Senryu Provocations
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "angry cleats "Reflection on human behavior
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Comment from anderaj
I guess the Eagles are bored with their opponent?
I liked it. The words you use are very straightforward and reflect exactly what you're trying to say ... unless I misunderstood about the Eagles being bored.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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I guess the Eagles are bored with their opponent?
I liked it. The words you use are very straightforward and reflect exactly what you're trying to say ... unless I misunderstood about the Eagles being bored.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Well, I meant the birds overhead watching all this and thinking
It's so much nicer to be up here." I don't follow football but suspect a lot of teams are named after birds. Tried to think of other natural things -- maybe "chipmunks yawn?" Although I wanted something high that flies. "Tis a puzzlement!
Comment from Realist101
OH, I know...people go berserk over fooseball! LOL! I don't mind sports, I just can't get into it like some. This is a fun and to the point little haiku. I agree, who should enjoy getting rammed?? ") NOT me! I put my four-wheeler in the ditch last night! BACKWARDS! I may write about it...lol! HUG! Susan
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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OH, I know...people go berserk over fooseball! LOL! I don't mind sports, I just can't get into it like some. This is a fun and to the point little haiku. I agree, who should enjoy getting rammed?? ") NOT me! I put my four-wheeler in the ditch last night! BACKWARDS! I may write about it...lol! HUG! Susan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Glad you got the point. As did the birds. I think it's such a boring game, but not the first. That's golf.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I must say that I haven't much been into football but when we moved and that's all we really got on the weekends I learned to enjoy it and now I watch it every week.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I must say that I haven't much been into football but when we moved and that's all we really got on the weekends I learned to enjoy it and now I watch it every week.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I went to high school games but more interested in watching the cheerleaders and half time show! Thanks for reading.
Comment from Judian James
You're a football fan??? Oh, my husband would like you! lol
I hate the game, because they keep stopping to talk about a five second play for five minutes!! well done, SF!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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You're a football fan??? Oh, my husband would like you! lol
I hate the game, because they keep stopping to talk about a five second play for five minutes!! well done, SF!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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No, I hate football for the same reason you do--that's why the title. Fortunately, my hubby can take it or leave it. I was tempted to end the poem: housewives yawn.
Comment from Maustin
Nice little write that flows very well. The artwork compliments your work. Vivid words used. Good job with genre. I especially like the last line.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Nice little write that flows very well. The artwork compliments your work. Vivid words used. Good job with genre. I especially like the last line.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thanks M. Can you tell I'm not a football fan?
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So welcome S. No bc I am not either. *;). Never would not have known.
Comment from TammyGail
Da Bears .... Lol
Oh I love me some football my ex husband
used to play for University Of Illinois
Oh I miss that shithead sometimes but not all the time ..
Lol Great little poem :)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Da Bears .... Lol
Oh I love me some football my ex husband
used to play for University Of Illinois
Oh I miss that shithead sometimes but not all the time ..
Lol Great little poem :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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I came close to writing the last line: housewives yawn. But a lot of women like the game-- not me. Three hours wasted catching a pigskin. Thanks for the review.
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Lmao.. :)
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Football, the sport of kings - well no, but sounds good. I like the unusual slant about the eagles yawning. Made me smile. One of my three sons played at the College level, University of Illinois, so I know the sport but not crazy in love with it. In fact in this poem I side with the eagles.;) Good work.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Football, the sport of kings - well no, but sounds good. I like the unusual slant about the eagles yawning. Made me smile. One of my three sons played at the College level, University of Illinois, so I know the sport but not crazy in love with it. In fact in this poem I side with the eagles.;) Good work.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Me too. I almost wrote the last line "housewives yawn" but wanted to stick with nature.
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Good choice. E.
Comment from Deb Damone
Ya know up until 2 moths ago i would not have had any interst in football comments...however now one of my teenage gransons is a football player. It is amazing how you begin to havea wider perspective of sports when the grandkids are playing....so....because of that...I get this...much as you probably think I should anyway:-) Nice job
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Ya know up until 2 moths ago i would not have had any interst in football comments...however now one of my teenage gransons is a football player. It is amazing how you begin to havea wider perspective of sports when the grandkids are playing....so....because of that...I get this...much as you probably think I should anyway:-) Nice job
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thanks Deb. That would definitely make you more interested. My son played soccer so I took some interest in that.
Comment from MizKat
Spitfire - A lot of people like football games. Your poem about it is neat, but my favorite line is the title . . . "And this is fun"? I wonder the same thing. Kat
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Spitfire - A lot of people like football games. Your poem about it is neat, but my favorite line is the title . . . "And this is fun"? I wonder the same thing. Kat
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Glad you liked the title. I was thinking how eagles are enjoying life and probably looking down on these players piling on top of one another. That would be their reaction.
