Comment from wiljacro

Needs Improvement

HI! MCWEALTHING, I'm afraid that I did not understand the word "putted" in your first line,hence my low rating. wiljacro.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2011

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

Hello mcwealthng, my friend, I see the message/theme of your poem but you need to correct the syllable count; line one should have 5-syllables, line two 7-syllables and line three 5-syllables for a total of 17-syllables. Go to Google or Dictionary.com and both are a great source of helping us write according to the forms/rules of poetry. Welcome to the site and I'm positive you'll love and learn as I did since my joining a year ago, good luck!

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011

Thanks amee786 for the review. I actually did not read well the instruction before placing this poem. The two websites are noted for resourcing,looking forward to hearing from you.

Comment from cercie

Needs Improvement

Have you read the instructions for writing 5-7-5 poem you have 6-13-10. Very difficult to understand. needs lots of work.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011

Thanks!

Comment from oozer

Excellent

The ideas expressed in this are very GOOD! but i am afraid you have maybe confused syllables with words...
UN-BEAT-A-BLE is a word of 4 syllables. You pronounce it... UN-BEAT-A-BEL. I hope I have made myself CLEAR! I really REALLY have tried. Good luck!

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011

Thanks for the review! The corrections are noted.

Comment from Alexander E Poet

Good

This is a little bit cryptic, and sure for sure what you saying keep coming There were no errors. No typos and nothing to change as far as i can see. ,Alexander QQ...

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2011

Thanks for reading!