Paranormal Adventures
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Comment from ishan335
Absorbing..good read..
But please don't switch narration styles without warning..
A linear narrative in third person is much better for the readers to comprehend...
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
Absorbing..good read..
But please don't switch narration styles without warning..
A linear narrative in third person is much better for the readers to comprehend...
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Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks.
Comment from livingwords
Excellent continuation. Good pacing. Keep it going, without digressing.
Nits:
Norris picked it up; (doesn't call for a semi-colon, which should be used sparingly, according to my agent.
Jenkins Porter unto should be onto
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
Excellent continuation. Good pacing. Keep it going, without digressing.
Nits:
Norris picked it up; (doesn't call for a semi-colon, which should be used sparingly, according to my agent.
Jenkins Porter unto should be onto
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks, Dan. I really appreciate your interest in my chapter. And thanks so much for catching the SPAG. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
I would say Jim is not having one of his better days. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
I would say Jim is not having one of his better days. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Thanks, charlie. I like your dry wit! Warm regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from gypsynet
a good break with a neutral
tonality in the page to allow
s breather from high intensity
of scene before this... good pacing
of thought pattern and an ending
that leads te reader for more coming
adventures...
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
a good break with a neutral
tonality in the page to allow
s breather from high intensity
of scene before this... good pacing
of thought pattern and an ending
that leads te reader for more coming
adventures...
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Thanks, gypsynet. I appreciate your thorough and excellent review. Your interest in my story and willingness to support with great insights is very gratifying. Kindest regards, Bev