Butterball
Temptation31 total reviews
Comment from bowls
What a lovely Thanksgiving story.I like your original point of view with the dog as narrator. The repetition of "It's my job" is a delightful touch that adds to the endearing quality of the dog's personality. Adding the blind child is another brilliant touch which further endears Butterball to the reader. Great picture in that closing sentence, too.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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What a lovely Thanksgiving story.I like your original point of view with the dog as narrator. The repetition of "It's my job" is a delightful touch that adds to the endearing quality of the dog's personality. Adding the blind child is another brilliant touch which further endears Butterball to the reader. Great picture in that closing sentence, too.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Hi Fausto! Thank you...I'm so glad you liked it...the six is a delightful accolade ... I had fun trying this...smiles, Susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
I don't have a "Sixer" for this great, wonderful, warm story so I'll award two virtual "Twelvers" and say you did an excellent job of pacing a beautiful story through the eyes of
Butterball.
Ted
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Hi Susan :)
I don't have a "Sixer" for this great, wonderful, warm story so I'll award two virtual "Twelvers" and say you did an excellent job of pacing a beautiful story through the eyes of
Butterball.
Ted
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Hi again! Your reviews give me the courage to keep trying Ted. You know that. I am sorry for being so late with this reply...I couldn't sleep for worrying about this and got back up. It's not right to be this remiss. I am very grateful and honored too, when you approve of my efforts! Hug!! Susan
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You're most welcome. Get well :)
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is a really good story about a rescued dog who faces grave temptation. But he's a good boy. Will they feed him goodies from the table?
I really enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Susan,
This is a really good story about a rescued dog who faces grave temptation. But he's a good boy. Will they feed him goodies from the table?
I really enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Wow, Dave, thank you...The extra star is wonderful, and sadly this didn't win, but I sill like it! AND that you did, makes the work worthwhile...Susan
Comment from WilliamDeen
What an adorable story about this wonderful dog on Thanksgiving. He is so patient waiting for his food. I never had a dog so well mannered!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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What an adorable story about this wonderful dog on Thanksgiving. He is so patient waiting for his food. I never had a dog so well mannered!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Hi there! I thank you so much for such a great review...and I am sorry for this late thank you too. I'm going to catch up if it's the last thing I do! Happy Holidays too! :)) Susan
Comment from Bellringer
Although the contest calls for a poem, your story is poetic and touches the heart. The discipline of a service-animal is incredible and you did an excellent job in showing that. Love is woven into this special story--and that matters more than any contest rule. Thank you for writing this. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Although the contest calls for a poem, your story is poetic and touches the heart. The discipline of a service-animal is incredible and you did an excellent job in showing that. Love is woven into this special story--and that matters more than any contest rule. Thank you for writing this. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Hi again! It said prose was okay too? I read it twice to be sure! I was glad, as T-day is my second favorite holiday of course. I'm putting a tree up soon...and to me, it's a birthday celebration...and another day of thanks. I am thrilled you enjoyed this Hector....hug! Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. We have assembled our artificial tree (courtesy of either HSN or QVC) and all the wreaths and holiday fixings are displayed to my wife's satisfaction. I see that your birthday is coming up dear friend! A lovely time of year to celebrate. Blessings, Hector
Comment from G.B. Smith
hello Susan
This is a remarkable contest entry. I loved the nice down home feel it carried with it. Butter is a dog for the best in us. I fell in love with him because he is such a "DOG". Nicely done and good luck
Bear
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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hello Susan
This is a remarkable contest entry. I loved the nice down home feel it carried with it. Butter is a dog for the best in us. I fell in love with him because he is such a "DOG". Nicely done and good luck
Bear
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Hi Bear! Thank you so much! I'm pleased you enjoyed this tail of a tale! ") I love this photo...this dog is a doll!! Hope you and yours had a great Turkey day too!! Susan
Comment from humpwhistle
So nicely done, Suse. Ah, what delicious torture it must be for a dog on Thanksgiving day. And a good dog, at that.
Your perspective resonates for me.
I can imagine a dog have such thoughts.
And I know he will be rewarded for his patience,
his vigilance, and for just being a good dog.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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So nicely done, Suse. Ah, what delicious torture it must be for a dog on Thanksgiving day. And a good dog, at that.
Your perspective resonates for me.
I can imagine a dog have such thoughts.
And I know he will be rewarded for his patience,
his vigilance, and for just being a good dog.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Hi Lee! :) I am so glad to hear from you! And to know you enjoyed something of mine too~ what a joy. I hope you had a good T-day too! I thought of you and sent you a sort of telepathic message yesterday! hug! Susan
Comment from Sasha
This is so precious. Wonderful story about a very good dog. I can relate to this one. My sister had a very big dog that wasn't well trained. One Thanksgiving we were gathered in the living room waiting for the turkey to cool. Suddenly my sister's dog flew by in a blur, out the door and down the street...carrying the whole turkey in his mouth. We still had a pretty good dinner, minus the main course. As you probably know, I am not good at flash fiction (I'm Irish and it's genetic) but this is a terrific story for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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This is so precious. Wonderful story about a very good dog. I can relate to this one. My sister had a very big dog that wasn't well trained. One Thanksgiving we were gathered in the living room waiting for the turkey to cool. Suddenly my sister's dog flew by in a blur, out the door and down the street...carrying the whole turkey in his mouth. We still had a pretty good dinner, minus the main course. As you probably know, I am not good at flash fiction (I'm Irish and it's genetic) but this is a terrific story for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Hi Sasha! WELL!! I wanted to have this dog do just that!!! And thought it would be too heavy for a dog to actually run away with!! I really did, now I wish I had gone with my instinct!! It's hilarious!! BUT I would be SOoooooo mad!! OH all the work, all the anticipation!! GONE in an instant! BAD BAD DOG!! But, they know not what they do...or do they? LOL!!! What a memory though!! It hurts to laugh, but well worth it, thanks for brightening my evening Smurphy!! HUG and smiles! Susan
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
What a delight this story is. I love that you wrote it from the dog's perspective. I smiled al the way through this story as it reminds me every dog we ever had and how wonderful smells of cooking about did them in! Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Hi Susan,
What a delight this story is. I love that you wrote it from the dog's perspective. I smiled al the way through this story as it reminds me every dog we ever had and how wonderful smells of cooking about did them in! Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Hi there! I thank you so much for such a great review...and I am sorry for this late thank you too. I'm going to catch up if it's the last thing I do! Happy Holidays too! :)) Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
what a light-hearted
tale, Susan... such
a pleasure to read..
and that face.. how
can you ignore it...
so lovely.
I thought this had to be a poem, but I could be wrong.. I often am.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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what a light-hearted
tale, Susan... such
a pleasure to read..
and that face.. how
can you ignore it...
so lovely.
I thought this had to be a poem, but I could be wrong.. I often am.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2011
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Hi Margaret~ How are you? I thank you for this lovely review...oh! It is okay for prose, she has it in the prompt too. Thankfully!~ Lol! I am thrilled you enjoyed this...I love my dog, and thought of how he must feel when we cook and he smells it all! ")) HUG! Susan
