Interlude
An Idyll Poem85 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
To kiss in a place like this is to kiss in God's Cathedral. It is more beautiful than any stained glass windows. Your poem did this picture justice. Good work.
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To kiss in a place like this is to kiss in God's Cathedral. It is more beautiful than any stained glass windows. Your poem did this picture justice. Good work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
Comment from ~ My Dear Heart ~
First, the picture chosen is lovely and enhances your beautiful words perfectly, I think this poem is awesome and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.. Constance
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First, the picture chosen is lovely and enhances your beautiful words perfectly, I think this poem is awesome and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.. Constance
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
Comment from Robin Priebe
Hi Interlude. A lovely poem that has good rhyme. A written entr©e into flowing enjoyment, you gave a privileged insight into the passion of young love.
If you write in iambic rhythm, it is important to maintain that rhythm throughout the poem. I believe that a poem is written and then crafted. If you have difficulty with a line of verse, carry on your poem, capture the creative 'juices' and then revisit the line later.
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Hi Interlude. A lovely poem that has good rhyme. A written entr©e into flowing enjoyment, you gave a privileged insight into the passion of young love.
If you write in iambic rhythm, it is important to maintain that rhythm throughout the poem. I believe that a poem is written and then crafted. If you have difficulty with a line of verse, carry on your poem, capture the creative 'juices' and then revisit the line later.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
this is rather lovely,
your words have such
great imagery and flow
smoothly, as does the
rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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this is rather lovely,
your words have such
great imagery and flow
smoothly, as does the
rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Margaret, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from bowls
An idyllic picture, indeed. Every detail of your poem presents of beautiful picture of harmony and bliss. Not only is nature presented as a perfect place here, but the relationship depicted is also ideal. The rhyming couplets supply an order to the poem which seems much in keeping with your idyllic theme.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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An idyllic picture, indeed. Every detail of your poem presents of beautiful picture of harmony and bliss. Not only is nature presented as a perfect place here, but the relationship depicted is also ideal. The rhyming couplets supply an order to the poem which seems much in keeping with your idyllic theme.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thanks for reading and reviewing bowls...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from TammyGail
I loved this poem it was well written
Loved your passion filled words as well as the style
Your imagery was perfect
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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I loved this poem it was well written
Loved your passion filled words as well as the style
Your imagery was perfect
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thanks TammyGail, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from words
Love your write on love's passion.
I especially liked:A light breeze caresses my sun kissed skin,
I meet your eyes, desire stirs within.
You capture my mouth in a lover`s kiss,
And I fall into passion`s sweet abyss.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Love your write on love's passion.
I especially liked:A light breeze caresses my sun kissed skin,
I meet your eyes, desire stirs within.
You capture my mouth in a lover`s kiss,
And I fall into passion`s sweet abyss.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much words, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written, lazy poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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This is a very well written, lazy poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
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You're welcome.
Comment from the old guy
Been there, done that! But it was a long, long time ago with a girl who is not my wife of fifty years. I had almost forgot that afternoon!Thank you for bringing it back to the surface, and so beautifully! Now this old man must stop writting this or he will not be able to see through the tears of time.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Been there, done that! But it was a long, long time ago with a girl who is not my wife of fifty years. I had almost forgot that afternoon!Thank you for bringing it back to the surface, and so beautifully! Now this old man must stop writting this or he will not be able to see through the tears of time.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2011
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Ohhhh....your words were so touching...time speeds by and before you know it you are looking back at memories...thanks so much for your words...blessings.
Comment from Bellydanser
This is a lovely idyll poem for the contest. Your meter and rhyme are very strong and it sets a beautiful scene. I would encourage you, though, to find new phrases to describe things we see so often in poetry that we hear them again and again. Perhaps find a way to make the descriptions fresh. Still, your mechanics are very good.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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This is a lovely idyll poem for the contest. Your meter and rhyme are very strong and it sets a beautiful scene. I would encourage you, though, to find new phrases to describe things we see so often in poetry that we hear them again and again. Perhaps find a way to make the descriptions fresh. Still, your mechanics are very good.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Bellydanser, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your suggestions...blessings.
