If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Black and White -pt two"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
34 total reviews
Comment from Permelia
An excellent poem about how a four year old feels at night and alone. My son, when he was four, night after night, woke up screaming "the eyes are getting me- the eyes are getting me." I rocked and comforted him until he fell asleep. Finally I decided to get to the bottom of his nightmares about eyes- and was filled with remorse- it was my eyes when I would look at him when I disapproved of something he did. I tried to change- and he no longer had those dreams.
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An excellent poem about how a four year old feels at night and alone. My son, when he was four, night after night, woke up screaming "the eyes are getting me- the eyes are getting me." I rocked and comforted him until he fell asleep. Finally I decided to get to the bottom of his nightmares about eyes- and was filled with remorse- it was my eyes when I would look at him when I disapproved of something he did. I tried to change- and he no longer had those dreams.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2005
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I liked it. There was a bit of broken choppiness in stanzas two through four. It kinda read as though you were breaking the words off of a solid lump, but the ending paid for all. A fiver, an' a well deserved one. :0)
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I liked it. There was a bit of broken choppiness in stanzas two through four. It kinda read as though you were breaking the words off of a solid lump, but the ending paid for all. A fiver, an' a well deserved one. :0)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2005
Comment from Cloaked Writer
Dear Author,
Black and White Part Two is a poem which the author seems to write on the "nightmares" haunting him during the night. I like your usage of creative language and expression for conveying your poetic theme.
The Masked Writer
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Dear Author,
Black and White Part Two is a poem which the author seems to write on the "nightmares" haunting him during the night. I like your usage of creative language and expression for conveying your poetic theme.
The Masked Writer
Comment Written 09-Jan-2005
Comment from Rdlady
Nicley done.
word flow and style great
got the picture
great work.
its funny how we can remember things like this..but can't remember what happend yesterday. lol
all the best
Rdlady
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Nicley done.
word flow and style great
got the picture
great work.
its funny how we can remember things like this..but can't remember what happend yesterday. lol
all the best
Rdlady
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Vennan
And we are glad indeed that you survived to become the charming and talented adult we now enjoy! (grin) All kidding aside, this is an artfully drawn portrait.
All the best,
Vennan
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And we are glad indeed that you survived to become the charming and talented adult we now enjoy! (grin) All kidding aside, this is an artfully drawn portrait.
All the best,
Vennan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Conscience
I thought the poem flowed really well. I also liked the black and white background and letters you used. They complimented the poem nicely. I really would not change a thing. The funny thing is a children, one always fears what they cannot see in the dark. As adults, sometimes the fear is still there unless you live in the light. Well done
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I thought the poem flowed really well. I also liked the black and white background and letters you used. They complimented the poem nicely. I really would not change a thing. The funny thing is a children, one always fears what they cannot see in the dark. As adults, sometimes the fear is still there unless you live in the light. Well done
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from StolenGazebo
Well done, my friend. This was a nice follow-up to the last piece of yours I read. Imagery was in top form, practically taking the reader back with you as you reflected. Well done.
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Well done, my friend. This was a nice follow-up to the last piece of yours I read. Imagery was in top form, practically taking the reader back with you as you reflected. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from MoonRays
I applaud you for as an adult still retaining insight into the fears of a child, and for structuring them in such a touchingly true work. I remember what it was like to fear the dark, and you have expressed it very well.
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I applaud you for as an adult still retaining insight into the fears of a child, and for structuring them in such a touchingly true work. I remember what it was like to fear the dark, and you have expressed it very well.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
This was very well done. I found it to be unique yet it held a familiar call of fears that I think we all have as children. Afraid to look under the bed, that dreaded hand might reach out and grab your ankle. I used to run across the room and jump as far as I could to the bed...
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This was very well done. I found it to be unique yet it held a familiar call of fears that I think we all have as children. Afraid to look under the bed, that dreaded hand might reach out and grab your ankle. I used to run across the room and jump as far as I could to the bed...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Lestina
Poor Baby!
Great Poem, well written.
Were you reflecting back to your childhood? Great imagery!
I like your poem, I see no fault, Perfect!
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Poor Baby!
Great Poem, well written.
Were you reflecting back to your childhood? Great imagery!
I like your poem, I see no fault, Perfect!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
