Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Where I Go, Will You Follow?"Case Studies of Hauntings
64 total reviews
Comment from Bellringer
Bev, Another fascinating installment. Very good opening that shows Catherine's feelings and thus making her a sympathetic character. I like the lighting effects while Mia is doing her thing. You maintain the tension and mystery quite well. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
  |
Bev, Another fascinating installment. Very good opening that shows Catherine's feelings and thus making her a sympathetic character. I like the lighting effects while Mia is doing her thing. You maintain the tension and mystery quite well. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
-
Thank you so much, Hector. I really appreciate you telling me what worked for you in this chapter. That is really generous and most helpful, my friend. Warmest regards, Bev
-
You're welcome, Bev. Keep up the great story-telling. Blessings, Hector
Comment from Magic Wand
You packed a lot into this chapter. I love the interplay between characters, and the hopefulness imbued for the sad victim of the horrible crime. I am hoping she will get peace and the investigation will be successfully mastered without too many injuries to the parties.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
 |
You packed a lot into this chapter. I love the interplay between characters, and the hopefulness imbued for the sad victim of the horrible crime. I am hoping she will get peace and the investigation will be successfully mastered without too many injuries to the parties.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Magic Wand. I really appreciate you taking time to read my chapter. Your support and extreme generosity is really touching. I believe Catherine has suffered enough...I want her to find the peace she so deserves. Your thoughts and insights are so helpful! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from psalmist
You left me looking forward to the next chapter. This has excitement, intrigue, and I hope Catherine will eventually be granted peace. Well done. Linda
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
|
You left me looking forward to the next chapter. This has excitement, intrigue, and I hope Catherine will eventually be granted peace. Well done. Linda
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Linda. Thanks so much for reading my chapter and letting me know what you liked. Your generosity and support are much appreciated, my friend. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from adewpearl
Most effective character development and vivid descriptive detail.
pierced the pall of decay - I love the alliteration in that phrase, the strong verb choice and the strong emotion
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
|
Most effective character development and vivid descriptive detail.
pierced the pall of decay - I love the alliteration in that phrase, the strong verb choice and the strong emotion
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
-
Thank you so much, Brooke. I did strive for better character description, so your noting of that really tickles me. I really appreciate your generosity. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from JW
This chapter is another excellent addition to your story. And the way it ended, one is definitely left wondering about the information the books contain.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
|
This chapter is another excellent addition to your story. And the way it ended, one is definitely left wondering about the information the books contain.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Jonathon. Thanks for letting me know what you thought about the chapter. I appreciate the insight. You are always so generous! Bev
Comment from Tom C. Adams
Nice job, Bev, of furthering the action in this well-conceived chapter. Especially in the dialogue. I mean, even nasty-Chas get's to remind everyone of his unreasonable behavior.
I liked how you brought the issue of Emma's physical problem to conclusion: everyone stand back and let Mia do her thing. And towards the end of the chapter, in the library, you used Mia again to advance the plot by injecting risk into a simple stack of books on a marked up chair. Bet we are not done with that. And the title of the book on top - how appropriate!
So where to now, Bev? I am ready to inhale the next bit of action!
Tom C.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
|
Nice job, Bev, of furthering the action in this well-conceived chapter. Especially in the dialogue. I mean, even nasty-Chas get's to remind everyone of his unreasonable behavior.
I liked how you brought the issue of Emma's physical problem to conclusion: everyone stand back and let Mia do her thing. And towards the end of the chapter, in the library, you used Mia again to advance the plot by injecting risk into a simple stack of books on a marked up chair. Bet we are not done with that. And the title of the book on top - how appropriate!
So where to now, Bev? I am ready to inhale the next bit of action!
Tom C.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
-
Hi, buddy. Thank you for your awesome review!! You've let me know what works and that is so helpful. I'm glad that the opening wasn't a yawn. Did I mention to you that I do paranormal investigating on the side? Anyway, been working to rid a family of a nasty ghost - done everything outside of bringing in a priest because they have no religious affiliation. Well, we did an EVP session recently to get clear on some things...and have a distinct voice in several sections of the tape. And this was in daylight - with no fancy computer. Been doing this for about ten years now and the concrete nature of the contacts, as well as clarity, has gone up several notches during that time. I've no doubt about life after death based on my experiences. Again, thanks so much for your generous support. You are a lovely friend. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from robina1978
This really reads like supernatural fiction.
Have never read it, but seen the occasional film.
This is another god chapter I think.
Held my attention all the way.
Seemed realistic in this genre.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
|
This really reads like supernatural fiction.
Have never read it, but seen the occasional film.
This is another god chapter I think.
Held my attention all the way.
Seemed realistic in this genre.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Ine. Thank you so much for your generous and supportive review. I'm glad you liked my chapter and thanks for noting that it feels authentic. That's really encouraging. Kindest regards, Bev
-
Yes reads good and is well written in my opinion. Warm regards, Ine
-
You're so sweet! XX Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
Bev, I've enjoyed this book from the start, and with each chapter, my interest and loyalty to stay with it grows! I love the characters, your dialogue is great, and the action is what keeps my interest.
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
|
Bev, I've enjoyed this book from the start, and with each chapter, my interest and loyalty to stay with it grows! I love the characters, your dialogue is great, and the action is what keeps my interest.
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Karyn. Thanks so much for your loyalty, my friend. Your interest and words warm my heart, especially given your own excellent storytelling abilities. I appreciate you! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
More paranormal intrigue, Bev. I think I told you that I love this paranormal stuff. I'm not sure I'd have the courage to do something like this though. If I saw a flash of light, I'd probably be off like a flash! Wondering about the strange marks and the satanic books. Good build up and a sweet cliffhanger. Look forward to more, my friend.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
|
More paranormal intrigue, Bev. I think I told you that I love this paranormal stuff. I'm not sure I'd have the courage to do something like this though. If I saw a flash of light, I'd probably be off like a flash! Wondering about the strange marks and the satanic books. Good build up and a sweet cliffhanger. Look forward to more, my friend.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
-
Thanks so much, Av. I really appreciate your supportive comments and am glad to hear the chapter 'worked' for you. Sweeet! Bev
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Bev
A good addition to the book, lots of interesting detail.
Not as gripping as vicious invisible dogs - but I'm insatiable!
Made me ponder about where my treasures will go when I kick the bucket! I've got lots of books - my younger brother has never read a book in his life. I can see mine ending up down the tip!! Think I'll do what Shakespeare did, put them in the coffin with me. lol
Ron xox
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
|
Hi Bev
A good addition to the book, lots of interesting detail.
Not as gripping as vicious invisible dogs - but I'm insatiable!
Made me ponder about where my treasures will go when I kick the bucket! I've got lots of books - my younger brother has never read a book in his life. I can see mine ending up down the tip!! Think I'll do what Shakespeare did, put them in the coffin with me. lol
Ron xox
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
-
Hi, Ron. My Lord, do you have a crypt waiting for you? Now, that's creepy stuff. I've only gone as far as a will and I can tell you my pen shook mightily before I signed it LOL. Thanks, as always, for your great review and support, my friend. Appreciate it! xx Bev
-
True story. We have a family grave with great-grandma to my mom in it. When I arranged for an inscription on the monument for my mom, the guy said would I like my name on it too! Be cheaper he said - we can add the date later. I declined!!! xox
-
Creepy factor 100+!! Hey, here's a thought, why don't you do a one act script around your experience? You'd do a great job with the oily undertaker. Hehehe
-
I'll slip it in somewhere. lol
