Paranormal Adventures
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Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Bev, and Happy Thanksgiving! I missed chapter 15 so. I'm caught up now. You are so good at weaving suspense and you really make me care about your great characters. But I really love the way you end your chapters with a delicious hook to make me beg for more.
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Hello Bev, and Happy Thanksgiving! I missed chapter 15 so. I'm caught up now. You are so good at weaving suspense and you really make me care about your great characters. But I really love the way you end your chapters with a delicious hook to make me beg for more.
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Happy Thanksgiving to you as well, Karyn. Hope, today, you are surrounded by family and friends. Thanks so much for your awesome review, my friend. And your continued interest...it means a great deal to me. Always good to hear what works, so I appreciate the specific input. You rock, sister! Heart Blessings, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, a great job writing this chapter of your book where mike is strongly aware of danger surrounding mia and emma and emma is marked by either lady chadwick or lord chadwick, and mia kicks mike in the groin before she realizes who he is.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, a great job writing this chapter of your book where mike is strongly aware of danger surrounding mia and emma and emma is marked by either lady chadwick or lord chadwick, and mia kicks mike in the groin before she realizes who he is.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Thanks so much, sweet. I really appreciate your awesome review here and so glad you enjoyed the chapter. Thanks for the time you took to read and review. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from peggles
Have not seen any chapters for a bit I have missed your posts
This is so well written with a easy flow giving an easy read There is very descriptive imagery
A gripping fantasy story
bringing in a touch of humor when the cat arrived was a cleaver slight relief to the tension
I am enjoying this story as it continues to open out look I will be waiting now for chapter 17
Well done
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Have not seen any chapters for a bit I have missed your posts
This is so well written with a easy flow giving an easy read There is very descriptive imagery
A gripping fantasy story
bringing in a touch of humor when the cat arrived was a cleaver slight relief to the tension
I am enjoying this story as it continues to open out look I will be waiting now for chapter 17
Well done
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Thanks so much for your encouraging and grecious review, peggles. I've been a bit distracted by personal issues, but will be posting another chapter on the team in a more timely manner. Thanks for caring and sharing your insights. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from psalmist
Another heart-stopping chapter, Bev. Although I knew the girls were OK, I could feel Mike's anguish and fear for his friends. Great job ending the chapter with suspense and questions so that the reader can't wait for the next installment. Linda
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Another heart-stopping chapter, Bev. Although I knew the girls were OK, I could feel Mike's anguish and fear for his friends. Great job ending the chapter with suspense and questions so that the reader can't wait for the next installment. Linda
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Hi, Linda. I so appreciate your wonderful review, here. Thanks for taking time to read my chapter over this busy holiday period and sending along your gracious insights. Happy Thanksgiving, Bev
Comment from misscookie
Happy Thanksgiving morning to you.
this is a very exciting way to start a Thanksgiving morning.
As always I found your story moving. You had my attention all the way.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Happy Thanksgiving morning to you.
this is a very exciting way to start a Thanksgiving morning.
As always I found your story moving. You had my attention all the way.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Hello, Miss Cookie. Thanks so much for reading my latest chapter. It's always so lovely to hear from you! I really appreciate it. Heart Blessings, Bev
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mY PLEASURE.
Comment from robina1978
Have not seen any chapters for a while. Have you been away or ill? Hope not. Have to get back into it again. Got a bit lost here. But it is well written and with plenty of tension.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Have not seen any chapters for a while. Have you been away or ill? Hope not. Have to get back into it again. Got a bit lost here. But it is well written and with plenty of tension.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Hi, Ine. Yes, I've been lost in family dynamics for a while now. I appreciate your advice about posting more often. I will certainly take that to heart...it has been too long between. Thank you, also, for your generous insights and review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from gypsynet
allthis is a description of the inner workings of the character's mind... his/her experiences, the things that have stuck to the soul in the form of sensory images...
it is scary, and very disturbing but exciting with twists in scenes and high-energy dialogue...
your writing intrigues the heck out of the reader with good pacing of plots... nicely done!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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allthis is a description of the inner workings of the character's mind... his/her experiences, the things that have stuck to the soul in the form of sensory images...
it is scary, and very disturbing but exciting with twists in scenes and high-energy dialogue...
your writing intrigues the heck out of the reader with good pacing of plots... nicely done!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2011
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Hi, gypsynet. I really appreciate your excellent review and insights into the chapter. Thank you for taking time to read and review this latest chapter. You are most kind! Bev
Comment from J Patience
This was so flowing, there were no grammar tics to distract me. Thank you for that! The characters interact smoothly (except for the word "Dude" that seems a little out of place,) and the build-up of someone being in trouble by a foe that seems unstoppable and unpredictable is a good line to thread through the story. For people who enjoy the "paranormal team" experience, this chapter hints at a perfectly enjoyable book. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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This was so flowing, there were no grammar tics to distract me. Thank you for that! The characters interact smoothly (except for the word "Dude" that seems a little out of place,) and the build-up of someone being in trouble by a foe that seems unstoppable and unpredictable is a good line to thread through the story. For people who enjoy the "paranormal team" experience, this chapter hints at a perfectly enjoyable book. Nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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Hi, JP. Thanks for your wonderful review and suggestion for that awkward line. I think you make a good point. I appreciate your interst and your generosity. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from rivki1111
Hello, you do a good job of building suspense into this piece of prose. I had to read on to find out what happened?
Your font is very big, bigger than it has to be and bigger than you would make it if you were sending it to a publisher as they usually want it in 12 and double spaced.
I have no suggestions for making this story better, and it is one I would reccommend, cheers, Rebekah.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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Hello, you do a good job of building suspense into this piece of prose. I had to read on to find out what happened?
Your font is very big, bigger than it has to be and bigger than you would make it if you were sending it to a publisher as they usually want it in 12 and double spaced.
I have no suggestions for making this story better, and it is one I would reccommend, cheers, Rebekah.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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Hi, Rebekah. Thanks for offering your insights into what worked and what didn't work for you in this chapter. That is most helpful and generous of you. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from Karen Stram
Very creepy. I like the contretemps between those awed by the supernatural and the ones who just want to get it on camera. The interjection of humor when the cat arrived was a nice relief to the tension that then, again, begins to build.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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Very creepy. I like the contretemps between those awed by the supernatural and the ones who just want to get it on camera. The interjection of humor when the cat arrived was a nice relief to the tension that then, again, begins to build.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2011
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Thank you much for your generous and informative review, K.S. I appreciate your time and interest. Kind regards, Bev
