Comment from cercie

Excellent

Great piece in 5-7-5 form. The meaning is clear the words tell a great story and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing
cerice

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011

thank you cercie....i appreciate this,coming from you. you are such a great writer too.....and i am sure i can learn alot from you. thank you once again.

reply by cercie on 20-Oct-2011

You have made me blush but I assure you I am honoured.
Chris

Comment from hdnelson13

Excellent

I just really, really like this. It's not contrived or confusing. The emotion is clear, and the idea of "clouds turning white" is just very evocative.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011

thank you very much for this review....i am glad you find it good...i feel good reading this from you.

Comment from sense.life

Excellent

Feelings of regret and remorse over-take most everyone's soul at times. This poem serves as a symbolic gesture to the notion of desiring to go back and fix wrongs! Simple put! Good job!

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011

thank you very much....i feel elated.

Comment from oNray

Excellent

You did quite well, playing by the rules. Your poem was good not choppy and not rushed. I am no friend to rules in writing,but you produced a good poem and colored between the lines- we all win!!!

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011

thank you! i feel elated.......

Comment from jpafford

Good

This approaches a very good message but the last line is a bit short of a good fit..perhaps something like

my clouds will turn white

joanne

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2011

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011

thank you for pointing that out....will put that in mind next time. i'm grateful.