Butterball
Temptation31 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
I love the story. The story of another Butterball. He is such a good dog. HE helps his blind child. He waits for the food. That is hard. We humans have stomachs that growl and moths that drool long before the food is ready. I hope he got to stay in the kitchen. Good dog. Great story.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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I love the story. The story of another Butterball. He is such a good dog. HE helps his blind child. He waits for the food. That is hard. We humans have stomachs that growl and moths that drool long before the food is ready. I hope he got to stay in the kitchen. Good dog. Great story.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Hi Ellie! Thank you so much! Just to know you enjoyed this is great! Hugs and my apologies for this late reply! Susan
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, I enjoyed your short tale of a tail! I admired your taking on the persona of the dog and speaking in his voice and emphasizing his need to "be good," because it's his "job." I also particularly liked your "hand-fan" simile. Best wishes in the contest to us both. Your creative entry should do well. -Joan
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Yes, I enjoyed your short tale of a tail! I admired your taking on the persona of the dog and speaking in his voice and emphasizing his need to "be good," because it's his "job." I also particularly liked your "hand-fan" simile. Best wishes in the contest to us both. Your creative entry should do well. -Joan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Hi Joan! Wow...thank you for such an enthusiastic review. I am really happy you liked this...we did have a dog YEARS ago, named Butterball...he was so sweet...my story about Punkin was a true story, my brother has that little dog, and just loves her! She is NOT housebroken tho, hence, the giveaway, I'm sure!! Lol! Hugs!! Susan
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Thanks for revealing more of the context. It's always good to draw on real experiences. Again, good luck in the voting booth. -Joan
Comment from Minglement
I loved the playful tone of this, yet, it's serious side with the subtle hints at the child's possible problems and how this special dog takes his tasks so seriously. And tries to be so good. What a beautiful Christmas story. It's probably too late for this year because they select stories about 6 months out, but it would be a great Christmas story in a magazine. Wonderful story and beautifully written. Marcia :)
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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I loved the playful tone of this, yet, it's serious side with the subtle hints at the child's possible problems and how this special dog takes his tasks so seriously. And tries to be so good. What a beautiful Christmas story. It's probably too late for this year because they select stories about 6 months out, but it would be a great Christmas story in a magazine. Wonderful story and beautifully written. Marcia :)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Hi Marcia! Thank you so much! Wouldn't that be fun for someone to publish our work? I wish! Oh well, it's fun to have fanfriends! I thank you again, the extra star is still a real thrill, even after three years!! HUG! Susan
Comment from JW
This is a cute story. I love the perspective it was written from. You did a great job making it seem very realistic, at least from a dog's view. Good job! J.W.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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This is a cute story. I love the perspective it was written from. You did a great job making it seem very realistic, at least from a dog's view. Good job! J.W.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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HI Jonathon! Thank you! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this and our old Lab would act like this if he were in the house! Thank you again!! !! Susan
Comment from BethShelby
This is a great little story. You really got into the mind of the dog and it is very creative. I like that you told it from his point of view. I hope this contest didn't have to be a poem because this should be a contender.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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This is a great little story. You really got into the mind of the dog and it is very creative. I like that you told it from his point of view. I hope this contest didn't have to be a poem because this should be a contender.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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No, it's okay for prose too? I was glad...poems are hard! lol! Thank you Beth...it's just nice to know you enjoyed this!! HUG! Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
My dog is too good. She will wait until you tell her she can have something before she will eat it. Beagles are so willing to please their humans. I love this story and the double usage of the name Butterball. Most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest!!!Love you! Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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My dog is too good. She will wait until you tell her she can have something before she will eat it. Beagles are so willing to please their humans. I love this story and the double usage of the name Butterball. Most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest!!!Love you! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Hi Debbie! Awww, I had a beagle named Sally when I was little. She put up with me dressing her and pulling her around in my red wagon even...then! We took her to the county fair with sunglasses on. She was a saint...and for her trouble a neighbor ran over her one winter. She got out on the road and stuck in a deep tire rut and he couldn't stop. I sat with her in the basement til late at night...and she was gone in the morning...This memory was buried deep until your review...Thank you again sweet Debbie...Love you too, and I hope you don't live where there's too much snow. I am sick of it already... GAG! LOL! Suse
Comment from KathyH
very nicely written. I love how you weave the theme of "good dog" through your story. I could totally picture this scene and it made my heart smile. Kathy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2011
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very nicely written. I love how you weave the theme of "good dog" through your story. I could totally picture this scene and it made my heart smile. Kathy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2011
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Hi Kathy! Thank you dear! I am thrilled you enjoyed this! It's great to hear from you, and please vote...not necessarily for me, there are lots of good ones here! I get so frustrated when lots of reviews come and few votes then?
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I'll be sure to vote. I agree with you. Gotta vote to make these contests fun. Great job on this one. Very fun!
Comment from Carrie Smith
Oh, Suse, this a good one! You describe the dog's thoughts to a 't'. Love the part when he just had to go out side-but he didn't venture far. Those scraps he would enjoy were getting closer and closer. He is being good, but with a mighty effort.
A fun story told through the thought of 'Butter'. xxxSusan
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Oh, Suse, this a good one! You describe the dog's thoughts to a 't'. Love the part when he just had to go out side-but he didn't venture far. Those scraps he would enjoy were getting closer and closer. He is being good, but with a mighty effort.
A fun story told through the thought of 'Butter'. xxxSusan
Comment Written 27-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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HI Susan, Please forgive this late reply? I feel ill, going back to the dr. this morning...need to lay down a minute...but one reviewer was mad that I didn't reply, so I'm trying to do some...I appreciate every single review, good or bad. I just feel terrible and it wears me out just sitting here. I can write a story in minutes, but thanking people and reviewing for them takes time to do it right! Thank YOU again my dear friend...xoxo, susan
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Suse, not to worry-just do what you can,lol. That's all I can do right now (so freakin' much gets in my way of FS!)! LOL...Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Working dogs are so valuable. Of course, I believe all dogs are valuable. I think my two are perfect for keeping my floor crumb free.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Working dogs are so valuable. Of course, I believe all dogs are valuable. I think my two are perfect for keeping my floor crumb free.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Aww, sweet! I remember your two...and still would love to see the painting your hubby did of them. Thank you Barbara! Your thoughts are always appreciated and I appreciate any time you spare me! HUG! Susan
Comment from rchitwood
Your story is very good and I enjoyed reading it.It held my attention very well and I can just see this dog eyeing the bird.Very creative story and good dialogue also believable.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Your story is very good and I enjoyed reading it.It held my attention very well and I can just see this dog eyeing the bird.Very creative story and good dialogue also believable.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 26-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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Hi Rita! Thank you. Please forgive me this late reply? I am still 89 behind! My back...ouch... LOL! Susan
