If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Tales of Furniture and Folly"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
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Comment from Cloaked Writer
Dear Author,
Tales of Furniture and Folly is an interesting poem which the author expresses how certain furniture pieces in his living residence bear certain memories and could-have-beens. I like how you convey these possibilities and your failure or weakness not to execute them when you had the chance.
The Masked Writer
Dear Author,
Tales of Furniture and Folly is an interesting poem which the author expresses how certain furniture pieces in his living residence bear certain memories and could-have-beens. I like how you convey these possibilities and your failure or weakness not to execute them when you had the chance.
The Masked Writer
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
The sentiment in this was used very well. With a great use of metaphors and unique descriptions. I enjoyed the pattern of it, even though the meter in it was not perfect. It was very nice to read. I would like to hear it to music...
The sentiment in this was used very well. With a great use of metaphors and unique descriptions. I enjoyed the pattern of it, even though the meter in it was not perfect. It was very nice to read. I would like to hear it to music...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Gremlinsmom
Another good one, Grant. I think it works as a song or a poem. I liked the way you changed around the ends of each stanza. I read onlyness as loneliness...it's early...but I like onlyness...a Grant-ism. :) I liked the line about the lamp...that's a great line. :)
Another good one, Grant. I think it works as a song or a poem. I liked the way you changed around the ends of each stanza. I read onlyness as loneliness...it's early...but I like onlyness...a Grant-ism. :) I liked the line about the lamp...that's a great line. :)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Vennan
Ah! Somebody else came to play in the song-lyric playground with me. And what a very fine job you've done! The extended metaphors here are effective and emotionally resonant. Great job!
All the best,
Vennan
Ah! Somebody else came to play in the song-lyric playground with me. And what a very fine job you've done! The extended metaphors here are effective and emotionally resonant. Great job!
All the best,
Vennan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Chris Lavoie
I'm horrible at putting words to music but this reads well enough on it's own. Onlyness works great. That to me is the beauty of poetry, you can push the boundries.
I've got a bed that's full of emptiness,
and could have beens.
And a lamp that turns on only when,
I dream of you.
Great stanza.
Well done and thanks for sharing, chrislyn.
I'm horrible at putting words to music but this reads well enough on it's own. Onlyness works great. That to me is the beauty of poetry, you can push the boundries.
I've got a bed that's full of emptiness,
and could have beens.
And a lamp that turns on only when,
I dream of you.
Great stanza.
Well done and thanks for sharing, chrislyn.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Lpspider
This was generally alright as a song, though I feel it would have done much better as a poem. Great job regardless. Keep it up, and keep these coming. Lpspider
This was generally alright as a song, though I feel it would have done much better as a poem. Great job regardless. Keep it up, and keep these coming. Lpspider
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from cozzzy
I can't decide who should sing it, I didn't do a very good job! (My dogs just ran out of the room!!) I do like the lyrics very much! I'm not sure about "onlyness"... but it seemed to work just fine in your song. ;-)
I can't decide who should sing it, I didn't do a very good job! (My dogs just ran out of the room!!) I do like the lyrics very much! I'm not sure about "onlyness"... but it seemed to work just fine in your song. ;-)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Tally
Better full of broken dreams than complete nothingness from settling for less than what life has to offer you...some good guitar music set just right.... but not like some old broken down country tune... more folky.... Tally
Better full of broken dreams than complete nothingness from settling for less than what life has to offer you...some good guitar music set just right.... but not like some old broken down country tune... more folky.... Tally
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from jonjo
"I've got a heart that's full of shooting down,
my onlyness.
And a mind that's quick to make up,
what it shouldn't see.
** And anytime I,try to, quiet them I can't.
** It's not that, I don't want to, but I should believe. "
You say it all so well, this has a good rhythm to it and you reptition works well changing in the final lines.
jj
"I've got a heart that's full of shooting down,
my onlyness.
And a mind that's quick to make up,
what it shouldn't see.
** And anytime I,try to, quiet them I can't.
** It's not that, I don't want to, but I should believe. "
You say it all so well, this has a good rhythm to it and you reptition works well changing in the final lines.
jj
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Bryana
Nice song, I'd love to listen to it sometime. This is my favorite:
I've got a bed that's full of emptiness
and could've beens.
And a lamp that turns on only when
I dream of you.
Nice song, I'd love to listen to it sometime. This is my favorite:
I've got a bed that's full of emptiness
and could've beens.
And a lamp that turns on only when
I dream of you.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005