Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Give the Devil his Due"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from WilliamDeen
Well done chapter with good catch at the end. I'm enjoying the story though I've missed a few. Will try to find some time to go back and read them. Again, Good work with excellent descriptions, details, and dialogue. Like the inner dialogue italics.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Well done chapter with good catch at the end. I'm enjoying the story though I've missed a few. Will try to find some time to go back and read them. Again, Good work with excellent descriptions, details, and dialogue. Like the inner dialogue italics.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks much, billy. I really appreciate your insights and support given this is a genre you write for so extremely well. Thanks for taking time to review this chapter and offer your insights. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from JW
Wow. This was a very well written chapter. And the hook at the end was fantastic. The way this chapter is written, you easily hold a reader's interest all the way to the end.
Good job. JW
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Wow. This was a very well written chapter. And the hook at the end was fantastic. The way this chapter is written, you easily hold a reader's interest all the way to the end.
Good job. JW
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi, Jonathon. Thank you so much for your awesome review! I so appreciate your support and generosity...Warm regards, Bev
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Bev
This is exceptional writing.
In some of the earlier chapters there was a small tendency to 'explain' things. This episode dives straight in and allows us to see and experience events with your characters eyes. Far more effective and exciting.
Ron xox
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Hi Bev
This is exceptional writing.
In some of the earlier chapters there was a small tendency to 'explain' things. This episode dives straight in and allows us to see and experience events with your characters eyes. Far more effective and exciting.
Ron xox
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi, Ron. Thanks so much for this wonderful review! I appreciate the vote of confidence for the chapter and for you taking time offer your insights and support. Always great hearing from you! Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from godlucifer
interesting to the end. i think jim put himself in to much of an hole. lies and deceiving will construe the individual and evidently the reality will come out. jim can be secretive all he wants but nobody will listen to him. your story is politely enjoyable and resounding,the readers is kept positive beginning till end. i enjoyed n reading your story. thanks for the read.
your so vain,
godlucifer
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interesting to the end. i think jim put himself in to much of an hole. lies and deceiving will construe the individual and evidently the reality will come out. jim can be secretive all he wants but nobody will listen to him. your story is politely enjoyable and resounding,the readers is kept positive beginning till end. i enjoyed n reading your story. thanks for the read.
your so vain,
godlucifer
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thank so much for this perceptive and generous review, godlucifer. It really helps to know what works for the reader, especially moving forward with additional chapters. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Gungalo
Yikes, I'd be running fast for the door. It seems Jimmy boy is in for some kind of a paranormal experience. What do you say? Sigh, I like this chapter.
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Yikes, I'd be running fast for the door. It seems Jimmy boy is in for some kind of a paranormal experience. What do you say? Sigh, I like this chapter.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi, Gungalo. Thank you for your nod of support, my friend. I think that Jimmy is in for a very rude awakening if he hopes to get one over on the ghost of Charles Bellingham, LOL. I really appreciate your generosity and interest. Warm regards, Bev
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My pleasure!!
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Okay. I am SO glad I read this now and not tonight. That ending would have kept me awake! What the heck is that document? I'm itching to know. Methinks our Jimmy has bitten off a wee bit more than he can chew. I've heard that bad smells indicate the presence of a demon. Nice closing sentence, my friend - I could just hear that rasping voice coming out of who knows what. Jim's about to find out. Brilliant! Av :o)
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Okay. I am SO glad I read this now and not tonight. That ending would have kept me awake! What the heck is that document? I'm itching to know. Methinks our Jimmy has bitten off a wee bit more than he can chew. I've heard that bad smells indicate the presence of a demon. Nice closing sentence, my friend - I could just hear that rasping voice coming out of who knows what. Jim's about to find out. Brilliant! Av :o)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, Av. I've definitely got to start introducing more good guys! Thanks for your excellent insights and great review, my loyal friend. I really appreciate your support. I DO plan for the good guys to win in the end LOL! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, a great job writing this chapter in your book where jim takes out the caretaker but is confronted by a specter coming from the caretaker.
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, a great job writing this chapter in your book where jim takes out the caretaker but is confronted by a specter coming from the caretaker.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thank you, sweet. I always appreciate hearing from you. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
Quite a thriller, Writingfundimension. We learn that Jim was responsible for some of the strange goings on in the mansion. This moves along quickly. Jim seems to be motivated in part by greed. The last part with Jenkins taking on a monster appearance and saying to Jimmy, "got a minute for an old friend?" will have readers wanting to continue. judi
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Quite a thriller, Writingfundimension. We learn that Jim was responsible for some of the strange goings on in the mansion. This moves along quickly. Jim seems to be motivated in part by greed. The last part with Jenkins taking on a monster appearance and saying to Jimmy, "got a minute for an old friend?" will have readers wanting to continue. judi
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks much, judi. I appreciate you reading this chapter and offering your insights. Your support for the writing of this means a lot! Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from robina1978
Might have missed one I think. But this is a real scary one: a dead dog and a nearly dead old guy all in one chapter.
What more can you wish for . And even the investigators get scared.
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Might have missed one I think. But this is a real scary one: a dead dog and a nearly dead old guy all in one chapter.
What more can you wish for . And even the investigators get scared.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thanks, Robina. I really appreciate your great review and continued interest. Thanks for our taking time to read! Warm regards, Bev
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Most welcome Bev, like reading it.
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So nice of you to say!
Comment from misscookie
Iknow you warned the readers.
I took a chance Which I will n't do again this truly turned my stomach and I still have this awful frown on my face.After saying al;l that this was a good write and I'm sure there is some reader who loves to read stuff like this. just cross me off your list. this was a awful good write.
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Iknow you warned the readers.
I took a chance Which I will n't do again this truly turned my stomach and I still have this awful frown on my face.After saying al;l that this was a good write and I'm sure there is some reader who loves to read stuff like this. just cross me off your list. this was a awful good write.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Thank you, Miss Cookie. I'm truly sorry you were offended by this genre. Most of my chapters have been far less violent. Don't know if you read any of those. Anyway, thanks for taking a look and for caring enough to let me know how you felt. Warm regards, Bev
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No problem some times I can take it some time I can't and I know all your work is different.
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What a gracious lady you are. I appreciate your understanding, Miss Cookie! Blessings, Bev
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Until nexty time.
