If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Alice"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
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Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I liked it.
A little spare an' minimalist, but still an interesting piece. It makes me think of sitting in an empty room having a zen experience. (But then, I'm an idiot. Ask anybody. ;0) )
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I liked it.
A little spare an' minimalist, but still an interesting piece. It makes me think of sitting in an empty room having a zen experience. (But then, I'm an idiot. Ask anybody. ;0) )
Comment Written 16-Jan-2005
Comment from Vennan
This succeeds in casting a surreal spell, partly due to the shifts in tense, partly due to the content. What fun to step inside mrgrunty's head and enjoy his dream!
All the best,
Vennan
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This succeeds in casting a surreal spell, partly due to the shifts in tense, partly due to the content. What fun to step inside mrgrunty's head and enjoy his dream!
All the best,
Vennan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from amaranthblue
I liked this one. I know you said it was your favorite, but I am sorry, I have read other poems of your that I have really, really liked. I know dreams can be difficult to write about. I have tried that many times. Yours at least was coherent and was as clear as a spring day...
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I liked this one. I know you said it was your favorite, but I am sorry, I have read other poems of your that I have really, really liked. I know dreams can be difficult to write about. I have tried that many times. Yours at least was coherent and was as clear as a spring day...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from made2soar
Very nice dream tale, as the wind and sails mark the beginning and end of the dream and letting your imagination roam in between. Thanks Jim
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Very nice dream tale, as the wind and sails mark the beginning and end of the dream and letting your imagination roam in between. Thanks Jim
Comment Written 08-Jan-2005
Comment from Jewell McChesney
WOW
I think you should write a book of dreams
I see no critcism needed. Perfect in every way.
Love the ending.
If I don't say more this thing will pop up and tell me to do so
but anyway...
Great poem. As always
J
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WOW
I think you should write a book of dreams
I see no critcism needed. Perfect in every way.
Love the ending.
If I don't say more this thing will pop up and tell me to do so
but anyway...
Great poem. As always
J
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Tally
The eye of the storm... peace found within oneself.... the calm before the storm.... reality checked in of adventures with lessons learned and wear and tear upon the soul but wisdom gained. Tally
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The eye of the storm... peace found within oneself.... the calm before the storm.... reality checked in of adventures with lessons learned and wear and tear upon the soul but wisdom gained. Tally
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from heartsong7
well this does leave a lot of room for the reader to use his own imagination to fill in the blanks...this goes a bit far though and seems a bit disjointed to me.
just a bit of structure would help.
Hs7
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well this does leave a lot of room for the reader to use his own imagination to fill in the blanks...this goes a bit far though and seems a bit disjointed to me.
just a bit of structure would help.
Hs7
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Gremlinsmom
Another good one, Grant. I liked it. Could see it...What do you mean got your old ones back? Someone took them? :) I loved fell into sleep...good line. :)
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Another good one, Grant. I liked it. Could see it...What do you mean got your old ones back? Someone took them? :) I loved fell into sleep...good line. :)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Elliesbiggestfan
What a wonderful concept this piece is, I wonder once again where your clever brain digs this stuff up from ;)
"I awake
the sails are still
The wind is gone"
-I love that last part, I think it must be becasue it has a poignant and peaceful feel to it.
Great piece as always G, loved the whole concept as well as the style and wonderful descriptives in the first two stanza's. Just how dreams tend to come to me, in flashing scenes, very nice hon...
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What a wonderful concept this piece is, I wonder once again where your clever brain digs this stuff up from ;)
"I awake
the sails are still
The wind is gone"
-I love that last part, I think it must be becasue it has a poignant and peaceful feel to it.
Great piece as always G, loved the whole concept as well as the style and wonderful descriptives in the first two stanza's. Just how dreams tend to come to me, in flashing scenes, very nice hon...
Comment Written 07-Jan-2005
Comment from Cloaked Writer
Dear Author,
Alice is a dream-like poem which the author plays with the idea of an Alice and Wonderland. I like how you describe the falling to sleep and what appears to be have taken place. I like your imagination and poetic expression.
The Masked Writer
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Dear Author,
Alice is a dream-like poem which the author plays with the idea of an Alice and Wonderland. I like how you describe the falling to sleep and what appears to be have taken place. I like your imagination and poetic expression.
The Masked Writer
Comment Written 06-Jan-2005
