Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Where I Go, Will You Follow?"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from robyn corum
1.) I think he'll do something terrible to her because of me. I know what he's capable (of)--you've no idea."
2.) left Catherine Bellingham with only one hope: finding her son and helping him cross over in the hands of God.
--> I know I'm coming in late, but...what son? You told us about the marriage and the affair - but no baby. (??)
VERY well-written. I enjoyed this chapter very much and will be looking forward to more!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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1.) I think he'll do something terrible to her because of me. I know what he's capable (of)--you've no idea."
2.) left Catherine Bellingham with only one hope: finding her son and helping him cross over in the hands of God.
--> I know I'm coming in late, but...what son? You told us about the marriage and the affair - but no baby. (??)
VERY well-written. I enjoyed this chapter very much and will be looking forward to more!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi, Robyn
I really appreciate your suggestions and insights into this chapter. Though it has been addressed in previous chapters, I have added information on Catherine's pregnancy at the time of her death. One of those things I should've considered myself :).
Thanks so much!
Bev
Comment from CT_Martin
I thought the story was very well written. Great characters. It felt like I was reading some true crime story rather than a work of fiction. Really nice!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I thought the story was very well written. Great characters. It felt like I was reading some true crime story rather than a work of fiction. Really nice!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi, CT
Thank you so much for this delightful review. I really appreciate you choosing to read my chapter and your very generous review.
:) Bev
Comment from Cindy Warren
It looks like there's going to be quite a battle coming up. At least the team will have a little help.
EMF (electromagnetic field) I'd get rid of the information in the brackets and add it to the footnotes to make the story flow more smoothly.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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It looks like there's going to be quite a battle coming up. At least the team will have a little help.
EMF (electromagnetic field) I'd get rid of the information in the brackets and add it to the footnotes to make the story flow more smoothly.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Hi, Cindy. I'm going to keep your suggestion for when I do more editing of this chapter. I'm planning on doing extensive editing of all the chapters, so things may change. Your help is very much appreciated. Thanks! :) Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Ooooh you have some neat ways of writing this story. I love some of your expressions "cripes" in particular. LOL Anxious to read on.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Ooooh you have some neat ways of writing this story. I love some of your expressions "cripes" in particular. LOL Anxious to read on.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Cripes used to be something my father said a lot. Thanks so much, Joy. It's really so very generous of you to take time to review each chapter. You are a most gracious and classy lady. Hugs, Bev
Comment from closetpoetjester
Great chapter Bevski. Mia sure has the healing hands and is a well travelled psychic thats for sure. Excellent continuation of the storyline and incorporation of Mia's powers for both healing with good, while defending evil.
Catherine obviously is impressed with Mia's talents and looks like the girls are starting to work together.
Nice background on Catherine...it threw me for starters because I just thought it was part of the story being told...didn't realise for a minute it was from her point of view. Maybe selecting another font might differentiate this from the main telling of the story. Just a thought.
Loved it though and I am starting to warm to some of the characters. Nice to know Emma is on the mend aswell.
Great dialogue and solid plot and I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Cheers closet xoxo
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Great chapter Bevski. Mia sure has the healing hands and is a well travelled psychic thats for sure. Excellent continuation of the storyline and incorporation of Mia's powers for both healing with good, while defending evil.
Catherine obviously is impressed with Mia's talents and looks like the girls are starting to work together.
Nice background on Catherine...it threw me for starters because I just thought it was part of the story being told...didn't realise for a minute it was from her point of view. Maybe selecting another font might differentiate this from the main telling of the story. Just a thought.
Loved it though and I am starting to warm to some of the characters. Nice to know Emma is on the mend aswell.
Great dialogue and solid plot and I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Cheers closet xoxo
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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I thank you so much for your time and interest in my book, closet. Your comments are excellent and I will seriously consider your suggestion about the telling of Catherine's side of the story - I agree it can be confusing. There will be more on each individual as the chapters proceed, so I hope you learn to like them even more lol! You are such a generous lady, closet. XX Bev
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writingfundimension,
This is very well written. Interesting characters, vivid discriptions, good dialouge, and a tension hook of mystery to lead you to read more.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Dear Writingfundimension,
This is very well written. Interesting characters, vivid discriptions, good dialouge, and a tension hook of mystery to lead you to read more.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Greetings, Winslow. Thank you so much for your exceptional review! It helps to know what works, so I especially appreciate you sharing that. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from TammyGail
This was a great read you pulled me in the beginning and held my att till the last word.. I have never read any of these chapters but do plan on making time. I loved it well written with a great storyline. It was a pleasure thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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This was a great read you pulled me in the beginning and held my att till the last word.. I have never read any of these chapters but do plan on making time. I loved it well written with a great storyline. It was a pleasure thanks for sharing
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Hi, TammyGail. Thank you so much for your interest and time. I really appreciate you telling me what you liked about the chapter. Most generous of you! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Chuck23
This is a very interesting chapter to your story. You held my attention throughout. I look forward to reading more of this novel in the future.
One item I wanted to bring to your attention:
"at which time Luke and I will fill you in what's transpired."
I thought maybe you could use an additional word like "on" or "with" to make this sentence read easier.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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This is a very interesting chapter to your story. You held my attention throughout. I look forward to reading more of this novel in the future.
One item I wanted to bring to your attention:
"at which time Luke and I will fill you in what's transpired."
I thought maybe you could use an additional word like "on" or "with" to make this sentence read easier.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much, Chuck23. You are absolutely right on with your suggestion - thanks! I really appreciate your interest and generous support. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from Misrael
Even though I don't believe in ghosts I do believe that Satan and his fallen angels impersonate the dead. This is really creepy and gives me the chilles.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Even though I don't believe in ghosts I do believe that Satan and his fallen angels impersonate the dead. This is really creepy and gives me the chilles.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Hi, Misrael. I actually share your belief in the ability of demonic entities to mimic dead people. There's quite a bit of anecdotal material to that effect. Thank you for stopping by and offering your insight. I much appreciate the interest and generous review. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
Paranormal activity is often romanticize in film and books. This is very well written with an interesting them and a smooth flow of words.
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You have a much stronger read than the original post. I was concern about the man they left behind to "clean-up the mess." The books in the chair showed someone was deep into the dark occult. I was very impresses with this post. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
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Paranormal activity is often romanticize in film and books. This is very well written with an interesting them and a smooth flow of words.
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You have a much stronger read than the original post. I was concern about the man they left behind to "clean-up the mess." The books in the chair showed someone was deep into the dark occult. I was very impresses with this post. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2011
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Thank you so much for your interest, charlie. I appreciate the generous support. Kind regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
