A Book of Songs
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Barbers Refrain (Part 1)"Metre ... Ballads & Slant Rhyme
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Comment from JLR
A great poem with a universal theme, the stories heard and told, the habit of never changing barbers for a lifetime in most cases. The barbershop has been one of man's last dominions, for the most part! Good Success!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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A great poem with a universal theme, the stories heard and told, the habit of never changing barbers for a lifetime in most cases. The barbershop has been one of man's last dominions, for the most part! Good Success!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Excellent glad you could enjoy it was a pleasure to write this one when I did and it still feels the same to me a classic Bic. glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Peter Gardner
Very well done. Reads like a song. Do you have a melody for it? Many times the songs I write come into my head with a melody already in place. I just don't write music as far as composition goes so they sit. How about you?
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Very well done. Reads like a song. Do you have a melody for it? Many times the songs I write come into my head with a melody already in place. I just don't write music as far as composition goes so they sit. How about you?
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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I never work in tunes except try in the poets song I often thought it would be good sung as a barbershop quartet lol. I never play the instruments though I do love to hear them and have a good ear for them ... many thanks glad you enjoyed.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem/song seems to say barbers started out as medics in wartime maybe. This teen seems ready to spend a lot of money. It seems he is a bit lazy too. Not willing to go to other places that specialize in tatoos and piercing. Probably to match the picture.
By the way, I looked up 'teld'. It is the form used in Yorkshire area of England according to the internet. And the internet is always right, ha ha.
Keep writng
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This poem/song seems to say barbers started out as medics in wartime maybe. This teen seems ready to spend a lot of money. It seems he is a bit lazy too. Not willing to go to other places that specialize in tatoos and piercing. Probably to match the picture.
By the way, I looked up 'teld'. It is the form used in Yorkshire area of England according to the internet. And the internet is always right, ha ha.
Keep writng
Joan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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well believe it or not thats how they started out as medics and doctors of a sort and thats why they used the red and white pole bandages and blood telt is Scots though i think with some accents localised it could be teld ...
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That's a good historic but much unknown fact.
Joan
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well in the history of the barbers it actually should be well known ...
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Gentlemen what are you for? You know what we do,
The red and white is our coat of arms!". Because you portrayed barbers like they were soldiers which I thought was great!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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My favorite part was, "Gentlemen what are you for? You know what we do,
The red and white is our coat of arms!". Because you portrayed barbers like they were soldiers which I thought was great!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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... well when your in my barbers you got to sit and wait in turn as they call you forward and then your for the chop more like executioners lol.
Comment from Ambition26
That's cool man, like the story, I did not know that tradition excised, you write good it takes your story to another level.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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That's cool man, like the story, I did not know that tradition excised, you write good it takes your story to another level.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thanks Ambition26.
Comment from babylonia
i did research on the barber pole before how they would plaster the bloodied towels to it and that's what gave it the color. made me smile. LOL there is a barbershop in town that has one. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2011
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i did research on the barber pole before how they would plaster the bloodied towels to it and that's what gave it the color. made me smile. LOL there is a barbershop in town that has one. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2011
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Many thanks Barbara...
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you are very welcome.
Comment from animatqua
I really liked the history lesson wrapped up in this poem. The story was one I knew, vaguely. That is, barbers were blood letters and those who bound it up.
I'm glad you put the rhyme and the rhythm out there to emphasize the content and make it memorable.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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I really liked the history lesson wrapped up in this poem. The story was one I knew, vaguely. That is, barbers were blood letters and those who bound it up.
I'm glad you put the rhyme and the rhythm out there to emphasize the content and make it memorable.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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Excellent, thanks much.
Comment from poetparman
Interesting way of telling a trip to the barber shop. Our shops in US had the old barber poles. Yes it was badge like the coat of arms. You didn't have to read the sign over the door because you knew what the Barber's Pole was for. Thanks for sharing a delightful view of the Barber Shop.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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Interesting way of telling a trip to the barber shop. Our shops in US had the old barber poles. Yes it was badge like the coat of arms. You didn't have to read the sign over the door because you knew what the Barber's Pole was for. Thanks for sharing a delightful view of the Barber Shop.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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Excellent keep a look out for part 2 and 3 they develop as you will see....
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bicpen
I like the cadence of your barber shop poem
So that is how a guy feels when he get his hair cut
(getting pampered)
fun to read.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Hello Bicpen
I like the cadence of your barber shop poem
So that is how a guy feels when he get his hair cut
(getting pampered)
fun to read.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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They try there best...lol.
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smiles Bicpen,
hope to read more of your work.
Gert
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Many thanks...
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Charlie Crewes
"Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm." Excellent. the artwork is certainly eye-catching! Brought me back to my childhood, sitting in the barber's chair giving him instructions and then watching him proceed to give me the same haircut that everyone else received. Not even close to what I desired, but most of my hair was gone and my father was happy. Very well done-fun to read.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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"Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm." Excellent. the artwork is certainly eye-catching! Brought me back to my childhood, sitting in the barber's chair giving him instructions and then watching him proceed to give me the same haircut that everyone else received. Not even close to what I desired, but most of my hair was gone and my father was happy. Very well done-fun to read.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Excellent, glad you enjoyed...
