelling.

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Excellent

wars will end one day, Dutchess Ine,
when the dinosaurs return!
a very well primed, penned and
presented piece, of hope
-and may it come true.
warmly, xxx, eph.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Hand and take care, Ine. So do I, but am not sure at all.

Comment from Chris Tee

Good

You have taken on a very challenging writing format here with trochaic meter. However your syllable counts throws the meter out on most of the lines Trochaic is exactly the opposite of Iambic and it must have even number syllable counts preferably tetra or penta.
The line below is the only line that has correct trochaic tetrameter"
"After effects so long, lengthy"

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 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011

Thanks for your kind and thoughtful review. Hand and take care, Ine