Joy
When I met my wife.76 total reviews
Comment from donette1914
Your wondrous blue eyes coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love. i love how men write such beautiful poems and you did wonderful!
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Your wondrous blue eyes coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love. i love how men write such beautiful poems and you did wonderful!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi, Donette. I see you joined a year ago...where have you been? If you plan on stying around I will become a fan so I don't miss anymore of your work. Thank you and Happy Holidays. Bob
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thankyou that truly is so sweet, i am hondered
Comment from Razz
Your smile caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy.
Your wondrous blue eyes
coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love.
Very nicely done, Bob.
Very beautifully expressed.
Well done, my friend.
Some never find because some mix up lust with love.
So sad.
Good writing.
Razz
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Your smile caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy.
Your wondrous blue eyes
coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love.
Very nicely done, Bob.
Very beautifully expressed.
Well done, my friend.
Some never find because some mix up lust with love.
So sad.
Good writing.
Razz
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011
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Hi, Razz. Yes, you are right. Confusion frequently leads to disaster too. I am so glad you liked this one. Happy Holidays, Bob
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You are very welcome, Bob.
Have a beautiful Christmas, you and your family.
Razz
Comment from IndianaIrish
How can anyone not give this love poem a six, Bob? Your alliteration,rhythm, and presentation is stunning. But it's your chosen words that turns this love poem into a poem of "joy".
mirth disguised
thespian eyes
misty moonlit charades
chameleon paths (exquisite!!!)
velvety fingers of mercy
I'm delighted to read poetry from you again, Bob. You and your Lynie are so fortunate...continued love to you both.
Irish :>)
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How can anyone not give this love poem a six, Bob? Your alliteration,rhythm, and presentation is stunning. But it's your chosen words that turns this love poem into a poem of "joy".
mirth disguised
thespian eyes
misty moonlit charades
chameleon paths (exquisite!!!)
velvety fingers of mercy
I'm delighted to read poetry from you again, Bob. You and your Lynie are so fortunate...continued love to you both.
Irish :>)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, my friend. You must know how much I appreciate you and your comments. X0 Thanks for the sixer. Happy Holidays to you and your family too. Bob
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Merry Christmas to you, too, Bob.
Comment from RKagan
Hi Bob, true love is a special gift. This poem is lovely and reads beautifully aloud. I never knew that you wrote poetry. your prose is awesome, and your poems are excellent too.
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Hi Bob, true love is a special gift. This poem is lovely and reads beautifully aloud. I never knew that you wrote poetry. your prose is awesome, and your poems are excellent too.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi, Roberta. Good to hear from you again. Yes...I have a ton of poetry in my portfolio...I just don't do it often because I work on the novel all the time...LOL...I used to write many short stories too. Thanks so much for catching up with this one. Bless you and Happy Holidays! Bob
Comment from livingwords
Very beautiful. Loved the line "such chameleon paths were traveled". Sounds like you wrote this from personal experience. Makes you a very fortunate man. Dan :))
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Very beautiful. Loved the line "such chameleon paths were traveled". Sounds like you wrote this from personal experience. Makes you a very fortunate man. Dan :))
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi, Dan. Yes...per my note at the top...this was when I met my wife. Thanks so much for your review. Happy Holidays. Bob
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Bob. This poem is amazing. I love the way you described your feelings. So emotional and pure. Poem has a good flow and a beautiful alliteration. You once told me in a review
I'm no poet. Yes you are!! And a good one too. It was really a pleasure to read, and thanks for sharing. Warmest regards Fia.
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Hi Bob. This poem is amazing. I love the way you described your feelings. So emotional and pure. Poem has a good flow and a beautiful alliteration. You once told me in a review
I'm no poet. Yes you are!! And a good one too. It was really a pleasure to read, and thanks for sharing. Warmest regards Fia.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi, Fia. Happy Holidays! I sure appreciate you taking the time to read this poem. I used to write them all the time before I started on my book a year and a half ago. LOL..Just not enough time in a day. Know what I mean? Bless you for the six too. X0 Bob
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bob
You should write more poetry. This one tells a great story of lonely days and nights, when no women made your heart jump. You faked gaiety, but beneath it all, you felt more alone with each date. Singled out to be a bachelor. And then, just as middle age was on the horizon, your wife walked onto your stage. It was just the two of you, meant for each other. I like how you knew that God had His hand in your meeting. This line is my favorite in the poem,
"God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset."
But your opening line is like a banner,
"Mirth disguised a wounded soul"
And here is some nice alliteration and internal rhyme,
"mindless masquerades in misty moonlit charades"
And here's another brilliant line,
"such chameleon paths were traveled"... as you tried to blend in.
And in the last verse, you write about her smile,
"caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy"
and her blue eyes,
"coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love"
Wow! You certainly earned points with your bride for this one, Bob! You're a hopeless romantic!
Nicely penned!
your fan
Kimbob
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi Bob
You should write more poetry. This one tells a great story of lonely days and nights, when no women made your heart jump. You faked gaiety, but beneath it all, you felt more alone with each date. Singled out to be a bachelor. And then, just as middle age was on the horizon, your wife walked onto your stage. It was just the two of you, meant for each other. I like how you knew that God had His hand in your meeting. This line is my favorite in the poem,
"God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset."
But your opening line is like a banner,
"Mirth disguised a wounded soul"
And here is some nice alliteration and internal rhyme,
"mindless masquerades in misty moonlit charades"
And here's another brilliant line,
"such chameleon paths were traveled"... as you tried to blend in.
And in the last verse, you write about her smile,
"caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy"
and her blue eyes,
"coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love"
Wow! You certainly earned points with your bride for this one, Bob! You're a hopeless romantic!
Nicely penned!
your fan
Kimbob
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi, My dear friend. You always make my day with your thoroough reviews and comments (both good and helpful) Thanks so much for your kudos and your six. I do so appreciate it. Happy Holidays! Bob
Comment from Diny
WOW BOB- that was all romantic and stuff- sort of sappy with extreme lovey dovey wordery and all- Man oh man this hillbilly is impressed- nothin like the crossed eyed girl who lived up on the hill .... long story=- anyway- you done real purtty- mighty fine - lol- hugs for real-Di
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WOW BOB- that was all romantic and stuff- sort of sappy with extreme lovey dovey wordery and all- Man oh man this hillbilly is impressed- nothin like the crossed eyed girl who lived up on the hill .... long story=- anyway- you done real purtty- mighty fine - lol- hugs for real-Di
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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LOL...You sure are full of spunk today, my lovely. Whew! Thanks so much for all of your wonderful remarks and the sixer. Have a great Holiday season, girl. Blessings...Bob
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
What a beauty of a poem... and so romantic too. You come back strongly. You are right, it isn't often (and sometimes never) one finds true love. So glad you did and that you are able to share your feelings and experience through your 6 star writing. Congrats on this one.
Warm regards, W ^=^
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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What a beauty of a poem... and so romantic too. You come back strongly. You are right, it isn't often (and sometimes never) one finds true love. So glad you did and that you are able to share your feelings and experience through your 6 star writing. Congrats on this one.
Warm regards, W ^=^
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Awwww. Thanks so much, Whiz. You made my day. I don't always get to read your work, but knowing the fine writer you are, I am encoouraged. Thanks for the six. Blessings and Happy Holidays! Bob
Comment from Carolyn 12
Beautiful words for your wife that you have it in a poem telling of your lives is awesome and a wonderful tribute to you both. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Beautiful words for your wife that you have it in a poem telling of your lives is awesome and a wonderful tribute to you both. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Thank you, Carolyn. I really appreciate your comments. Bob
