If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Black and White -pt one"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
24 total reviews
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I dunno.
It's definitely YOU< but it reads almost as though you're trying to force an epiphany here, or something.
I'm sorry, Grant, but this one didn't speak to me. :0/
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I dunno.
It's definitely YOU< but it reads almost as though you're trying to force an epiphany here, or something.
I'm sorry, Grant, but this one didn't speak to me. :0/
Comment Written 16-Jan-2005
Comment from StolenGazebo
This was relatively short, but it packed a real punch, thanks to your impressive use of imagery. You got your point across and then some. A fine effort.
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This was relatively short, but it packed a real punch, thanks to your impressive use of imagery. You got your point across and then some. A fine effort.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
Ok This was good. The thoughts and descriptions were nicely done. If only I felt like there was an ending. Maybe that was the point and I missed it, but it didn't feel like it was finished to me... Sorry...
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Ok This was good. The thoughts and descriptions were nicely done. If only I felt like there was an ending. Maybe that was the point and I missed it, but it didn't feel like it was finished to me... Sorry...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Lestina
I read this in reverse, I read pt 2 first.
As I said about part 2, I'll say about part 1
YOU WRITE VERY WELL!
I like your poem. I find no fault it is written Perfect!
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I read this in reverse, I read pt 2 first.
As I said about part 2, I'll say about part 1
YOU WRITE VERY WELL!
I like your poem. I find no fault it is written Perfect!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Tally
but truth holds that we learn from both and each hold equal in importance... for one teaches better of the other and both make for wisdom earned.... tally
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but truth holds that we learn from both and each hold equal in importance... for one teaches better of the other and both make for wisdom earned.... tally
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Gremlinsmom
Nice one, Grant...I liked how it was sort of a negative feeling and went to a positive one. No wasted words which is how I like my poetry! Good one, as always!
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Nice one, Grant...I liked how it was sort of a negative feeling and went to a positive one. No wasted words which is how I like my poetry! Good one, as always!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Sallyo
Interesting dichotomy here, MrG. Sunlight, darkness, water, fire etc- all these things have flipsides, and provide endless stuff for poetry-making.
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Interesting dichotomy here, MrG. Sunlight, darkness, water, fire etc- all these things have flipsides, and provide endless stuff for poetry-making.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Elliesbiggestfan
Contrasts indeed, a very thought provoking offering this one.
"With a fear,
I try to hide;
in the comfort I feel
in the darkness."
-Love this stanza best because I can relate to it the most. I think the darkness has often been a comfort to me.
Love the contrasting feelings in this clever little number G. Again the originality leaps off the page, excellent stuff this....
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Contrasts indeed, a very thought provoking offering this one.
"With a fear,
I try to hide;
in the comfort I feel
in the darkness."
-Love this stanza best because I can relate to it the most. I think the darkness has often been a comfort to me.
Love the contrasting feelings in this clever little number G. Again the originality leaps off the page, excellent stuff this....
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Notlob
Okay. I had to come over here and see what I missed after I read "Black and White - part II." I see that it was only a set-up for the next one. Waiting for the comfort night brings you? Right.
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Okay. I had to come over here and see what I missed after I read "Black and White - part II." I see that it was only a set-up for the next one. Waiting for the comfort night brings you? Right.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Focused True North
This is a poem of contrasts (fear / hiding vs. feeling / seeking light, and then, black / darkness vs. white / lightness) within an encircled cycle --- sun to sun.
If the reader interprets the cycle as a single day then a full range of emotions (fear to hope) is being presented in the cycle of black to white (or night to day). There's a lot more to this little poem than is apparent at first reading. I like it better and better the more I read and ponder.
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This is a poem of contrasts (fear / hiding vs. feeling / seeking light, and then, black / darkness vs. white / lightness) within an encircled cycle --- sun to sun.
If the reader interprets the cycle as a single day then a full range of emotions (fear to hope) is being presented in the cycle of black to white (or night to day). There's a lot more to this little poem than is apparent at first reading. I like it better and better the more I read and ponder.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
