Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

You continue to do well with this, Ine. A sweet story of them playing in the snow. Holdng hands and kissing? Hmmm - an introduction to sex?

When the knew it, Mareng and Mara - when they knew it

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine
Am not going to tell what happens when LOL don't know myself yet.

Comment from TammyGail

Excellent

This was a great chapter sweetie
I think your doing very well with these
I enjoy reading them and Evan loves me to read them
To him.. So its a score :)
Great imagery as well
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Great to hear he still liles them.

Comment from rheabug

Excellent

This is a good story about the dragon children and their dogs. I love the picture that you used for this chapter in the ongoing series. Thank you for sharing Linda

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine.

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Excellent

i, they'll be at it soon! lol.
another lovely write, Dutchess Ine,
as only you can, wonderfully.
thank you for sharing.
warmly, xx, eph

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Glad you liked it. Don't know exactly when my Prince.

Comment from thebluestar

Good

Beautifully written. I love the idea that you have formed in your story, dragons and dogs, lovely concept. The writing is flowing nicely, but I am afraid that you have a couple of spelling mistakes and the odd grammatical mistake too. The one most comes to mind is "none of the dogs" which would suggest more than two, maybe you could try "neither of the dogs" instead. Just a thought. I wish you the best of luck with your sweet story. It is coming along nicely, and I hope that you wont be offended at my observation. Net

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Will change in neither and send hubby to an English course even though he comes from Scotland.

reply by thebluestar on 31-Oct-2011

You are so welcome. I have learnt from many talented writers and by being critiqued. Sometimes very cruelly, which I would never do. Lol send hubby to an English course. I am English, a good old Lancashire lass. Flat caps and whippets. Net

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

I try and never be cruel either. But your tips helped and I learn from these things hopefully.

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Hi Ine I loved the chapter of the fun in the snow and the ride with the dogs. It is vividly told and it was a pleasure to read. I loved the part when they see the love couple. Great write. Liefs Fia

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Good dialogue when they argue - it sounds genuine in its emotion
3 hours, 3 inches - write out three
We don't have any breaks either - brakes
Brooke :-)

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Thanks for the tips, will change.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, robina, a great job writing this chapter about mara and mareng and teaching the dogs how to pull the sled. and ending up in the bushes for their troubles. it was a fun chapter to read. one suggestion. put a note that sledge is the same thing as a sled. i heard of sled and sledding, i had to look up that sledge was also correct to use. also, i'd make it Throw snowballs, for one.

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011

Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine. Thanks for the tip, will change throw .