Senryu Provocations
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "yellow eyes"Reflection on human behavior
12 total reviews
Comment from Eleanor Buron
The poem needs the photo for understanding its meaning. The poem can stand alone but is more omnious - whose yellow eyes? and the symbolism of the owl would be lost. I enjoyed this combo poem'art very much.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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The poem needs the photo for understanding its meaning. The poem can stand alone but is more omnious - whose yellow eyes? and the symbolism of the owl would be lost. I enjoyed this combo poem'art very much.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Good to know. Not good to rely on photo though. Do other birds or creatures have yellow eyes? I relied on the thought that only owls do. I could add a hoot somewhere.
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You know what, I don't know but will research it. The Bald Eagle has bright yellow beak, eyes and feet. The Tawny Frogmouth bird has yellow eyes and I believe a duck or two may have yellow rimmed eyes. I like the owl for all the symbolism especially for writers. So choice is great. Elly
Comment from God's Writer
Different but very interesting. I would be frightened if I were a wood mouse. Much more said than was said. Feelings happily displayed throughout this short verse. Definitely a true Haiku. Do I detect a little Japanese blood in them veins. Hmmmmmmm! Great Job!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Different but very interesting. I would be frightened if I were a wood mouse. Much more said than was said. Feelings happily displayed throughout this short verse. Definitely a true Haiku. Do I detect a little Japanese blood in them veins. Hmmmmmmm! Great Job!!!!!!!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Love those exclamations points.
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Deepest meanings!
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Absolutely.........
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;^)
Comment from poetstar
Town Crier, Very good title, and such good words, and the picture is fabulous. Just great all around. Glad the leaves are virgin ones. Ha Ha. Have a great day. Love those yellow eyes.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Town Crier, Very good title, and such good words, and the picture is fabulous. Just great all around. Glad the leaves are virgin ones. Ha Ha. Have a great day. Love those yellow eyes.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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I debated about spelling it correctly, then decided against it for a reason I can't remember. Anyway, glad you like my virgin leaves. Took a while to come up with that idea.
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It was a great idea. I loved the entire poem.
Comment from Tom C. Adams
I am the eighteenth viewer it says. I probably can't add much to other reviews. Eight words, Spitfire. They answer the mail from a cadence standpoint, from the standpoint of the mythology, and from the standpoint of the message you are trying to send out. I enjoyed thinking about the all-knowing owl, and how many many different ways to think about the word "warning".
You really have a talent for this format...I remain very impressed.
Bet you didn't know this, Shari: It is from old Apache saying: "When the ancient ones think about you, your butt will itch".
swear to God
Tom C.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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I am the eighteenth viewer it says. I probably can't add much to other reviews. Eight words, Spitfire. They answer the mail from a cadence standpoint, from the standpoint of the mythology, and from the standpoint of the message you are trying to send out. I enjoyed thinking about the all-knowing owl, and how many many different ways to think about the word "warning".
You really have a talent for this format...I remain very impressed.
Bet you didn't know this, Shari: It is from old Apache saying: "When the ancient ones think about you, your butt will itch".
swear to God
Tom C.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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That's hysterical! Guess they never think about me. But now that you planted the thought in my mind, my butt will no doubt itch all the time! Thanks a heap. If I were single, I'd be looking for a scratcher.
Hugs,
Shari
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Say, Shari! We could collaborate(boy do I win on that one!)! I will take the threes, and you can do the five! Ready?:
"Itchy Butt,
You YOu You YOu YOu,
Wounded knee"
Heh heh!
what....
you don't like it?
what's wrong?
Okay never mind...take it down
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LMAO-- whoops! No more butt to scratch.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hey, spitfire - I was a 'town cryer' when I spilt my beer in the pub the other night - the tears rolled down my cheaks. LOL. Seriously, an excellent title and picture.
Perfect haiku format with 2 lines of inter-connected imagery of a snap-shot in time, followed by a clever satori. A top drawer haiku, IMHO.
Earl
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Hey, spitfire - I was a 'town cryer' when I spilt my beer in the pub the other night - the tears rolled down my cheaks. LOL. Seriously, an excellent title and picture.
Perfect haiku format with 2 lines of inter-connected imagery of a snap-shot in time, followed by a clever satori. A top drawer haiku, IMHO.
Earl
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Thanks Sir Earl. Love the fun you had with the title. Remember what mumsie always said "Don't cry over spilt milk -er- beer."
Comment from debsjubilantpoetry
Wow, so that's how a haiku should be. It's brilliant. Perfect syllable count. It's like you found the art and then wrote the poem to go with it. I also love your notes on this one; very interesting.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Wow, so that's how a haiku should be. It's brilliant. Perfect syllable count. It's like you found the art and then wrote the poem to go with it. I also love your notes on this one; very interesting.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Many myths about the owl. This one comes from Wales-- kind of neat if you see the pun in there. I always thought of them as a symbol of wisdom and was surprised when research turned up dark meanings to the poor bird. I love owls. Appreciate your comments on my ability to write these small pieces. I must have been Japanese in a past lifetime.
Comment from Realist101
OWLS...my favorites! Those and the moon...this is so cute...they say if you hear an owl call you will die soon. I heard one a couple of weeks ago. LOL! God help me. Nice work Shari! xoxo, susan
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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OWLS...my favorites! Those and the moon...this is so cute...they say if you hear an owl call you will die soon. I heard one a couple of weeks ago. LOL! God help me. Nice work Shari! xoxo, susan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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My favorites too! I collect them-- not the real thing, of course. I was surprised when my research turned up so many different beliefs. For me, an owl is a symbol of wisdom and I love their soft hoots in the night. xoxo to you back, Shari
Comment from Glasstruth
Your Author Notes were helpful in understanding. The picture, and the owl with yellow eyes fit what you wrote so perfectly. Those eyes were just staring at me as I read, especially like your metaphor, "virgin leaves" Les
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Your Author Notes were helpful in understanding. The picture, and the owl with yellow eyes fit what you wrote so perfectly. Those eyes were just staring at me as I read, especially like your metaphor, "virgin leaves" Les
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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The footnote is one of many myths surrounding the owl. Found it on line. I love owls and have a photo of one winking at me--it's right over my computer. My owl is a symbol of wisdom. Thanks for the review. I loved that picture too!
Comment from robyn corum
Sounds like the warning is a bit too late, eh? An I'm sure there is a half-naked girl running around with a shoe looking to knock an owl out of a tree. heehee
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Sounds like the warning is a bit too late, eh? An I'm sure there is a half-naked girl running around with a shoe looking to knock an owl out of a tree. heehee
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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There's am amazing bit of mythology attached to the owl, depending the country. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a fabulous classical haiku, Spitfire. I love the use of 'virgin leaves,' so aptly tied up with your author notes. I didn't know that legendary myth. Your chosen artwork also is perfect.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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This is a fabulous classical haiku, Spitfire. I love the use of 'virgin leaves,' so aptly tied up with your author notes. I didn't know that legendary myth. Your chosen artwork also is perfect.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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The myth sprung from Wales. Seems many countries have ascribed meanings to the owl. This one fit my purpose best.
